April 7, 2022
You have just returned from leading an adventure weekend with your school. In preparation for an assessment meeting, you have been asked to write a report for the head of school.
Your report should explain what you feel the weekend achieved for students and teachers alike, describe any problems you may have had and suggest any changes you would make to the adventure weekend that would make it more interesting for everyone.
Write your report.
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(What could make it sound more natural? )
Report about the excursion of this weekend.
Introduction.
The aim of this report is to describe the activities that took place in The Jerte Valley during the currently annual adventure weekend with the students of the third course of the secondary school.
Goals and achievements.
It was a good trip overall, despite some setbacks in our schedule related to students' behaviour, as I will explain below. This has been an extraordinary opportunity to improve communication between the different groups in both class (A and B) for this course, and especially between teachers involved and students. For example, throughout during the hike up to the valley's lake, students of both classes help one to another to go up through the hardest slopes, crossing over the river, etc. It was stimulating for a teacher to see how students that have almost not interacted before at school cooperate and have fun. As regards (it is corrected from Write&Improve website as "As regards to") teachers, we could know our students beyond the daily class context, what led us to a better and more personal communication. Moreover, they put some theory concepts, mostly from the natural sciences subject, into practice.
Problems and suggestions for the next trip.
There had been some problems with a little group of the class A. They managed to hide a couple of whiskey bottles with the purpose of drinking them once teachers were sleeping. However, I could catch them on time, so I avoided the situation got worse. I have just taken an appointment with their parents in order to have another meeting and inform them about this wrong-doing. Therefore, as a suggestion for the future, I only propose look in their backpacks before the travel start.
Conclusion
All in all, these adventure days have been a really useful experienced that help us all to get closer to each other and get to know us out of classroom.
What could make it sound more natural?
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All in all, these days of adventure days have been a really useful experienced that has helped us all to get closer to each other and get to know us out of classroom.to forge stronger bonds between one another.
"experience" es tanto el sustantivo como el verbo, sin embargo no lleva "ed" si quieres escribir la palabra como un sustantivo
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Report about the excursion of this weekend (C1 CAE)
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Report about the excursion of this weekend (C1 CAE) Report about the excursion |
You have just returned from leading an adventure weekend with your school. You have just returned from leading an Reading this, it feels like "adventure weekend" is the specific name for an activity so I went and capitalized it. Otherwise, it should be "weekend adventure" instead. |
In preparation for an assessment meeting, you have been asked to write a report for the head of school. In preparation for an assessment meeting, you have been asked to write a report for the head of the school. |
Your report should explain what you feel the weekend achieved for students and teachers alike, describe any problems you may have had and suggest any changes you would make to the adventure weekend that would make it more interesting for everyone. Your report should explain what you feel |
Write your report. |
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(What could make it sound more natural? ) (What |
Report about the excursion of this weekend. Report about the excursion |
Introduction. |
The aim of this report is to describe the activities that took place in The Jerte Valley during the currently annual adventure weekend with the students of the third course of the secondary school. The aim of this report is to describe the activities that took place in The Jerte Valley during the current |
Goals and achievements. |
It was a good trip overall, despite some setbacks in our schedule related to students' behaviour, as I will explain below.
It was a good trip overall, despite some setbacks in our schedule |
This has been an extraordinary opportunity to improve communication between the different groups in both class (A and B) for this course, and especially between teachers involved and students. This has been an extraordinary opportunity to improve communications between the different groups in both classes (A and B) for this course, This has been an both classes (plural) |
For example, throughout during the hike up to the valley's lake, students of both classes help one to another to go up through the hardest slopes, crossing over the river, etc. For example, For example, help- presente, helped- pasado |
It was stimulating for a teacher to see how students that have almost not interacted before at school cooperate and have fun. It was stimulating for a teacher to see how students that have It was |
As regards (it is corrected from Write&Improve website as "As regards to") teachers, we could know our students beyond the daily class context, what led us to a better and more personal communication.
As regards (it is corrected from Write&Improve website as "As regards to") teachers, we https://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/regard-versus-regards |
Moreover, they put some theory concepts, mostly from the natural sciences subject, into practice. Moreover, |
Problems and suggestions for the next trip. |
There had been some problems with a little group of the class A. There ha There |
They managed to hide a couple of whiskey bottles with the purpose of drinking them once teachers were sleeping. They managed to hide a couple of whiskey bottles with the purpose of drinking them once the teachers were asleep They managed to hide a "a couple of" es muy informal |
However, I could catch them on time, so I avoided the situation got worse. However, I However, I |
I have just taken an appointment with their parents in order to have another meeting and inform them about this wrong-doing. I have just I have just |
Therefore, as a suggestion for the future, I only propose look in their backpacks before the travel start. Therefore, as a suggestion for the future, I Therefore, as a suggestion for the future, I |
Conclusion |
All in all, these adventure days have been a really useful experienced that help us all to get closer to each other and get to know us out of classroom. All in all, these adventur All in all, these days of adventure "experience" es tanto el sustantivo como el verbo, sin embargo no lleva "ed" si quieres escribir la palabra como un sustantivo |
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