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My school has a place where students gather and eat lunch, called the lunch box. My school has a place where students gather and eat lunch, called the lunch box.

My school has a place where students gather and eat lunch, called lunch box. My school has a place where students gather and eat lunch, called lunch box.

My school has a place where students gather and eat lunch, called the lunch box. My school has a place where students gather and eat lunch, called the lunch box.

I havedn't heard this word before I came into theis school and I thought thea place like this Iswould be called a canteen. I hadn't heard this word before I came to this school and I thought a place like this would be called a canteen.

I haven't heard this word before I came into the school and I thought the place like this Iis called a canteen. I haven't heard this word before I came to the school and I thought the place like this is called a canteen.

I haven't heard this word before I came into the school and I thought thea place like this Iis called a canteen. I haven't heard this word before I came to the school and I thought a place like this is called a canteen.

Honestly, that is what that type of place is normally called. "Lunch box" is a container you store your lunch in (especially ones designed for school kids).

In the lunch box, their friendspeople that were friends of the birthday person started to sing "happy birthday" song to the birthday person,m, and the rest of students and suervers started to sing or clap with them. In the lunch box, people that were friends of the birthday person started to sing "happy birthday" song to them, and the rest of students and servers started to sing or clap with them.

Using "their friends" without first specifying who "they" are sounds a little unnatural.

In the lunch box, their friends started to sing "happy birthday" song to the birthday person, and the rest of students and suervers start to sing or clap with them. In the lunch box, friends start to sing "happy birthday" song to the birthday person, and the rest of students and servers start to sing or clap with them.

In the (lunch box, their) canteen, people's friends started to sing "happy birthday" song to the birthday person,to someone whose birthday it is, and the rest of the students and suervers start to sing or clap with them. In the (lunch box) canteen, people's friends start to sing "happy birthday" to someone whose birthday it is, and the rest of the students and servers start to sing or clap with them.

"their" has to refer to a previously mentioned person, but this is your first time mentioning the birthday person, so you can't start with "their" and have to use "people's" instead. So you had half the sentence in "simple past tense" (describing something that happens) and half in a habitual present tense (describing something that regularly happens). I think based on later in your piece, the correct one is the habitual present tense so I changed "started" to "start"

Some students who isare celebrated and feel embarrassmented and try to gohide into the toilet, but their friends doidn't let them to dodo that. Some students who are celebrated feel embarrassed and try to hide in the toilet, but their friends didn't let them do that.

"go into" works too, but in this case "hide in" feels more appropriate.

Some students who isare celebrated and feel embarrassment try to go into the toilet, but their friends don't let them to do. Some students who are celebrated and feel embarrassment try to go into the toilet, but their friends don't let them.

Some students who isare celebrated and feel embarrassmented try to go into the toilet, but their friends don't let them to dodo that. Some students who are celebrated and feel embarrassed try to go into the toilet, but their friends don't let them do that.

Celebrating someone's birthday with students in the other grade students and friends is very funny and it makes me feel happy. Celebrating someone's birthday with students in the other grades and friends is very funny and it makes me feel happy.

Celebrating someone's birthday with other grade students and friends is very funny and it makes me feel happy. Celebrating someone's birthday with other students and friends is very funny and it makes me feel happy.

Celebrating someone's birthday with students from other grade students and friends is very funny and it makes me feel happy. Celebrating someone's birthday with students from other grades and friends is very funny and it makes me feel happy.

The other tradition of my school is to give a clap to people who dropped the dishes and madke a sound like crush! The other tradition of my school is to give a clap to people who drop the dishes and make a sound like crush!

"to give a clap to" works if you mean they clap once for the person. If it's continuous, I'd say "to clap for" would fit better.

The other tradition of my school is to give a clap toclap for the people who dropped the dishes and made a sound like "cruash!" The other tradition of my school is to clap for the people who dropped the dishes and made a sound like "crash!"

The other tradition ofat my school is to give a clap towhen people who dropped thedrop dishes and made a sound like "cruash! " The other tradition at my school is to clap when people drop dishes and made a sound like "crash! "

I think it is a good way to takereat this matter like one of celebration and don'to not make the students feel bad. I think it is a good way to treat this matter like one of celebration and to not make the students feel bad.

I think it is good way to take this matter like one offeel like a celebration and don'not make the students feel too bad. I think it is good way to take this matter feel like a celebration and not make the students feel too bad.

Today, the both things happened straightone right after the other. Today, both things happened one right after the other.

If you meant they happened really close in time to each other, then my correction applies.

Today, the both things happened straight after the other. Today, both things happened straight after the other.

Today, the both things happened straightone after the other. Today, both things happened one after the other.

I laughted with my friends. I laughed with my friends.

I laughted with my friends. I laughed with my friends.