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Dec. 5, 2019

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Rocketsheeps in all countries to populate equally.

The victorys are for the persons which arrives first than others. The humanity is close to extension the realm they have now, to place farther than beyond this world, but it should be for to all countries. The colonization processes works only in the beginning, but the nefarious effects can feel all the way to 500 years in to the future. All neighborhoods that are stablished centuries in the past always begins with a lot of productivity for the conquistadors, but because it is most of the times only one country or continent attacking the nation to conquest, for the good or the bad, they only has one opinion, so all his decisions are coming in one directions, and the history is repeats all times, many times. There is never one success conquistador nation who is lasted for centuries with the power they obtain without they fall, longer or sooner, but give your self the oppurtinity to stop in your track and think perhaps it is for the reason that is only one conquistadoring country actings in solitary.

In a matter of a little times, the humanity will conquest the moon, and from that place it will distribute to all planets that have friendly conditions for to withstand the weight of the life in the population of humans. If the wish that human scientists have is to obtain a planet in property, it should cannot be only a few little countries. The datum is there, it shows no signs of error, it says inevitably the results is after an extension of period of time, the progress in society and money, and land and farming, and food distributions, and near to all aspects of life in civilization go down, if this is the enterprise of single nations. Why not connect forces together? and attack the new planets in joining a superplanetary alliance right here on earth? Each planet should to have a rocketsheep, and perhaps you can stop a moment on your tracks, and give this a good chunk of thinking: colonization and conquistation is a suffering process and it is lasting for too long, because, and only maybe, because it is not a league of countries that do the attack and colony.

How much countries is their in the 5 continents, a lot, that is how much. So each country alone has to have one rocketsheep to send in space in intervalling lunch dates, settingly before by the specialists in orbital launches to catch graviteitional pulls that can to conduct a prove to that far distance, and have progressive arrivals at the planets of new destinations for distributions of the chores the must to do in order, to have, the creation of the replication of this planet, with the minimals for guarantees of the super living of the travellers, and perpetuations of us as a spices, but in the new territory. This sounds not impossible because the countries that are good for war, make colonies with that resource, and the countries that are good for farms, do farms, and if they are good for sailing, they colonize by the fish and live like that. There is no way the humanity can faster the colony in other planet if it does alone with only one country. And how this is to be maked? Every things are maked with a plan, and the plan could have possibilities whether countries receive trainings for to make their own sheeps. With the plan for acquisition of the primal matter for to build theirs rockets sheeps. With the technology that is all around this planet now, and the knowledge in action that scientifics shares with all of us all the time. The most enormous challenge is the finding of the willing to helping everyone country for to achieve this.

Perhaps we, the people reading this now, wills be to olds when this happens. When the locals of the new planets earths and the colonizers and conquistadors we send, begin to mix and populate all the new continents, we will already loosing the opportunity for us, but the kids of the kids we have in this times today, maybe is going to become responsible for this multiplication for when it sure happens. It does have sense to think thoghts of this kind. Quiet a little countries in the times today have very very good skills for the farming culture. Other build machines like all days. And the one who are fame for the arts and the sports. What about the anothers, the ones that have for sure the super discipline that is a necessity in an enterprise this big? How many continents possess the blessings of the 100 percent of the populations with ability to reads and writes soooo very very well that all become engineer or doctor, or cook or banker? Those continents could resuscitate the academy in the new planet, and in the doing of this, they are going to passing the knowledge sins the beginnings of times, to the earth of the future. In the moments today, I have conviction that the travel for the colony of the moon is only disposition for a little few people, and they are no enough to do all things I list before on they own. The more the best. So I have thoughts that conviction me to fantasies about a rocketsheep for country, and each countries assumes the cost of the trip for colony, bye choicing the peoples that contribute to the benefit of all the mankind.

