Feb. 10, 2024
I went to Sapporo Snow Festival.
I wrote about it in my last post and I'm going to write about the continuation.
The temperature at night was around - 10 C.
I was wearing a jacket, scarf and beanie, so I didn't really feel cold.
However, my face felt really cold because it was exposed on the cold air.
There were many beautiful snow sculptures in the festival venue.
Some of them were huge like five meters high.
There were also some anime character's sculptures like Jujutsu Kaisen, Haikyu, and Lucky Star.
Most of the sculptures were lit up at night, and also cool sound effect adding, so they were fantastic!
I wasn't able to write the last sentence well, so could you please change it to sound natural?
I would be appreciate if you could help me to sound more natural, even if you have to change whole sentences.
私は、札幌雪祭りに行きました。
前回の投稿で、そのことを書きました、そして続きを書きます。
夜は気温がー10度くらいでした。
ジャケットを着てマフラーをしてニット帽をかぶっていたので、あまり寒さは感じませんでした。
でも顔は冷たい空気にさらされていたので、とても冷たかったです。
雪祭り会場にはたくさんの素晴らしい雪の彫刻がありました。
高さ5メートルくらいの大きな彫刻もありました。
呪術廻戦、ハイキュー、らき☆すたなどのアニメキャラクターの彫刻もありました。
夜には、ほとんどの彫刻がライトアップされ、音響効果も加わって、幻想的な雰囲気でした。
最後の文章が上手く書けなかったので、自然な文章に直してもらえますか?
全部の文章を変えても構いませんので、自然に聞こえるように直してもらえっると嬉しいです。
Sapporo Snow Festival (43)
I went to the Sapporo Snow Festival.
I wrote about it in my last post, and I'm going to write about the continuation.continue it here.
The temperature at night was around - 10 C.
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I was wearing a jacket, scarf and beanie, so I didn't really feel the cold.
However, my face felt really cold because it was exposed ton the cold air.
There were many beautiful snow sculptures inat the festival venue.
Some of them were huge, like five meters high.
There were also some anime character's sculptures like Jujutsu Kaisen, Haikyu, and Lucky Star.
Most of the sculptures were lit up at night, and also had cool sound effects addinged, so they were fantastic!
Alternatively: Most of the sculptures were lit up at night, and had cool sound effects playing, so they were fantastic!
I wasn't able to write the last sentence well, so could you please change it to sound natural?
I would be appreciate if you could help me to sound more natural, even if you have to change whole sentences.
Sapporo Snow Festival (43)
I went to the Sapporo Snow Festival.
I wrote about it in my last post and I'm going to write about the continuation.
The temperature at night was around - 10 C. I was wearing a jacket, scarf and beanie, so I didn't really feel cold.
However, my face felt really cold because it was exposed ton the cold air.
There were many beautiful snow sculptures in the festival venue.
Some of them were huge, like five meters high.
There were also some anime character's’ sculptures like Jujutsu Kaisen, Haikyu, and Lucky Star.
Most of the sculptures were lit up at night, and alsohad cool sound effect addings, so they were fantastic!
I wasn't able to write the last sentence well, so could you please change it to sound natural?
I would be appreciate it if you could help me to sound more natural, even if you have to change whole sentences.
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Great writing! Sounds like it was a really cool festival.
Sapporo Snow Festival
I went to the Sapporo Snow Festival.
I wrote about it in my last post and I'm going to write about /the continuation.
The temperature at night was around - 10 C.
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I was wearing a jacket, scarf and beanie, so I didn't really feel cold.
-10 C is also fine.
I don't think there's an agreed upon way to format temperatures in English anyway. ^^;
However, my face felt really cold because it was exposed ton the cold air.
There were many beautiful snow sculptures inat the festival venue.
"In" is grammatically fine, but sounds like you were indoors for this.
Some of them were huge, like five meters high.
There were also some sculptures of anime character's sculptures like Jujutsu Kaisen, Haikyu, and Lucky Star.
Most of the sculptures were lit up at night, and alsowith cool sound effects addinged, so they were fantastic!
Or "..., and cool sound effects were added, so..."
I wasn't able to write the last sentence well, so could you please change it to sound natural?
Of course! The kind of sentence you wanted to make can be tricky to form because you have two ideas: "sculptures were lit up" and "sound effects were added." I tried to make it more natural.
I would be appreciate if you could help me to sound more natural, even if you have to change whole sentences.
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I think you have a lovely writing style!
I've heard about the Sapporo Snow Festival. It sounds like a really exciting experience. It's nice you had an opportunity to go, and thank you for sharing your experience with us!
I went to the Sapporo Snow Festival.
I wrote about it in my last post and I'm going to continue writeing about the continuationit here.
The temperature at night was around - 10 C.
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I was wearing a jacket, scarf and beanie, so I didn't really feel cold.
However, my face felt really cold because it was exposed ton the cold air.
There were many beautiful snow sculptures inat the festival venue.
Some of them were huge, like five meters high.
There were also some anime character's sculptures like Jujutsu Kaisen, Haikyu, and Lucky Star.
Most of the sculptures were lit up at night, and alsothey also had cool sound effect adding, sos. I thought that they were really fantastic!
I wasn't able to write the last sentence well, so could you please change it to sound natural?
I would be appreciate if you could help me to sound more natural, even if you have to change whole sentences.
Feedback
Good work 👍 I want to go there one day✨when I went to 大通り公園、it was in July so it was like 25C
Sapporo Snow Festival
I went to the Sapporo Snow Festival.
I wrote about it in my last post and I'm going to write more about ithe continuation.
The temperature at night was around - 10 C. I was wearing a jacket, scarf and beanie, so I didn't really feel cold.
However, my face felt really cold because it was exposed ton the cold air.
There were many beautiful snow sculptures in the festival venue.
Some of them were huge, like five meters high.
There were also some anime character's’ sculptures like Jujutsu Kaisen, Haikyu, and Lucky Star.
Most of the sculptures were lit up at night, and there were also cool sound effect addings, so they were fantastic!
I wasn't able to write the last sentence well, so could you please change it to sound natural?
I would be appreciate it if you could help me to sound more natural, even if you have to change whole sentences.
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