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Nowadays, climbing is not probably such an unknown activity as it was a couple of years ago, especially since its arrival in the Olympic games. Although, it still remains as an unusual one, given the fact that there are very few people interested in this sport.
At first, before deciding me to take up climbing, I thought it was the typical activity for children to play in an indoor playground. I had the impression that an artificial rock wall was unsuitable for youth or adults. That was till I watched some spectacular videos of Adam Ondra, one of the best athletes in this sport, when I came to realise how wrong I was. After such a prominent revelation did I become interested in and searched for the closest climbing wall to my village. I found one in Marchena, just 10 kilometers away.
There I fully realised why climbers get so obsessed for this activity. It is hard to explain, contrary to popular belief, it leads you to a kind of Zen or meditation state in which you are highly concentrated on present. Thereby any intrusive thought disappears while you are managing to go up, hold after hold.
Regarding the sort of people linked to this sport, it is frequently associated with fearless and outgoing personalities, yet I would say there is not such stereotype. Fortunately, I have found very different people in this sense, sometimes with just a common feature: their passion for climbing.


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I had the impression that an artificial rock wall was unsuitable for youth or adults.

That was till I watched some spectacular videos of Adam Ondra, one of the best athletes in this sport, when I came to realise how wrong I was.

After such a prominent revelation did I become interested in and searched for the closest climbing wall to my village.

I found one in Marchena, just 10 kilometers away.

Fortunately, I have found very different people in this sense, sometimes with just a common feature: their passion for climbing.

Nowadays, climbing is not probably such an unknown activity asmore well-known than it was a couple of years ago, especially since its arrivalinclusion in the Olympic games.

AlthoughHowever, it still remains as an unusual one, given the fact thathobby, as there are very few people interested in thise sport.

At first, bBefore deciding me to take up climbing, I thought it was the typicalprimarily an activity for children to play in ain indoor playground. areas.

I hadwas under the impression that an artificial rock wall was unsuitable for youthng people or adults.

That was untill I watched some spectacular videos of Adam Ondra, one of the best athletes in this sport, w. I then I came to realise how wrong I was.

'till' is more commonly used in speech.

After such a prominent revelation, did I becoame interested in and searched for the closest climbing wall to my village.

I found one in Marchena, just 10 kilometers away.

There, I fully realised why climbers get so obsessed forwith this activity.

It is hard to explain, contrary to popular belief, it leads you to a kind of Zen or meditation state in which you are highly concentratfocused on the present.

Thereby any intrusive thoughts disappears while you are managing to goclimbing up, hold after hold.

Regarding the sort of people linked towho enjoy this sport, it is frequently associated with fearless and outgoing personalities, yebut I would say there is not such stereotype.at this stereotype isn't true.

Is this what you meant?

Fortunately, I have found verymet lots of different people in this sense, sometimes with just a common featureone thing in common: their passion for climbing.

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Your writing is amazing! Very complex with lots of different grammatical structures!

Review of unusual leisure activities

Nowadays, climbing is not probably not such an unknown activity as it was a couple of years ago, especially since its arrival inat the Olympic games.

AlthoughNevertheless, it is still remains as an unusual one, given the fact that there are very few people interested in this sport.

At first, before I deciding med to take up climbing, I thought it was thea typical activity for children to play in an indoor playground.

I had the impression that an artificial rock wall was unsuitable for youth or adults.

That was untill I watched some spectacularincredible videos of Adam Ondra, one of the best athletes in this sport, when I came to realised how wrong I was.

After such a prominent revelation did I becoame interested in and searched for the closest climbing wall to my village.

Lo de "did I" es un estilo literario y formal, un poco anticuado.

I found one in Marchena, just 10 kilometers away.

Kilometers = US spelling
Kilometres = Rest of World spelling
Note that in the US, they use Miles, so it's not common to read "kilometers".

There I fully realised why climbers get so obsessed forwith this activity.

Realised con S está bien pero es una ortografıa de UK/Australia etc y anteriormente has usado ortografía esradounidense (sería con Z). Estaría bien ser consistente si puedes.

It is hard to explain, but contrary to popular belief, it leadgives you to a kind of Zzen or meditationve state in which you are highly concentrated on presthe present moment.

TherebyAs such, any intrusive thought disappears while you are managtrying to go up, hold after hold.

