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March 24, 2023

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Sakura Trip with My Parents

My family had hardly gone on a trip together until last year. It wasn't that we can't afford to travel or don't like to do. The reason is that my parents were satisfied with daily life without travel, and I usually spent the weekends with my friends. Moreover, we had lived under the same roof so that we didn't feel like traveling together. Since I left my parents' house last year, I have occasionally felt loneliness and felt like return the favor. I would like to make fun memories while my parents are still in good shape.
Hirosaki is located in northern tip of Honshu island, and is not popular destination other than spring. It is well known for beautiful cherry blossom with an old castle so that a great number of people including travel agency compete each other to reserve hotels and bullet train seats from Tokyo. I have been longing for visiting there, so I decided to take me parents with me. Fortunately, I could get the ticket and reservation for my family. We will have a fun time next month.

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Sakura Tripeeing Cherry Blossoms with My Parents

また、

Going to See Cherry Blossoms with My Parents

My family had hardly gone on a trip together until last year.

It wasn't that we caouldn't afford to travel or don't like to do so.

The reason is that my parents were satisfied with dailyto lifve without traveling, and I usually spent the weekends with my friends.

Moreover, we had lived under the same roof so that we didn't feel like traveling together.

Since I left my parents' house last year, I have occasionally felt loneliness andy so I felt like returning the favor.

I would like to make fun memories while my parents are still in good shape.

Hirosaki is located inat the northern tip of Honshu island, and so it is not a popular destination other than sutside of Spring.

It is well known for beautiful cherry blossom withs at an old castle so that a great number of people includingand travel agencyies compete with each other to reserve hotels and bullet train seats from Tokyo.

I have been longing forto visiting there, so I decided to take me parents with me.

いい息子さんですよね。

Fortunately, I could get the tickets and reservations for my family.

We will have a fun time next month.

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楽しそうです。上手に書けています。

Sakura Trip with My Parents

My family had hardly gone on a trip together until last year.

"hardly" sounds a little awkward here - something like "My family rarely went on trips together" sounds a little more natural

It wasn't that we can't afford to travel or don't like to do.

The reason is that my parents were satisfied with daily life without travel, and I usually spent the weekends with my friends.

Moreover, we hadbecause we lived under the same roof so that, we didn't feel like traveling together.

Since I left my parents' house last year, I have occasionally felt loneliness and felt like returning the favor.

It's not clear what favor you are returning in this sentence. If you're talking about repaying your parents for helping you, you could say something like "I felt like showing my parents how much I appreciate them"

I would like to make fun memories while my parents are still in good shape.

Hirosaki is located inon the northern tip of Honshu iIsland, and is a not popular destination other than in spring.

It is well known for beautiful cherry blossoms with an old castle so that. Therefore, a great number of people including travel agencyies compete with each other to reserve hotels and bullet train seats from Tokyo.

"a great number of people including travel agencies" sounds a little strange because travel agencies aren't considered people. It might be better to say "a great number of people including travel agents". Travel agents are the people who work at travel agencies and make the bookings.

I have been longing forto visiting there, so I decided to take me parents with me.

Fortunately, I couldwas able to get the ticket and reservation for my family.

We will have a fun time next month.

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Nice job, hope you have a good trip!

Sakura Trip with My Parents


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Sakura Tripeeing Cherry Blossoms with My Parents

また、 Going to See Cherry Blossoms with My Parents

My family had hardly gone on a trip together until last year.


My family had hardly gone on a trip together until last year.

"hardly" sounds a little awkward here - something like "My family rarely went on trips together" sounds a little more natural

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It wasn't that we can't afford to travel or don't like to do.


It wasn't that we can't afford to travel or don't like to do.

It wasn't that we caouldn't afford to travel or don't like to do so.

The reason is that my parents were satisfied with daily life without travel, and I usually spent the weekends with my friends.


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The reason is that my parents were satisfied with dailyto lifve without traveling, and I usually spent the weekends with my friends.

Moreover, we had lived under the same roof so that we didn't feel like traveling together.


Moreover, we hadbecause we lived under the same roof so that, we didn't feel like traveling together.

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Since I left my parents' house last year, I have occasionally felt loneliness and felt like return the favor.


Since I left my parents' house last year, I have occasionally felt loneliness and felt like returning the favor.

It's not clear what favor you are returning in this sentence. If you're talking about repaying your parents for helping you, you could say something like "I felt like showing my parents how much I appreciate them"

Since I left my parents' house last year, I have occasionally felt loneliness andy so I felt like returning the favor.

I would like to make fun memories while my parents are still in good shape.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Hirosaki is located in northern tip of Honshu island, and is not popular destination other than spring.


Hirosaki is located inon the northern tip of Honshu iIsland, and is a not popular destination other than in spring.

Hirosaki is located inat the northern tip of Honshu island, and so it is not a popular destination other than sutside of Spring.

It is well known for beautiful cherry blossom with an old castle so that a great number of people including travel agency compete each other to reserve hotels and bullet train seats from Tokyo.


It is well known for beautiful cherry blossoms with an old castle so that. Therefore, a great number of people including travel agencyies compete with each other to reserve hotels and bullet train seats from Tokyo.

"a great number of people including travel agencies" sounds a little strange because travel agencies aren't considered people. It might be better to say "a great number of people including travel agents". Travel agents are the people who work at travel agencies and make the bookings.

It is well known for beautiful cherry blossom withs at an old castle so that a great number of people includingand travel agencyies compete with each other to reserve hotels and bullet train seats from Tokyo.

I have been longing for visiting there, so I decided to take me parents with me.


I have been longing forto visiting there, so I decided to take me parents with me.

I have been longing forto visiting there, so I decided to take me parents with me.

いい息子さんですよね。

Fortunately, I could get the ticket and reservation for my family.


Fortunately, I couldwas able to get the ticket and reservation for my family.

Fortunately, I could get the tickets and reservations for my family.

We will have a fun time next month.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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