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Should sport be taken as a leisure activity?
According to some people, doing sports has a significant impact on the society. Other people do not agree and think that they are just leisure activities. First, I will show how physical activities can impact society, and then I will explain the limits.
Sports, and physical activities in general have a great impact on public health. It is recommended to do the equivalent of 30 minutes of speed walking every day. Moreover, it can be good for mental health, and help people sleep better. Furthermore, practising a sport at a high level can qualify you for international competitions, such as the Olympics. As some of these competitions are watched worldwide, you can represent your country. Although sport has some benefits, it is mainly seen as a leisure activity.
Competitive sport requires a lot of intense training to reach the best performance. It can hurt your body and lead to mental health problems. Some other problems are specific to competition, such as doping. Despite giving an advantage regarding to the performance, it can yield long-term health issues. Therefore, athletes could be incentivized to ruin their health in order to win the competition.
To sum up, sport is important for health and allows ordinary people to represent their country, but competition can lead to negative effects such as doping, or too intense training.
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Should sport be taken asconsidered a leisure activity?
Should sport be considered a leisure activity?
"Taken as" in this context feels more like "should you do them as a leisure activity".
According to some people, doing sports has a significant impact on the society.
Other people do not agree and think that they are just leisure activities.
First, I will show how physical activities can impact society, and then I will explain their limitations. First, I will show how physical activities can impact society, and then I will explain their limitations.
'the limits' feels less natural
Sports, and physical activities in general have a great impact on public health.
It is recommended to do the equivalent of 30 minutes of speed walking every day.
Moreover, it can be good for mental health, and help people sleep better.
Furthermore, practising a sport at a high level can qualify you for international competitions, such as the Olympics.
As some of these competitions are watched worldwide, you can represent your country.
Although sport has some benefits, it is mainly seen as a leisure activity.
Competitive sport requires a lot of intense training to reach the best performance.
It can hurt your body and lead to mental health problems.
Some other problems are specific to competition, such as doping.
Despite giving an advantage regarding to the performanceduring the competition, it can yield long-term health issues.
Despite giving an advantage during the competition, it can yield long-term health issues.
The original phrasing is a little awkward. Also, "performance" feels too specific here. It would make sense for things like gymnastics or figure skating, but less so for cycling or weight lifting.
Therefore, athletes could be incentivized to ruin their health in order to win the competition.
To sum up, sport is important for health and allows ordinary people to represent their country, but competition can lead to negative effects such as doping, or too intense training.
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Really good! Easy to understand, and the few changes I would make are pretty minor. With the exception of 'regarding the performance', I could easily see a native speaker writing this.
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Should sport be taken as a leisure activity?
Should sport be "Taken as" in this context feels more like "should you do them as a leisure activity". |
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According to some people, doing sports has a significant impact on the society. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Other people do not agree and think that they are just leisure activities. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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First, I will show how physical activities can impact society, and then I will explain the limits. First, I will show how physical activities can impact society, and then I will explain their limitations. First, I will show how physical activities can impact society, and then I will explain their limitations. 'the limits' feels less natural |
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Sports, and physical activities in general have a great impact on public health. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It is recommended to do the equivalent of 30 minutes of speed walking every day. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Moreover, it can be good for mental health, and help people sleep better. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Furthermore, practising a sport at a high level can qualify you for international competitions, such as the Olympics. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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As some of these competitions are watched worldwide, you can represent your country. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Although sport has some benefits, it is mainly seen as a leisure activity. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Competitive sport requires a lot of intense training to reach the best performance. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It can hurt your body and lead to mental health problems. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Some other problems are specific to competition, such as doping. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Despite giving an advantage regarding to the performance, it can yield long-term health issues.
Despite giving an advantage The original phrasing is a little awkward. Also, "performance" feels too specific here. It would make sense for things like gymnastics or figure skating, but less so for cycling or weight lifting. |
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Therefore, athletes could be incentivized to ruin their health in order to win the competition. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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To sum up, sport is important for health and allows ordinary people to represent their country, but competition can lead to negative effects such as doping, or too intense training. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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