In person I understand, that in the present moments, the prize to take the travelling is much, and no one can to pay, but no is that solution in cutting the costs and distributions among the total population?, no is that the ways the humanity today super lives the arising challenges in this society that never stops to grow?, no is that the way we are elevating our selfs above all the vicissitudes that are with us sins the starting of our lifes as a mankind?, so is this suppose to be a not realistic proposition?, well how knows… the satellites are giving mappings of the path that mankind has to follow to reach the next habitable realm, and in agreeings with a paper I read last morning in the corner of the branch, the exploratory travels to space are starting from a long time ago, so it feels that one rocketsheep a pop, could put us there fasters and betters, and for more farthering lasting periods.

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Rocketsheeips in all countries to populate equally.

Although this is grammatical, it is a bit confusing (it feels like something's been left out of the title). You could consider "Rocketships for all countries to colonise space equally".

The vVictoryies are for the persons which arrives firstople who arrive before thane others.

The hHumanity is close to extensionding the realm they have now, to place farther thango beyond this world, but the opportunity should be for to all countries.

Having both "farther" and "beyond" isn't necessary, because having either one conveys the same meaning. I added in "opportunity" to make it clearer what it is that should be for all countries.

The colonization processes works only in the beginning, but the nefarious effects can feelbe felt all the way to 500 years in to the future.

AllEvery neighbourhoods that are is established centuries in the past always begins with a lot of productivity for the conquistadors, but because it is most of the time it's only one country or continent attacking the nation tobeing conquestred, for the good or the badbetter or worse, they only hasve one opinion, so all histheir decisions are coming infrom one directions, and the history is repeats all the times, many times.

A few changes to make the singular and plural consistent. You can also say "conquerors" instead of "conquistadors" – English speakers know what "conquistadors" means, but "conquerors" is the native English word.

There is never one successful conquistadorering nation who isich lasteds for centuries with the power they obtain without they fall, lfalling, soonger or soonlater, but give your self the oppuortiunity to stop in your tracks and think perhaps it is forbecause the reason that i was only one conquistadoering country actings in solitary. ¶

alone.

In a matter of a little times, theshort while, humanity will conquestr the moon, and from that placere it will distributespread to all planets that have friendly conditions for to withstand the weight of the life inves of the population of humans.

If the wish that human scientists have is to obtainthe desire to acquire a planet inas property, it should cannon't be by only a few little countries.

The datuma is there, it shows no signs of error, it says inevitably the results is after an extension ofded period of time, the result is that the progress inof society and money, and land and farming, and food distributions, and near toly all aspects of life in civilization gocivilized life break down, if this is the enterprise of single nations.

Why not connectjoin forces together?

"connect" is OK, but "join" would be much more commonly used in this sentence.

and attack the new planets in joinafter forming a superplanetary alliance right here on eEarth?

Each planet should to have a rocketsheeip, and perhaps you can stop a moment oin your tracks for a moment, and give this a good chunk of thinkingought: colonization and conquiestation is a process of suffering process and it is lastings for too long, because, and only maybe, because it is not a league of countries that do the attacking and colonyization.

How muchany countries isare theire in the 5 continents, a? A lot, that i's how muchany.

"Many" is used for countable things, while "much" is used for uncountable ones.

So each country alone has to have one rocketsheeip to sendlaunch into space in intervalling lunch dates, settingly before by theat regular intervals, set beforehand by specialists inof orbital launches to catch graviteiational pulls that can tohelp conducte a prove to that fartrip of such a great distance, and have progressive arrivals at the planets of new destinations for distributions of the choredestination planets in order to distribute the tasks theat must tobe do in order, to have, the creation of the replication of this planetne to make the planet suitable for human habitation, with theat a minimals forum, guarantees ofor the super livingrvival of the travellers, and the perpetuations of us as a spices, butecies in the new territory.

This shoundsld not sound impossible because the countries that are good forat war, will make colonies with that resource, and the countries that are good forat farms, doing, will have farms, and if they are good forat sailing, they colonize by thwill introduce fish and live likeoff that.

