May 6, 2022
Regarding Entomophagy
Entomophagy has long been familiar to humankind. Many benefits exist in an entomophagy diet. I would like to introduce three of them.
The first is its high nutritional value. Insects contain a lot of iron and protein, which means they provide a lot of valuable animal protein.
The second is that they are easy to raise. You can get the same amount of protein with a very small amount of feed compared to cows, pigs, and other animals. Insect diets have the potential to save the world from a food crisis.
Third, the generations change quickly. It takes several years to raise a cow, but insects can be shipped in as little as one month, depending on the species. Also, cows emit greenhouse gases, but insects do not, which is good for the environment and may bring us closer to achieving the goals of the SDGs.
Regarding Entomophagy
"Regarding" is a redundant word. If the piece were to be titled simply "Entomophagy", the reader would assume correctly that the piece is about entomophagy. However what you have written is not gramatically incorrect.
Entomophagy has long been familiar to humankind.
Many benefits exist in a diet based on entomophagy diet.
I would like to introduce three of them.
The first is its high nutritional value.
Insects contain a lot of iron and protein, which means they provide a lot of valuable animal protein.
The second is that they are easy to raise.
You can get the same amount of protein with a very small amount of feeood compared to meat from cows, pigs, and other animals.
Feed is used when talking about food given to animals
Insect diets have the potential to save the world from a food crisis.
Third, the generations change quickly.
It would be better to say "Insects grow quickly"
It takes several years to raise a cow, but insects can be shippedready in as little as onea month, depending on the species.
Shipped is not incorrect, especially with american useage, but I think ready sounds better. As little as one month is not incorrect, but a sounds better.
Also, cows emit greenhouse gases, but insects do not, which is good for the environment and may bring us closer to achieving the goals of the SDGs.
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A very high standard of English and an interesting read!
Regarding Entomophagy
Entomophagy has long been familiar to humankind.
Many benefits exist in an entomophagy diet.An entomophagy diet has many benefits.
This is a slightly simpler phrasing.
I would like to introduce three of them.
The first is its high nutritional value.
Insects contain a lot of iron and protein, which means they provide a lot of valuable animal protein.
The second is that theyinsects are easy to raise.
You can get the same amount of protein with a very small amount of feed compared to cows, pigs, and other animals.
Insect diets have the potential to save the world from a food crisis.
Third, the generations changeinsects can be raised quickly.
It takes several years to raise a cow, but insects can be raised and shipped in as little as one month, depending on the species.
I am assuming that the word "shipped" is being used to say that the insects are transported from the place they are raised to a place where they are sold as food.
Also, cows emit greenhouse gases, but insects do not, which is good for the environment and may bring us closer to achieving the gSDGs (Sustainable Development Goals) of the SDGsUN (United Nations).
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Very well written. Good job!
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Regarding Entomophagy This sentence has been marked as perfect! Regarding Entomophagy "Regarding" is a redundant word. If the piece were to be titled simply "Entomophagy", the reader would assume correctly that the piece is about entomophagy. However what you have written is not gramatically incorrect. |
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Entomophagy has long been familiar to humankind. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Many benefits exist in an entomophagy diet.
This is a slightly simpler phrasing. Many benefits exist in a diet based on entomophagy |
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I would like to introduce three of them. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The first is its high nutritional value. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Insects contain a lot of iron and protein, which means they provide a lot of valuable animal protein. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The second is that they are easy to raise. The second is that This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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You can get the same amount of protein with a very small amount of feed compared to cows, pigs, and other animals. This sentence has been marked as perfect! You can get the same amount of protein with a very small amount of f Feed is used when talking about food given to animals |
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Insect diets have the potential to save the world from a food crisis. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Third, the generations change quickly. Third, Third, the generations change quickly. It would be better to say "Insects grow quickly" |
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It takes several years to raise a cow, but insects can be shipped in as little as one month, depending on the species. It takes several years to raise a cow, but insects can be raised and shipped in as little as one month, depending on the species. I am assuming that the word "shipped" is being used to say that the insects are transported from the place they are raised to a place where they are sold as food. It takes several years to raise a cow, but insects can be Shipped is not incorrect, especially with american useage, but I think ready sounds better. As little as one month is not incorrect, but a sounds better. |
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Also, cows emit greenhouse gases, but insects do not, which is good for the environment and may bring us closer to achieving the goals of the SDGs. Also, cows emit greenhouse gases, but insects do not, which is good for the environment and may bring us closer to achieving the This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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