After the traffic accident I went to a shrine to takreceive a lucky charm.,

W(we call it "Omamori".),

Thenand made a wish to god of the shrine wishing for traffic safety.

These three sentences should all be one, since you used then to continue talking about what you were doing.

When I looked up which shrines' god hais the highemost power forful when it comes to driving safetly, Google indicated me " that it is "Kanda Myojin".

The shrine is known asto bring good fortun for thee to businesses.

That's why many business personsople who want to getbe successful at their work would come, but at the same time it's good for drivers' safety.

Persons is very rarely used, I suggest using people unless you're certain persons is the right word to use

New years holiday would come soonas fast approaching.

TOn the first day of January, I invited two of my friends to go to "Hatsumode".

ThenWhile there I prayed for no more traffic accidents and bought a lucky charm.

For nNow, five years have passed.

Butand I still have been putting it on with mecarry it with me every day.

These really short sentences should be combined into a few longer ones

Since I have it all the ticarrying it with me.

I have never getot into any serious car accidents.

I'm not sure it because ofwhether that is due to the power of the lucky charm.

Renewing my Driving/Driver's License : Part 2

After the traffic accident I went to a shrine to takeget a lucky charm.

We call ithese "Omamori".

TI then made a wish to the god of the shrine for traffic safety.

When I looked up which shrines's god hasd the highgreatest power fover driving safety, Google indicated me " "Kanda Myojin".

The shrine is known as good fortun for the business.

That's why many business persons who want to get successed at their work would come but at the same time it's good for drivers' safety.

The New yYear's holiday would come soon.

The first day of January, I invited two of my friends to go to "Hatsumode".

Then I prayed for no more traffic accidents and bought a/the lucky charm.

For now, five years have passed.

But I still have been puttcarrying it on with me.

Sinceo, I have it all the time.

I never gethaven't got in any serious car accident.

I'm not sure itf it's because of the power of the lucky charm.

Renewing my Drivinger's License : Part 2

After the traffic accident, I went to a shrine to takeget a lucky charm.

Then I made a wish tofor road safety to the god of the shrine traffic safety.

When I looked up which shrines's god has the highest power for driving safety, Google indicated mecame up with " Kanda Myojin".

It's just one shrine so it's "shrine's" and not "shrines'".

The shrine is known asto bring good fortun for thee to businesses.

That's why many business personsople who want to getbecome successful at their work would come but same time it's goodvisit the shrine, but it's also known to provide safety for drivers' safety.

The New yYear's holidays would come soonere about to start.

TOn the first day of January, I invited two of my friends to go to "Hatsumode".

Then I prayed for no more traffic accidents and bought a lucky charm.

"Then" is like "そして", and I don't think it really fits here, since you didn't write anything that precedes this.

For now, five years have passed. since then,

Bbut I have still have been puttbeen carrying it onaround with me.

You shouldn't really start sentences with "but". I think you can join these 2 sentences together.

Since I have it with me all the time.,

I've never getotten into any serious car accidents.

You should join these 2 sentences together, (Since....., [outcome])
(……ので、[結果]).
Like you wouldn't say いつも持っているので。それ以来、事故は起こしていません。

I'm not sure itf it's because of the power of the lucky charm.

It's up to you whether you believe it or not.

Renewing my Driving License : Part 2

We more commonly refer to it as a driver's license.

After the traffic accident, I went to a shrine to takeget a lucky charm.

We call it "Omamori"."

Then I made a wish to god of the shrineat the shrine for one of the gods for traffic safety.

When I looked up which shrines's god has the highest power for driving safety, Google indicated me " "Kanda Myojin"."

The shrine is known asto give good fortune for the business.

That's why many people in business persons who want to getbe success at their work wofuld come, but at the same time, it's good for drivers's safety.

New yYear's holidDay would come soon.

TFor the first day of January, I invited two my friends to go "to Hatsumode".

Then I prayed for no more traffic accidents and bought a lucky charm.

For nowBy this time, five years have passed.

Even better: Five years have now passed since the accident.

But I have still have been putting it onkept the charm with me.

I would mention the charm here, otherwise it might be unclear if by "it" you mean the accident or the charm. It's not unusual for a person to say they carry their (traumatic event) with them, in a figurative sense.

Since I've haved it with me all the time.,

I've never getotten in any serious car accident.

I'm not sure itf it's because of the power of the lucky charm.