I've changed "good for" to "good at" here. I'm not totally sure why it sounds better that way, but I think "good at" is more of active agents (as countries are here, setting up colonies) while "good for" is more for objects (like, "this rocketship will be good for a journey of 10,000 years" – the ship would be used by the colonists rather than being an agent itself).

There is no way the humanity can faster the colony inize other planets faster if it does it alone with only one country.

And how this is to be makedhappen?

Every things are maked is done with a plan, and the plan could have the possibilities whethey for countries to receive trainings for to make their own sheeips.

With thea plan for acquisition ofring the primalry matter forneeded to build theirs rockets sheehips.

With the technology that is all around this planet now, and the knowledge in action that scientificsts shares with all of us all the time.

The most enormous challenge is the finding of the willing to helping everyone country for to achieve this.

Perhaps we, the people reading this now, wills be too olds when this happens.

When the locals of the new planets e Earths and the colonizers and conquistadors we send, begin to mix and populate all the new continents, we will already loosingse the opportunity for us, but the kids of the kids we have in thisese times today, are maybe is going to become responsible for this multiplication for when it surely happens.

It does havThere is some sense toin thinking thoughts of this kind.

Quiete a littlefew countries in these times today have very very good skills for the farming culture.

Others build machines like allevery days.

And there are ones who are fameous for the arts and the sports.

What about the anothers, the ones that have for sure the superincredible discipline that is a necessity in an enterprise this big?

How many continents possess the blessings ofare blessed in theat 100 percent of the population has withe ability to reads and writes soooo very very well that alleveryone becomes an engineer or a doctor, or a cook or a banker?

Those continents could resuscitateun the academy ion the new planet, and in the doing of this, they are going to passing all the knowledge sinsfrom the beginnings of times, to the eEarth of the future.

"resuscitate" implies that there already was an academy on the new planet, but it fell into inactivity. I'm assuming you mean those continents could start new academies and run them successfully.

InAt the moments today, I have, I am convictionnced that the travel forto the colony ofn the moon is only disposition for a little fewavailable to a very small number of people, and they are not enough to do all things I've list befored on theyir own.

The more the bestter.

So I havemy thoughts thatve convictionmpelled me to fantasiese about a rocketsheeip for each country, andwhere each countriesy would assumes the cost of the trip foto their colony, bye choicosing the peoples that who would contribute to the benefit of all the mankind.

In pPersonally I understand, that in the present moments, the prize to cost to undertake the travelling is much is great, and no one can to pay, but no isisn't thate solution in cutting the costs and distributions amongto that distributing the costs across the total population?

, noOr is thait the ways the humanity today super livesrvives amidst the arising challenges in this society that never stops to growing?

, noOr is thait the way we arhave elevatinged our selfves above all the vicissitudes that arehave been with us sinsce the starting of our lifes as abeginning of mankind?

"vicissitudes" is a really rare words, and I had to look up what it meant. You might want to find a more common synonym, like "changes" or "variations", to replace it.

, soOr is this not supposed to be a not realistic proposition?

, wWell whow knows... the satellites are giving us mappings of the path that mankind has to follow to reach the next habitable realm, and in agreeingsment with athe paper I read lastyesterday morning in the corner of the branch, the exploratory travels to space arhave starting fromed a long time ago, so it feels thatlike one rocketsheeip a pop, could put us there fasters and betters, and for more fartheringlonger lasting periods.

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I wanted to say well done, because this post has been easier to understand than yesterday's. Again, I haven't had the time to list explanations for every change, but some of the general things you might want to look into are: knowing when to use each type of English infinitive (the bare infinitive, the to-infinitive and the -ing/gerund form), getting singulars and plurals straight (adjectives don't need the plural marker -s, for example), and learning about comparatives (like more vs most, better vs best). You use some pretty impressive vocabulary here, along with laying out some interesting ideas. Best wishes!

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Dec. 6, 2019

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AllEvery neighbourhoods that are is established centuries in the past always begins with a lot of productivity for the conquistadors, but because it is most of the time it's only one country or continent attacking the nation tobeing conquestred, for the good or the badbetter or worse, they only hasve one opinion, so all histheir decisions are coming infrom one directions, and the history is repeats all the times, many times.

