May 1, 2023
Rose Garden
We went to a rose garden, because my father likes roses.
The garden is a private house, though, it is very beautiful and also open to the public.
My father said that it is good season for roses now, so I went to there together, however they hadn't bloomed much yet, perhaps because of the garden might be in among mountains and about half a month early.
There were a lot of trees and seedlings, so I thought it would be really beautiful when it was in full bloom.
After that we had a lunch near there, and came back home.
Then, the roses in our garden were in full bloom and were much more beautiful than the rose garden.
Our garden is small, so my mother, who wants to grow vegetables, and my father, who wants to grow roses, always compete for a sunny spot, though.
父がバラが好きなので、あるバラ園に行ってきた。
そこは個人の家なのだが、きれいなので一般公開もしているところだ。
父が今バラが見頃だというので付いて行ったのだが、山間にあるからか半月ほど早かったらしく、まだあまり咲いてなかった。
沢山の木や苗があったので、満開のになったらすごくきれいだろうなと思った。
近くのカフェでランチをして、家に帰ってきた。
そしたら、バラ園よりよほど我が家の庭の方がバラが満開で綺麗だった。
我が家の庭は狭いので、野菜を育てたい母と、バラを育てたい父といつも日当たりの良い場所を取り合っているんですけどね。
A Rose Garden
このの方が自然です。
We went to a rose garden, because my father likes roses.
The garden is at a private house, though, it is very beautiful and also open to the public.
いいですね。
My father said that it is a good season for roses now, so Iwe went to there together, however they hadn't bloomed much yet, perhap roses weren't very much in bloom yet. Perhaps it was because of the garden might be in amongis located in the mountains andso we were about half a month early.
英語では長い文はあまり使いません。
There were a lot of trees and seedlings, so I thought it wouldthat it will be really beautiful when it was in full bloom.
After that we had a lunch near there, and came back home.
アメリカでの添削
また、
After that we had lunch nearby and then came back home.
Then, the roses in our garden were in full bloom and were much more beautiful than the ones in the rose garden.
Our garden is small, so my mother, who wants to grow vegetables, and my father, who wants to grow roses, always compete for a sunny spot, though.
Feedback
そうですか。私もバラが一番好きな花です。そして、よく書けています！
May 2, 2023
Roses are very beautiful, aren't they?
Thank you for always correcting me.
Rose Garden
We went to a rose garden, because my father likes roses.
The garden is a private house, though, it is very beautiful and also open to the public.
“The garden is part of a private house, although it is open to the public” would be a smoother phrasing.
My father said that it is a good season for roses now, so Iwe went to there together, h. However, they hadn't bloomed much yet, perhaps because of the garden might be in among mountains and about half a month early.
There were a lot of trees and seedlings, so I thought it would be really beautiful when it was in full bloom.
After that we had a lunch near there, and came back home.
Then, the roses in our garden were in full bloom and were much more beautiful than the rose garden.
Our garden is small, so my mother, who wants to grow vegetables, and my father, who wants to grow roses, always compete for a sunny spot, though.
Feedback
What a great story!
May 2, 2023
Thank you for your corrections.
|
Rose Garden This sentence has been marked as perfect! A Rose Garden このの方が自然です。 |
|
We went to a rose garden, because my father likes roses. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
|
The garden is a private house, though, it is very beautiful and also open to the public. The garden is a private house, though, it is very beautiful and also open to the public. “The garden is part of a private house, although it is open to the public” would be a smoother phrasing. The garden is at a private house, though, it is very beautiful and also open to the public. いいですね。 |
|
My father said that it is good season for roses now, so I went to there together, however they hadn't bloomed much yet, perhaps because of the garden might be in among mountains and about half a month early. My father said that it is a good season for roses now, so My father said that it is a good season for roses now, so 英語では長い文はあまり使いません。 |
|
There were a lot of trees and seedlings, so I thought it would be really beautiful when it was in full bloom. This sentence has been marked as perfect! There were a lot of trees and seedlings, so I thought |
|
After that we had a lunch near there, and came back home. This sentence has been marked as perfect! After that we had アメリカでの添削 また、 After that we had lunch nearby and then came back home. |
|
Then, the roses in our garden were in full bloom and were much more beautiful than the rose garden. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Then, the roses in our garden were in full bloom and were much more beautiful than the ones in the rose garden. |
|
Our garden is small, so my mother, who wants to grow vegetables, and my father, who wants to grow roses, always compete for a sunny spot, though. Our garden is small, so my mother, who wants to grow vegetables, and my father, who wants to grow roses, always compete for a sunny spot This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
You need LangCorrect Premium to access this feature.
Go Premium