Tellalking/Writing about Sejong Talking/Writing about Sejong

Telling isn't usually used along like this.

My cityI live isn Sejong, one of the 17 provinces, which is located in the middle of South Korea. I live in Sejong, one of the 17 provinces, which is located in the middle of South Korea.

-'My city' is fine but 'I live in' sounds better.

Although Sejong's population is the smallest among all the provinces in Korea, Sejong is a rapidly growing city in terms of the birth rate. Although Sejong's population is the smallest among all the provinces in Korea, Sejong is a rapidly growing city in terms of the birth rate.

Sejong's birth rate is the highest among all the provinces in Korea due to plenty of stable jobs, such as government officialpositions. Sejong's birth rate is the highest among all the provinces in Korea due to plenty of stable jobs, such as government positions.

'Officials' are the people, so you can say, 'such as people working as government officials.'

As the government established Sejong as the de facto administrative capital in 2013, many ministries, - except the Ministry of Defence, the Ministry of Foreign Affairs and the Ministry of Justice, and agencies - moved to Sejong with lots of their officials. As the government established Sejong as the de facto administrative capital in 2013, many ministries - except the Ministry of Defence, the Ministry of Foreign Affairs and the Ministry of Justice - moved to Sejong with lots of their officials.

-There are a couple of ways to do this list is a little complicated so it needs to be clear where the list begins and ends. You can also use () or ; -'and agencies' is fine but it's confusing because it's not a specific agency like the other ones

Many people have said that almost all political and administrative decisions have beenare made in Sejong. Many people have said that almost all political and administrative decisions are made in Sejong.

'have been' is fine, but it does indicate this may soon no longer be the case. 'Are' makes it clearer this will continue to be true.

As the city was relatively recently plannedbuilt, the designer of the city prioritised the environment and green spaces over other things/considerations/aspects/elements. As the city was relatively recently built, the designer of the city prioritised the environment and green spaces over other things/considerations/aspects/elements.

Planned is fine, but it sounds a little strange.

There are no rubbish bins in the city, except for some spots where the "Cleanet System" is running. There are no rubbish bins in the city, except for some spots where the "Cleanet System" is running.

Cleanet System is runningruns in every flat, mall, restaurant, and so on; thus everyone can use it whenever they want to. Cleanet System runs in every flat, mall, restaurant, and so on; thus everyone can use it whenever they want to.

This is habitual, so just present tense.

We just put rubbish into the Cleanet System, and rubbish is moved to the terminal through the pipes, so there are no garbage trucks in the city. We just put rubbish into the Cleanet System, and rubbish is moved to the terminal through the pipes, so there are no garbage trucks in the city.

People can do many things there such as playing sports, including football, running, tennis, and basketball,; riding a bicycle,; having a picnic,; and just walking. People can do many things there such as playing sports, including football, running, tennis, and basketball; riding a bicycle; having a picnic; and just walking.

This is a list inside of a list so you start using ; to distinguish the two lists.

In my case, I can overlook a park through my living room window overlooks a park. In my case, my living room window overlooks a park.

The window overlooks the park, not you. You can say, 'I can see a park through my living room window.'

There isare no department stores. There are no department stores.

There are a few fancy restaurants to gyou can go to again and again. There are a few fancy restaurants you can go to again and again.

Yet I have children,. I have come to think that Sejong is a better place to live in than any other city in terms of health and safety. Yet I have children. I have come to think that Sejong is a better place to live in than any other city in terms of health and safety.