I do not know this before. You have reason, conqueror has a better listening. Thanks to you.

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teachvil

Dec. 6, 2019

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Why not connectjoin forces together?

I believe I am now liker of join for the place of connect. Thanks to you.

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Dec. 6, 2019

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This are new conceptions for me, bare infinitives is a thing I never heard in the past. I am doing my investigations to make better writing in relation with this infinitives. Too, I say thanks to you for the observings on plurals markers. Will too make my homework to make better on this. Thanks to you.

Rocketsheeps in all countries to populate equally.


Rocketsheeips in all countries to populate equally.

Although this is grammatical, it is a bit confusing (it feels like something's been left out of the title). You could consider "Rocketships for all countries to colonise space equally".

The victorys are for the persons which arrives first than others.


The vVictoryies are for the persons which arrives firstople who arrive before thane others.

The humanity is close to extension the realm they have now, to place farther than beyond this world, but it should be for to all countries.


The hHumanity is close to extensionding the realm they have now, to place farther thango beyond this world, but the opportunity should be for to all countries.

Having both "farther" and "beyond" isn't necessary, because having either one conveys the same meaning. I added in "opportunity" to make it clearer what it is that should be for all countries.

The colonization processes works only in the beginning, but the nefarious effects can feel all the way to 500 years in to the future.


The colonization processes works only in the beginning, but the nefarious effects can feelbe felt all the way to 500 years in to the future.

All neighborhoods that are stablished centuries in the past always begins with a lot of productivity for the conquistadors, but because it is most of the times only one country or continent attacking the nation to conquest, for the good or the bad, they only has one opinion, so all his decisions are coming in one directions, and the history is repeats all times, many times.


AllEvery neighbourhoods that are is established centuries in the past always begins with a lot of productivity for the conquistadors, but because it is most of the time it's only one country or continent attacking the nation tobeing conquestred, for the good or the badbetter or worse, they only hasve one opinion, so all histheir decisions are coming infrom one directions, and the history is repeats all the times, many times.

A few changes to make the singular and plural consistent. You can also say "conquerors" instead of "conquistadors" – English speakers know what "conquistadors" means, but "conquerors" is the native English word.

There is never one success conquistador nation who is lasted for centuries with the power they obtain without they fall, longer or sooner, but give your self the oppurtinity to stop in your track and think perhaps it is for the reason that is only one conquistadoring country actings in solitary.


There is never one successful conquistadorering nation who isich lasteds for centuries with the power they obtain without they fall, lfalling, soonger or soonlater, but give your self the oppuortiunity to stop in your tracks and think perhaps it is forbecause the reason that i was only one conquistadoering country actings in solitary. ¶

alone.

In a matter of a little times, the humanity will conquest the moon, and from that place it will distribute to all planets that have friendly conditions for to withstand the weight of the life in the population of humans.


In a matter of a little times, theshort while, humanity will conquestr the moon, and from that placere it will distributespread to all planets that have friendly conditions for to withstand the weight of the life inves of the population of humans.

If the wish that human scientists have is to obtain a planet in property, it should cannot be only a few little countries.


If the wish that human scientists have is to obtainthe desire to acquire a planet inas property, it should cannon't be by only a few little countries.

The datum is there, it shows no signs of error, it says inevitably the results is after an extension of period of time, the progress in society and money, and land and farming, and food distributions, and near to all aspects of life in civilization go down, if this is the enterprise of single nations.


The datuma is there, it shows no signs of error, it says inevitably the results is after an extension ofded period of time, the result is that the progress inof society and money, and land and farming, and food distributions, and near toly all aspects of life in civilization gocivilized life break down, if this is the enterprise of single nations.

Why not connect forces together?


Why not connectjoin forces together?

