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March 15, 2023

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Recent Parades at Sanrio Puroland 2

Today, I'll write about criticism on the newest parade at Sanrio Puroland. Its title is "Rainbow Drops ~The Narrative of Rain Fairies and Their friends~." There are 9 Sanrio characters and 3 fairies for 4 weathers, sun, wind, cloud and rain. The costumes expresses their character well and the music has broad genre from pop to EDM, so the dance are also variety-rich. The story, however, is really poor in my opinion. The Rain fairies are considered lack experiences by other fairies because they can't control to fall rain when feeling emotionally overwrought. In this situation, others blame them because they think rain is the worst whether. I have said about Sanrio's core sprit is "We're all friends" in previous journal entries, but I feel that the fairies' notion is never match for its sprit. In the ending of this show, they understand the importance of Rain fairies existences. But the opportunity is that they distinguish the fire on the Wisdom Tree which is a symbol of Puroland to give theirs all. This scene's way of expressing the fire is really powerful, but the reason why the tree is on fire is the fairies quarrel. So, it is seemed that the value of Rain fairies is found out because their power is useful to solve their problem but they're friends.
If you like live dance performances, you will enjoy this parade, but if you want to learn Sanrio's spirit, you may tilt your head in confusion.

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Recent Parades at Sanrio Puroland 2

Today, I'll write about criticism review on the newest parade at Sanrio Puroland.

Its title is is called "Rainbow Drops ~The Narrative of Rain Fairies and Their friends~."

There are 9 Sanrio characters and 3 fairies for 4 weathers,representing the sun, wind, cloud and rain.

The costumes expresses their characters well, and the music has broad genrevaries from pop to EDM, so the dances are also variety-richery different.

The story, however, is really poor in my opinion.

The Rain fFairies are considered lack inexperiencesd by the other fairies because they can't control to fallaccidentally make it rain when feeling emotionally overwrought.

In this situation, others blame them because they think rain is the worst whether.

I have said abouthat Sanrio's core spirit is "We're all friends" in previous journal entries, but I feel that the fairies' notionpower is never match for its sprita for their feelings.

In the ending of this show, they understand the importance of the Rain fairies existences.

But the opportunity is that they disy do this by extinguish theing a fire oin the Wisdom Tree, which is a symbol of Puroland to give theirs all.

This scene's way of expresstinguishing the fire is really powerful, but the reason why the tree is on fire is that the fairies quarrelhad been fighting.

So, it is seemed that the value of Rain fairies is found out because their power is useful to solve their problem but, not because they' are friends.

If you like live dance performances, you will enjoy this parade, but if you want to learnexperience Sanrio's spirit, you may end up tilting your head in confusion.

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Nice writing, it definitely sounds interesting.

Recent Parades at Sanrio Puroland 2

Today, I'll write about the criticism on the newest parade at Sanrio Puroland.

Its title is "Rainbow Drops ~The Narrative of Rain Fairies and Their friends~."

There are 9 Sanrio characters and 3 fairies for 4 types of weathers,: sun, wind, cloud and rain.

The costumes expresses their characters well and the music has broadspans a broad range of genres from pop to EDM, so the dance are also variety-richchoreography is also very varied.

The story, however, is really poor in my opinion.

The Rain fFairies arey is considered lacking in experiences by the other fairies because they can't control to fall rain whenwhen rain falls when they're feeling emotionally overwrought.

aww. 意地悪そうですね。

In this situation, others blame them because they think rain is the worst whekind of weather.

雨が一番好きです。恵みたいと思います。

I have saidwritten about how Sanrio's core spritphilosophy is "We're all friends" in previous journal entries, but I feel that the fairies' notion isbehavior never match for its sprites this philosophy.

そうですね。

InAt the ending of this show, they understand the importance of the Rain fFairiey's existences.

また、

In the ending of this show, they understand the importance of the Rain Fairy's existence.

ButThey have the opportunity is that they dis, however, to extinguish the fire on the Wisdom Tree which is a symbol of Puroland to give theirs all.

This scene's way of expressing the fire is really powerful, but the reason why the tree is on fire is because of the fairies' quarrel.

