Jan. 14, 2023
Report: What to do after Secondary School in Spain?
What to do after Secondary School in Spain?
Introduction
Despite political efforts to change dynamics on young choices when they finish ESO (Obligatory Secondary Education), everything have remained almost in the same way for 20 years. Some of them decide go ahead and start Bachellor in order to get a degree in the future, whereas others choose to get immersed in the proffesional world and learning directly from the practical experience.
Students who choose continuing their formation
Unfortunately, most students in this case opt for the technical or scientific brand of Bachellor, which is supposed to assure a better future (in economical terms). On the contrary those who prefer the humanistic brand mostly want to do a linguistic degree, such as, philology or translation and interpretation, because of the same reason. In both cases, they are often influenced by family, some teachers and media, where they get this basic orientation from. As a note, currently there is not much differences in this way due to gender.
Students who prefer start working
On the other hand, the main part of young who opt for this alternative, doing so because they have been disencouraged throughout ESO and not properly informed. In this case, mechanical jobs related with contruction, gardening and welding are most likely between boys; and others like administrative and nurse auxiliar (both after a short curse) are so in case of girls.
Informacion source
The information described above comes firstly from secondary schools, phycologists especialized in orientation and lastly from my personal experience.
Conclusion
On summary, what was expressed above corresponds with a general scheme which have been almost static throughough the last two decades.
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Report: What to do after Secondary School in Spain?
What to do after Secondary School in Spain?
Introduction
Despite political efforts to change the dynamics on youngstudent choices when they finish ESO (Obligatory Secondary Education), everything haves remained almost in the same way for 20 years.
Some of them decide to go ahead and start a Bachellor's program in order to get a degree in the future, whereas others choose to get immersed in the proffessional world and learning directly from the practical experience.
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In both cases, they are often influenced by family, some teachers and the media, where they get thisa basic orientation from.
As a note, currently there is not much differences in this way due to gender.
Students who pPrefer sto Start wWorking
On the other hand, the main part of young whoreason students opt for this alternative, doing so because they have been disencouraged throughout ESO and not properly informed.
In this case, mechanical jobs related withto construction, gardening and welding are most likely between boys; andchosen by men while other jobs like administrative andor nurse auxiliary (both after a short course) are so in case of girlschosen by women.
Informaction sSource
The information described above comes fdirsectly from secondary schools, phsychologists especializeding in orientation and lastly from my personal experience.
Conclusion
OIn summary, what was expressed above corresponds with a general scheme which haves been almost static throughought the last two decades.
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Report: What to docomes after Ssecondary Sschool in Spain?
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What to docomes after Ssecondary Sschool in Spain?
Introduction
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Informacion sSources
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Conclusion
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Despite political efforts to change dynamics on young choices when they finish ESO (Obligatory Secondary Education), everything have remained almost in the same way for 20 years. Despite political efforts to change Despite political efforts to change the dynamics on |
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Some of them decide go ahead and start Bachellor in order to get a degree in the future, whereas others choose to get immersed in the proffesional world and learning directly from the practical experience. Some of them decide Some of them decide to go ahead and start a Bachel |
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Unfortunately, most students in this case opt for the technical or scientific brand of Bachellor, which is supposed to assure a better future (in economical terms). Unfortunately, most students in this case opt for bachelor's in the technical or scientific Unfortunately, most students in this case opt for the technical or scientific |
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On the contrary those who prefer the humanistic brand mostly want to do a linguistic degree, such as, philology or translation and interpretation, because of the same reason. On the contrary, those who On the contrary, those who prefer the |
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In both cases, they are often influenced by family, some teachers and media, where they get this basic orientation from. In both cases, they are often influenced by family, In both cases, they are often influenced by family, some teachers and the media, where they get |
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As a note, currently there is not much differences in this way due to gender.
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On the other hand, the main part of young who opt for this alternative, doing so because they have been disencouraged throughout ESO and not properly informed.
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In this case, mechanical jobs related with contruction, gardening and welding are most likely between boys; and others like administrative and nurse auxiliar (both after a short curse) are so in case of girls. In this case, mechanical jobs related I do not know what "(both after a short curse)" means. In this case, mechanical jobs related |
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The information described above comes firstly from secondary schools, phycologists especialized in orientation and lastly from my personal experience. The information described above comes I am not sure what this means. Also, when citing sources for an essay academically, this will not suffice. There are many possible options of citation, but popular styles of citation are Chicago-Style and MLA. The information described above comes |
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On summary, what was expressed above corresponds with a general scheme which have been almost static throughough the last two decades.
This is all nitpicking about essay writing, so feel free to ignore what I have to say here. "To summarize" is a blunt transition for a conclusion and I would recommend to stray away from using it. Also, a conclusion should be more than one sentence long and not rephrase what was said in the essay. A conclusion should take the information that was presented previously and turn it into a final thought that you want the reader to be left with. If you would like, I'd be happy to provide a sample of how I would write the conclusion for this essay.
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