Feb. 4, 2021
As the rampant expansion of China's industry upgrading and digitalization has attracted a large number of migrant population, more Chinese women swarm to the IT-related industry. However, IT industry is renowned for its rejection of femininity. In order to find acceptance within the IT field, female programmers may not want to address their gender, but to stress a genderless role so as to fit themselves in the IT environments. A genderless identity and focusing on technology act as strategic ways for female programmers to fit themselves into the male-dominant field. However, there are still differences in daily communication topics and ways of entertainment after work in such an environment.
In addition, they also have to confront the precariousness of short career and structural discrimination for women. In IT companies requirements, they may write "preferable males" and unmarried women are more ideal. IT companies' reluctance to recruit women who are and will be held back by marriage and family duties. As they age, they might be disposable chopsticks for company, but because they don't have a family, they may face this terrible situation alone.
References: Ping Sun (2019): Straddling between technology and gender boundaries: the identity negotiation of female programmers in China, Information, Communication & Society, DOI:10.1080/1369118X.2019.1623905
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Your original sentence was confusing and a bit too long. I think it makes more sense to read now, but I may have changed your original meaning.
However, the IT industry is renowned for its rejection of femininity.
In order to find acceptance within the IT field, female programmers may not want to address their gender, but to stressake on a genderless role so as to fit themselves into the IT environments.
I'm not sure what you mean by 'to address their gender'. It's gramatically okay, it's just unclear what you mean here.
ATaking on a genderless identity and focussing on technology act as strategic ways for female programmers to fit themselves into the male-dominanted field.
However, there are still differences in daily communication topics and ways of entertainmentdifferences still exist in communication and after -work in such an enviroentertainment.
In addition, theywomen also have to confront the precariousness of a short career and structural discrimination for women.
In IT companies requirements, they may write "preferable males" and unmarried women are more idealjob postings, some IT companies write "males preferred" and prefer to hire unmarried women.
IT companies' are reluctancet to recruit women who are andor will be held back by marriage and family duties.
As they age, theywomen might become disposable chopsticks for company, but becausefor the company. If they don't have a family, they may face this terrible situation alone.
I like the phrase 'disposable chopsticks', but unfortunately it's too unusual for this kind of writing!
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This one was difficult for me to correct because I couldn't always understand what you were trying to say. Make sure your sentences are as simple and short as possible. This way, you can make sure the main subject of each sentence is as clear as possible.
On another point, words such as 'may' and 'might' should be avoided as much as possible in this kind of writing because it makes your arguments unclear.
Keep going!! ^^
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As the rampant expansion of China's industry upgrading and digitalization has attracted a large number of migrant population, more Chinese women swarm to the IT-related industry.
Your original sentence was confusing and a bit too long. I think it makes more sense to read now, but I may have changed your original meaning. |
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However, IT industry is renowned for its rejection of femininity. However, the IT industry is renowned for its rejection of femininity. |
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In order to find acceptance within the IT field, female programmers may not want to address their gender, but to stress a genderless role so as to fit themselves in the IT environments. In order to find acceptance within the IT field, female programmers may not want to address their gender, but t I'm not sure what you mean by 'to address their gender'. It's gramatically okay, it's just unclear what you mean here. |
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A genderless identity and focusing on technology act as strategic ways for female programmers to fit themselves into the male-dominant field.
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However, there are still differences in daily communication topics and ways of entertainment after work in such an environment. However, |
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In addition, they also have to confront the precariousness of short career and structural discrimination for women. In addition, |
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In IT companies requirements, they may write "preferable males" and unmarried women are more ideal. In |
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IT companies' reluctance to recruit women who are and will be held back by marriage and family duties. IT companies |
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As they age, they might be disposable chopsticks for company, but because they don't have a family, they may face this terrible situation alone. As they age, I like the phrase 'disposable chopsticks', but unfortunately it's too unusual for this kind of writing! |
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References: Ping Sun (2019): Straddling between technology and gender boundaries: the identity negotiation of female programmers in China, Information, Communication & Society, DOI:10.1080/1369118X.2019.1623905 |
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