Our Family Travel Blog #46 : The Astronomical Clock in Prague Our Family Travel Blog #46: The Astronomical Clock in Prague

As we walked across the Charles Bridge, it finally began to drizzle. As we walked across the Charles Bridge, it finally began to drizzle.

The original sentence was grammatically correct. My feedback is coming from a story-telling perspective. This is the first sentence of your blog entry, so that makes it one of the most important sentences for giving your reader context about what this story is about. It's a good idea to focus on using this time to introduce the setting of your story, (the Charles Bridge in Prague, I'm assuming) so people don't feel like they missed the opening and have been dropped into the middle of the story without context. The sentence you wrote is an excellent connecting sentence (or ending sentence, since you used the word "finally") for your story, but maybe isn't strong enough as the opening sentence because it doesn't feel like there is a proper introduction for the reader as to what is going on. "Today, my family and I decided to visit landmarks in Prague." would make a stronger opening sentence because it introduces the reader to your story's context. Then, you can follow up by describing what the area was like (it began to drizzle as we walked across).

Once we entered the Old Town, souvenir shops and restaurants lined the streets, which were crowded with tourists. Once we entered the Old Town, souvenir shops and restaurants lined the streets crowded with tourists.

Excellent descriptive sentence, this helps the story feel more vibrant. The grammatical structure using "which were" was correct, but removing it adds more impact to the story telling without losing accuracy.

Our next destination was the Astronomical Clock, one of Prague’s most famous landmarks. Our next destination was the Astronomical Clock, one of Prague’s most famous landmarks.

Excellent introductory sentence to the next section of your story. You tell us where you're going and why without forcing the reader to make guesses.

V, our Hungarian friend, took the lead and guided us through the city. V, our Hungarian friend, took the lead and guided us through the city.

A+, no corrections grammatically or stylistically.

I had thought it would be an easy walk from the Charles Bridge, but the winding lanes of the Old Town were far more complicated than we had expected, and we had trouble finding our way. I had thought it would be an easy walk from the Charles Bridge, but the winding lanes of the Old Town were far more complicated than we had expected, and we had trouble finding our way.

A+, no corrections. This sentence has good literary impact.

Although I had walked through these streets before, that was fifteen years earlierago. Although I had walked through these streets before, that was fifteen years ago.

Although I had walked through these streets before, that was fifteen years earlier and my memories of this place have become vague. Although I had walked through these streets before, that was fifteen years earlier and my memories of this place have become vague.

This sentence was grammatically correct, but stylistically, it feels like the thought expressed was incomplete. Connecting the first thought of the second sentence to here instead of there would make the idea expressed by this sentence feel complete without losing accuracy to your story.

Although I had walked through these streets before, that washad been fifteen years earlier. Although I had walked through these streets before, that had been fifteen years earlier.

"had been" feels a little more natural here to match the "I had" earlier in the sentence, but this is nitpicky.

My memories of the place became vague, and, in the end, I simply followed behind V. My memories of the place became vague and, in the end, I simply followed behind V.

My memories of the place became vague, and iIn the end, I simply followed behind V. In the end, I simply followed behind V.

Just an edit to match the feedback on the previous sentence.

My memories of the place had becaome vague, and in the end I simply followed behind V. My memories of the place had become vague, and in the end I simply followed behind V.

"became vague" sort of implies they became vague in the moment where you were walking around the town, but since it's a state your memories are in that had developed earlier, it's better to say "had become".