"connect" is OK, but "join" would be much more commonly used in this sentence.

and attack the new planets in joining a superplanetary alliance right here on earth?


and attack the new planets in joinafter forming a superplanetary alliance right here on eEarth?

Each planet should to have a rocketsheep, and perhaps you can stop a moment on your tracks, and give this a good chunk of thinking: colonization and conquistation is a suffering process and it is lasting for too long, because, and only maybe, because it is not a league of countries that do the attack and colony.


Each planet should to have a rocketsheeip, and perhaps you can stop a moment oin your tracks for a moment, and give this a good chunk of thinkingought: colonization and conquiestation is a process of suffering process and it is lastings for too long, because, and only maybe, because it is not a league of countries that do the attacking and colonyization.


How much countries is their in the 5 continents, a lot, that is how much.


How muchany countries isare theire in the 5 continents, a? A lot, that i's how muchany.

"Many" is used for countable things, while "much" is used for uncountable ones.

So each country alone has to have one rocketsheep to send in space in intervalling lunch dates, settingly before by the specialists in orbital launches to catch graviteitional pulls that can to conduct a prove to that far distance, and have progressive arrivals at the planets of new destinations for distributions of the chores the must to do in order, to have, the creation of the replication of this planet, with the minimals for guarantees of the super living of the travellers, and perpetuations of us as a spices, but in the new territory.


So each country alone has to have one rocketsheeip to sendlaunch into space in intervalling lunch dates, settingly before by theat regular intervals, set beforehand by specialists inof orbital launches to catch graviteiational pulls that can tohelp conducte a prove to that fartrip of such a great distance, and have progressive arrivals at the planets of new destinations for distributions of the choredestination planets in order to distribute the tasks theat must tobe do in order, to have, the creation of the replication of this planetne to make the planet suitable for human habitation, with theat a minimals forum, guarantees ofor the super livingrvival of the travellers, and the perpetuations of us as a spices, butecies in the new territory.

This sounds not impossible because the countries that are good for war, make colonies with that resource, and the countries that are good for farms, do farms, and if they are good for sailing, they colonize by the fish and live like that.


This shoundsld not sound impossible because the countries that are good forat war, will make colonies with that resource, and the countries that are good forat farms, doing, will have farms, and if they are good forat sailing, they colonize by thwill introduce fish and live likeoff that.

I've changed "good for" to "good at" here. I'm not totally sure why it sounds better that way, but I think "good at" is more of active agents (as countries are here, setting up colonies) while "good for" is more for objects (like, "this rocketship will be good for a journey of 10,000 years" – the ship would be used by the colonists rather than being an agent itself).

There is no way the humanity can faster the colony in other planet if it does alone with only one country.


There is no way the humanity can faster the colony inize other planets faster if it does it alone with only one country.

And how this is to be maked?


And how this is to be makedhappen?

Every things are maked with a plan, and the plan could have possibilities whether countries receive trainings for to make their own sheeps.


Every things are maked is done with a plan, and the plan could have the possibilities whethey for countries to receive trainings for to make their own sheeips.

With the plan for acquisition of the primal matter for to build theirs rockets sheeps.


With thea plan for acquisition ofring the primalry matter forneeded to build theirs rockets sheehips.

With the technology that is all around this planet now, and the knowledge in action that scientifics shares with all of us all the time.


With the technology that is all around this planet now, and the knowledge in action that scientificsts shares with all of us all the time.

The most enormous challenge is the finding of the willing to helping everyone country for to achieve this.


The most enormous challenge is the finding of the willing to helping everyone country for to achieve this.


Perhaps we, the people reading this now, wills be to olds when this happens.


Perhaps we, the people reading this now, wills be too olds when this happens.

When the locals of the new planets earths and the colonizers and conquistadors we send, begin to mix and populate all the new continents, we will already loosing the opportunity for us, but the kids of the kids we have in this times today, maybe is going to become responsible for this multiplication for when it sure happens.


When the locals of the new planets e Earths and the colonizers and conquistadors we send, begin to mix and populate all the new continents, we will already loosingse the opportunity for us, but the kids of the kids we have in thisese times today, are maybe is going to become responsible for this multiplication for when it surely happens.

