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tana_gao

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redesign my bedroom

Since I have been moved into the apartment over three month, there are still just few furnitures I bought and have. I visited some of my friend’s house and their bedroom, they really have their own style. Since I was lazy, it also gave me more opportunity to design my room.

My room is not small, so I would divide it into three parts: the bed, the chill place and the workplace.

For the bed, I reused what I have now, and move it near the window. The mattress is heavy but I now could handle it, thanks for the milk here haha. Now I am laying into it, the only bad thing about is that when the bed near the window, all alert from the outside would come to your eyes.

For the chill place, I still consider which style I would love to use.

For the workplace, I found a really good example of my friend’s room. He is a geek and has a fantastic wfh selections. And tomorrow he would visit my home and figure out which is the best match for my own.

Great, I love life again!

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rRedesign ming My bBedroom

This sounds more natural in the US. We capitalize the first letter of important words in titles.

Since I have beenI moved into thean apartment over three month, there are still just few furnitures I bought and havs ago and still have only bought a few pieces of furniture.

I visited some of mya friend’s housme and their bedroom, they really have their own style.

Since I wasam lazy, it also gave me more opportunityideas to design my room.

My room is not small, so I wouldill divide it into three parts: the bed, the chill place and the workplace.

For the bed, I reused what I have now, and moved it near the window.

The mattress is heavy but I now couldI can handle it, thanks for the milk here haha.

I'm not sure what "Thanks for the milk here" means so I removed it.

Now I am laying into it, ton it. The only bad thing about it is that when the bed is near the window, all alert from the outside would come to your eyesyou notice everything outside.

lie, lay, has lain - takes no direct object

lay, laid, has laid - takes a direct oject

For the chill place, I am still considering which style I would love to use.

For the workplace, I found a really good example ofin my friend’s room.

He is a geek and has a fantastic wfh selections so tomorrow he will visit my home and figure out which is the best match for mine.

What is wfh?

And tomorrow he would visit my home and figure out which is the best match for my own.

Great, I love life again!

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That sounds fun! Good writing!

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tana_gao

Dec. 13, 2022

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I visited some of mya friend’s housme and their bedroom, they really have their own style.

Thanks Mari, I have a question for the usage of ‘a’, because I have visited several person’s homes. Would you love to explain it more to me about this? Thanks

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tana_gao

Dec. 13, 2022

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The mattress is heavy but I now couldI can handle it, thanks for the milk here haha.

I would love to say that the USA milk makes me full of energy. How to say it properly?

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tana_gao

Dec. 13, 2022

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He is a geek and has a fantastic wfh selections so tomorrow he will visit my home and figure out which is the best match for mine.

Sorry, I should capitalize this abb. Word. It means ‘work from home’.

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tana_gao

Dec. 13, 2022

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Thanks Mari, every time when I read your feedback, I always feel warm and want to write more and learn more!

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mari

Dec. 13, 2022

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Thanks Mari, I have a question for the usage of ‘a’, because I have visited several person’s homes. Would you love to explain it more to me about this? Thanks

oh! okay, my mistake. Sorry! My revised correction is this: "I visited some of my friends' homes and their bedrooms show that they really have their own styles."

I placed bedrooms separate from visiting homes because it sounded as if your friends' bedrooms show that they have their own style.

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mari

Dec. 13, 2022

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I would love to say that the USA milk makes me full of energy. How to say it properly?

oh! That's so interesting. You're the first person I've heard say this. okay, so this is what I'd write, "The mattress is heavy but now I can handle it thanks to all of the energy I'm given from the US milk I've been drinking here, haha."

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mari

Dec. 13, 2022

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Sorry, I should capitalize this abb. Word. It means ‘work from home’.

Sorry, I'm still confused. What's a WFH selection?

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mari

Dec. 13, 2022

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Thanks Mari, every time when I read your feedback, I always feel warm and want to write more and learn more!

awww! You're so sweet! I enjoy reading your entries, too! If you keep writing, I'll keep reading and correcting them. :)

redesigning my bedroom

Sounds a little smoother. 'redesign my bedroom' sounds like a command

redesigning my bedroom

Since I have been moved into the apartment over three month, there are still just few furnitures I bought and have.

I moved into my new apartment three months ago. The rooms look a bit empty, since there are still some items of furniture that I have to buy.

I visited some of my friend’s house and their bedroom, they really have their own style.

I visited some of my friends at their places (/houses). From seeing their bedrooms, you can really tell that they have their own style.

Since I was lazy, it also gave me more opportunity to design my room.

There is one advantage to my laziness these past three months, and that is that it gave me the opportunity to think properly about how I want to decorate my space.

My room is not small, so I would have to divide it into three parts: the bed, the chill place and the workplace.

The chill place is not actually proper English. It’s pure slang. Instead, you can say a place to relax

My room is not small, so I would have to divide the space into three parts: a place for sleeping, a place for relaxing, and a place for working. My bed will obviously go into the area allocated to sleeping etc.

For the bed, I reused what I have now, and move it near the window.

I didn’t buy a new bed. I kept the one I already had. I moved it near the window.

The mattress is heavy but I now could handle it, thanks for the milk here haha.

The mattress was heavy but I could handle lifting and moving it, thanks to all the milk I’ve been drinking here (ha ha).

