March 14, 2021
Refreshing Day
I went to having cut my hair today. Whenever I had cut my hair, I can relax and feel myself renew. It was the first time to dye my gray hair. I was sad a little because I think I am aging , I mean I am getting older.
今日は髪を切りに行ってきた。髪を切るといつも気分がリフレッシュするし気持ちが新たになる。初めて白髪染めをして少し悲しかった。歳を重ねているなぁ、歳を取ったなぁと思ったから。
Refreshing Day
I went to having cuget my hair cut today.
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I went to get my haircut today.
I went to have my hair cut today.
I had my hair cut today.
I had my haircut today.
Whenever I had cutve my hair, I can cut, I relax and feel myself renewrefreshed.
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It was the first time to dyeI had my gray hair dyed.
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It was the first time I let them dye my gray hair.
I was sad a little sad because I think I am aging , I mean, I am getting older.
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いいです。年を取るのはわかりましたね。
March 15, 2021
いつも添削してくれてありがとうございます。うれしいです。
Refreshing Day
I went to having cute my hair cut today.
Past tense is needed here! You can say 'I went to cut my hair today' but it sounds like you started to cut it yourself but stopped. 'Hair cut' is used for salons/hairdressers.
Whenever I had cutve my hair cut, I can relax and feel myself renew.
Not past tense. 'Feel myself renew' isn't wrong but sounds odd, try 'I can relax and feel like a new person' - this is a common phrase! :)
It was the first time to dyedying my gray hair.
Another option is 'It was the first time having my gray hair dyed' :)
I was sad a little because I think I am aging ,. I mean, I am getting older.
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Very good job for your level of English! A couple of tenses were wrong but don't worry, it's all good practice and I understood you! Hope you like your haircut :)
March 15, 2021
Thank you for correcting. Everytime I write a journal, I can learn many things. I really appreciate.
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I went to having cut my hair today. I went to hav Past tense is needed here! You can say 'I went to cut my hair today' but it sounds like you started to cut it yourself but stopped. 'Hair cut' is used for salons/hairdressers. I went to US alternative or I went to get my haircut today. I went to have my hair cut today. I had my hair cut today. I had my haircut today. |
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Whenever I had cut my hair, I can relax and feel myself renew. Whenever I ha Not past tense. 'Feel myself renew' isn't wrong but sounds odd, try 'I can relax and feel like a new person' - this is a common phrase! :) Whenever I ha US alternative |
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It was the first time to dye my gray hair. It was the first time Another option is 'It was the first time having my gray hair dyed' :) It was the first time US alternatives It was the first time I let them dye my gray hair. |
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I was sad a little because I think I am aging , I mean I am getting older. I was sad a little because I think I am aging I was US alternative |
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