It does have sense to think thoghts of this kind.


It does havThere is some sense toin thinking thoughts of this kind.

Quiet a little countries in the times today have very very good skills for the farming culture.


Quiete a littlefew countries in these times today have very very good skills for the farming culture.

Other build machines like all days.


Others build machines like allevery days.

And the one who are fame for the arts and the sports.


And there are ones who are fameous for the arts and the sports.

What about the anothers, the ones that have for sure the super discipline that is a necessity in an enterprise this big?


What about the anothers, the ones that have for sure the superincredible discipline that is a necessity in an enterprise this big?

How many continents possess the blessings of the 100 percent of the populations with ability to reads and writes soooo very very well that all become engineer or doctor, or cook or banker?


How many continents possess the blessings ofare blessed in theat 100 percent of the population has withe ability to reads and writes soooo very very well that alleveryone becomes an engineer or a doctor, or a cook or a banker?

Those continents could resuscitate the academy in the new planet, and in the doing of this, they are going to passing the knowledge sins the beginnings of times, to the earth of the future.


Those continents could resuscitateun the academy ion the new planet, and in the doing of this, they are going to passing all the knowledge sinsfrom the beginnings of times, to the eEarth of the future.

"resuscitate" implies that there already was an academy on the new planet, but it fell into inactivity. I'm assuming you mean those continents could start new academies and run them successfully.

In the moments today, I have conviction that the travel for the colony of the moon is only disposition for a little few people, and they are no enough to do all things I list before on they own.


InAt the moments today, I have, I am convictionnced that the travel forto the colony ofn the moon is only disposition for a little fewavailable to a very small number of people, and they are not enough to do all things I've list befored on theyir own.

The more the best.


The more the bestter.

So I have thoughts that conviction me to fantasies about a rocketsheep for country, and each countries assumes the cost of the trip for colony, bye choicing the peoples that contribute to the benefit of all the mankind.


So I havemy thoughts thatve convictionmpelled me to fantasiese about a rocketsheeip for each country, andwhere each countriesy would assumes the cost of the trip foto their colony, bye choicosing the peoples that who would contribute to the benefit of all the mankind.


In person I understand, that in the present moments, the prize to take the travelling is much, and no one can to pay, but no is that solution in cutting the costs and distributions among the total population?


In pPersonally I understand, that in the present moments, the prize to cost to undertake the travelling is much is great, and no one can to pay, but no isisn't thate solution in cutting the costs and distributions amongto that distributing the costs across the total population?

, no is that the ways the humanity today super lives the arising challenges in this society that never stops to grow?


, noOr is thait the ways the humanity today super livesrvives amidst the arising challenges in this society that never stops to growing?

, no is that the way we are elevating our selfs above all the vicissitudes that are with us sins the starting of our lifes as a mankind?


, noOr is thait the way we arhave elevatinged our selfves above all the vicissitudes that arehave been with us sinsce the starting of our lifes as abeginning of mankind?

"vicissitudes" is a really rare words, and I had to look up what it meant. You might want to find a more common synonym, like "changes" or "variations", to replace it.

, so is this suppose to be a not realistic proposition?


, soOr is this not supposed to be a not realistic proposition?

, well how knows… the satellites are giving mappings of the path that mankind has to follow to reach the next habitable realm, and in agreeings with a paper I read last morning in the corner of the branch, the exploratory travels to space are starting from a long time ago, so it feels that one rocketsheep a pop, could put us there fasters and betters, and for more farthering lasting periods.


, wWell whow knows... the satellites are giving us mappings of the path that mankind has to follow to reach the next habitable realm, and in agreeingsment with athe paper I read lastyesterday morning in the corner of the branch, the exploratory travels to space arhave starting fromed a long time ago, so it feels thatlike one rocketsheeip a pop, could put us there fasters and betters, and for more fartheringlonger lasting periods.

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