Now that I am laying inton it, the only bad thing about it is that whenbecause the bed is near the window, all alert from the outside would come to your eyes.

all alert from the outside would come to your eyes - doesn’t make sense

Suggestion:
Light streams into your eyes once the sun is up, and if I forget to shut the window, then I get woken up by the noise from outside too.

For the chill place, I am still considering which style I would love to use.

I think you live in a studio apartment.

For the sitting area/ the hangout area, I am still considering which style I would love to/ want to use

For the workplace, I found a really good example ofin my friend’s room.

You can also use work station instead of workplace
Desk area can work too

He is a geek and has a fantastic wfh selections.

And tomorrow he wouldill visit my home and, to help me figure out which is the best match for my own.

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Good luck with decorating the rest of your apartment!

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tana_gao

Dec. 13, 2022

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Since I have been moved into the apartment over three month, there are still just few furnitures I bought and have.

Wow, many phrase! Thanks!

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tana_gao

Dec. 13, 2022

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Thanks Sarah Louise, I love your detailed feedback, and it empowers me to pay more attention on the phrase usage! Appreciate it again!

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sarahlouise

Dec. 13, 2022

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Thanks Sarah Louise, I love your detailed feedback, and it empowers me to pay more attention on the phrase usage! Appreciate it again!

You’re very welcome! Great effort!! Keep up the good work :D

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sarahlouise

Dec. 13, 2022

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Oh actually i came up with another alternative to decorating or designing later too… furnishing … “to furnish a room” 😄.

redesign my bedroom


redesigning my bedroom

redesigning my bedroom

Sounds a little smoother. 'redesign my bedroom' sounds like a command

rRedesign ming My bBedroom

This sounds more natural in the US. We capitalize the first letter of important words in titles.

Since I have been moved into the apartment over three month, there are still just few furnitures I bought and have.


Since I have been moved into the apartment over three month, there are still just few furnitures I bought and have.

I moved into my new apartment three months ago. The rooms look a bit empty, since there are still some items of furniture that I have to buy.

Since I have beenI moved into thean apartment over three month, there are still just few furnitures I bought and havs ago and still have only bought a few pieces of furniture.

I visited some of my friend’s house and their bedroom, they really have their own style.


I visited some of my friend’s house and their bedroom, they really have their own style.

I visited some of my friends at their places (/houses). From seeing their bedrooms, you can really tell that they have their own style.

I visited some of mya friend’s housme and their bedroom, they really have their own style.

Since I was lazy, it also gave me more opportunity to design my room.


Since I was lazy, it also gave me more opportunity to design my room.

There is one advantage to my laziness these past three months, and that is that it gave me the opportunity to think properly about how I want to decorate my space.

Since I wasam lazy, it also gave me more opportunityideas to design my room.

My room is not small, so I would divide it into three parts: the bed, the chill place and the workplace.


My room is not small, so I would have to divide it into three parts: the bed, the chill place and the workplace.

The chill place is not actually proper English. It’s pure slang. Instead, you can say a place to relax My room is not small, so I would have to divide the space into three parts: a place for sleeping, a place for relaxing, and a place for working. My bed will obviously go into the area allocated to sleeping etc.

My room is not small, so I wouldill divide it into three parts: the bed, the chill place and the workplace.

For the bed, I reused what I have now, and move it near the window.


For the bed, I reused what I have now, and move it near the window.

I didn’t buy a new bed. I kept the one I already had. I moved it near the window.

For the bed, I reused what I have now, and moved it near the window.

The mattress is heavy but I now could handle it, thanks for the milk here haha.


The mattress is heavy but I now could handle it, thanks for the milk here haha.

The mattress was heavy but I could handle lifting and moving it, thanks to all the milk I’ve been drinking here (ha ha).

The mattress is heavy but I now couldI can handle it, thanks for the milk here haha.

I'm not sure what "Thanks for the milk here" means so I removed it.

Now I am laying into it, the only bad thing about is that when the bed near the window, all alert from the outside would come to your eyes.


Now that I am laying inton it, the only bad thing about it is that whenbecause the bed is near the window, all alert from the outside would come to your eyes.

all alert from the outside would come to your eyes - doesn’t make sense Suggestion: Light streams into your eyes once the sun is up, and if I forget to shut the window, then I get woken up by the noise from outside too.

Now I am laying into it, ton it. The only bad thing about it is that when the bed is near the window, all alert from the outside would come to your eyesyou notice everything outside.

lie, lay, has lain - takes no direct object lay, laid, has laid - takes a direct oject

For the chill place, I still consider which style I would love to use.


For the chill place, I am still considering which style I would love to use.

I think you live in a studio apartment. For the sitting area/ the hangout area, I am still considering which style I would love to/ want to use

For the chill place, I am still considering which style I would love to use.

For the workplace, I found a really good example of my friend’s room.


For the workplace, I found a really good example ofin my friend’s room.

You can also use work station instead of workplace Desk area can work too

For the workplace, I found a really good example ofin my friend’s room.

He is a geek and has a fantastic wfh selections.


He is a geek and has a fantastic wfh selections.

He is a geek and has a fantastic wfh selections so tomorrow he will visit my home and figure out which is the best match for mine.

What is wfh?

And tomorrow he would visit my home and figure out which is the best match for my own.


And tomorrow he wouldill visit my home and, to help me figure out which is the best match for my own.

And tomorrow he would visit my home and figure out which is the best match for my own.

Great, I love life again!


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