Thereby es muy formal y no se usa al principio de una frase.

Regarding the sort of people linked to this sport, it is frequently associated with fearless and outgoing personalities, yebut I would say there is not such stereotype.

Fortunately, I have found very different people in this sense, sometimes with just a common feature: their passion for climbing.

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Great job! It seems very formally written, not sure if that is the style you wanted to go for. Keep up the good work.

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Nowadays, climbing is not probably such an unknown activity as it was a couple of years ago, especially since its arrival in the Olympic games.


Nowadays, climbing is not probably not such an unknown activity as it was a couple of years ago, especially since its arrival inat the Olympic games.

Nowadays, climbing is not probably such an unknown activity asmore well-known than it was a couple of years ago, especially since its arrivalinclusion in the Olympic games.

Although, it still remains as an unusual one, given the fact that there are very few people interested in this sport.


AlthoughNevertheless, it is still remains as an unusual one, given the fact that there are very few people interested in this sport.

AlthoughHowever, it still remains as an unusual one, given the fact thathobby, as there are very few people interested in thise sport.

At first, before deciding me to take up climbing, I thought it was the typical activity for children to play in an indoor playground.


At first, before I deciding med to take up climbing, I thought it was thea typical activity for children to play in an indoor playground.

At first, bBefore deciding me to take up climbing, I thought it was the typicalprimarily an activity for children to play in ain indoor playground. areas.

I had the impression that an artificial rock wall was unsuitable for youth or adults.


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I hadwas under the impression that an artificial rock wall was unsuitable for youthng people or adults.

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That was till I watched some spectacular videos of Adam Ondra, one of the best athletes in this sport, when I came to realise how wrong I was.


That was untill I watched some spectacularincredible videos of Adam Ondra, one of the best athletes in this sport, when I came to realised how wrong I was.

That was untill I watched some spectacular videos of Adam Ondra, one of the best athletes in this sport, w. I then I came to realise how wrong I was.

'till' is more commonly used in speech.

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After such a prominent revelation did I become interested in and searched for the closest climbing wall to my village.


After such a prominent revelation did I becoame interested in and searched for the closest climbing wall to my village.

Lo de "did I" es un estilo literario y formal, un poco anticuado.

After such a prominent revelation, did I becoame interested in and searched for the closest climbing wall to my village.

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I found one in Marchena, just 10 kilometers away.


I found one in Marchena, just 10 kilometers away.

Kilometers = US spelling Kilometres = Rest of World spelling Note that in the US, they use Miles, so it's not common to read "kilometers".

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There I fully realised why climbers get so obsessed for this activity.


There I fully realised why climbers get so obsessed forwith this activity.

Realised con S está bien pero es una ortografıa de UK/Australia etc y anteriormente has usado ortografía esradounidense (sería con Z). Estaría bien ser consistente si puedes.

There, I fully realised why climbers get so obsessed forwith this activity.

It is hard to explain, contrary to popular belief, it leads you to a kind of Zen or meditation state in which you are highly concentrated on present.


It is hard to explain, but contrary to popular belief, it leadgives you to a kind of Zzen or meditationve state in which you are highly concentrated on presthe present moment.

It is hard to explain, contrary to popular belief, it leads you to a kind of Zen or meditation state in which you are highly concentratfocused on the present.

Thereby any intrusive thought disappears while you are managing to go up, hold after hold.


TherebyAs such, any intrusive thought disappears while you are managtrying to go up, hold after hold.

Thereby es muy formal y no se usa al principio de una frase.

Thereby any intrusive thoughts disappears while you are managing to goclimbing up, hold after hold.

Regarding the sort of people linked to this sport, it is frequently associated with fearless and outgoing personalities, yet I would say there is not such stereotype.


Regarding the sort of people linked to this sport, it is frequently associated with fearless and outgoing personalities, yebut I would say there is not such stereotype.

Regarding the sort of people linked towho enjoy this sport, it is frequently associated with fearless and outgoing personalities, yebut I would say there is not such stereotype.at this stereotype isn't true.

Is this what you meant?

Fortunately, I have found very different people in this sense, sometimes with just a common feature: their passion for climbing.


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Fortunately, I have found verymet lots of different people in this sense, sometimes with just a common featureone thing in common: their passion for climbing.

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