Jan. 11, 2021
Translation Practice
The younger brother unlocked the persistent knot in his heart, and a smile showed on his face. The whole family was reunited. But mom passed away forever. In order to leave some money for her kids and let them live good lives, she chose to go away.
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The younger brother unlocked the persistent knot in his heart, and a smile showappeared on his face.
The younger brother unlocked the persistent knot in his heart, and a smile appeared on his face.
"appeared" sounds more natural than "showed on his face"
But the mom passed away forevershortly after(?).
But the mom passed away shortly after(?).
You don't have to put "forever" at the end of the sentence, since death is permanent already.
Jan. 11, 2021
Thank you very much.
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The younger brother unlocked the persistent knot in his heart, and a smile showed on his face.
The younger brother unlocked the persistent knot in his heart, and a smile "appeared" sounds more natural than "showed on his face" |
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The whole family was reunited. |
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But mom passed away forever.
But the mom passed away You don't have to put "forever" at the end of the sentence, since death is permanent already. |
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In order to leave some money for her kids and let them live good lives, she chose to go away. |
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