So, it is seemed thatas if the value of the Rain fFairy ies dis found out becausecovered because, despite them being friends, their power is useful toin solveing their problem but they're friends.

If you like live dance performances, you will enjoy this parade, but if you want to learn about Sanrio's spirit, you may tilt your head in confusion.

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そうですね。残念ですね。でも、よく書けています!

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hirome

March 16, 2023

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昨年始まったパレードでしたが、1年で終わってしまうようです…。いつも添削ありがとうございます!

Recent Parades at Sanrio Puroland 2


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Today, I'll write about criticism on the newest parade at Sanrio Puroland.


Today, I'll write about the criticism on the newest parade at Sanrio Puroland.

Today, I'll write about criticism review on the newest parade at Sanrio Puroland.

Its title is "Rainbow Drops ~The Narrative of Rain Fairies and Their friends~."


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Its title is is called "Rainbow Drops ~The Narrative of Rain Fairies and Their friends~."

There are 9 Sanrio characters and 3 fairies for 4 weathers, sun, wind, cloud and rain.


There are 9 Sanrio characters and 3 fairies for 4 types of weathers,: sun, wind, cloud and rain.

There are 9 Sanrio characters and 3 fairies for 4 weathers,representing the sun, wind, cloud and rain.

The costumes expresses their character well and the music has broad genre from pop to EDM, so the dance are also variety-rich.


The costumes expresses their characters well and the music has broadspans a broad range of genres from pop to EDM, so the dance are also variety-richchoreography is also very varied.

The costumes expresses their characters well, and the music has broad genrevaries from pop to EDM, so the dances are also variety-richery different.

The story, however, is really poor in my opinion.


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The Rain fairies are considered lack experiences by other fairies because they can't control to fall rain when feeling emotionally overwrought.


The Rain fFairies arey is considered lacking in experiences by the other fairies because they can't control to fall rain whenwhen rain falls when they're feeling emotionally overwrought.

aww. 意地悪そうですね。

The Rain fFairies are considered lack inexperiencesd by the other fairies because they can't control to fallaccidentally make it rain when feeling emotionally overwrought.

In this situation, others blame them because they think rain is the worst whether.


In this situation, others blame them because they think rain is the worst whekind of weather.

雨が一番好きです。恵みたいと思います。

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I have said about Sanrio's core sprit is "We're all friends" in previous journal entries, but I feel that the fairies' notion is never match for its sprit.


I have saidwritten about how Sanrio's core spritphilosophy is "We're all friends" in previous journal entries, but I feel that the fairies' notion isbehavior never match for its sprites this philosophy.

そうですね。

I have said abouthat Sanrio's core spirit is "We're all friends" in previous journal entries, but I feel that the fairies' notionpower is never match for its sprita for their feelings.

In the ending of this show, they understand the importance of Rain fairies existences.


InAt the ending of this show, they understand the importance of the Rain fFairiey's existences.

また、 In the ending of this show, they understand the importance of the Rain Fairy's existence.

In the ending of this show, they understand the importance of the Rain fairies existences.

But the opportunity is that they distinguish the fire on the Wisdom Tree which is a symbol of Puroland to give theirs all.


ButThey have the opportunity is that they dis, however, to extinguish the fire on the Wisdom Tree which is a symbol of Puroland to give theirs all.

But the opportunity is that they disy do this by extinguish theing a fire oin the Wisdom Tree, which is a symbol of Puroland to give theirs all.

This scene's way of expressing the fire is really powerful, but the reason why the tree is on fire is the fairies quarrel.


This scene's way of expressing the fire is really powerful, but the reason why the tree is on fire is because of the fairies' quarrel.

This scene's way of expresstinguishing the fire is really powerful, but the reason why the tree is on fire is that the fairies quarrelhad been fighting.

So, it is seemed that the value of Rain fairies is found out because their power is useful to solve their problem but they're friends.


So, it is seemed thatas if the value of the Rain fFairy ies dis found out becausecovered because, despite them being friends, their power is useful toin solveing their problem but they're friends.

So, it is seemed that the value of Rain fairies is found out because their power is useful to solve their problem but, not because they' are friends.

If you like live dance performances, you will enjoy this parade, but if you want to learn Sanrio's spirit, you may tilt your head in confusion.


If you like live dance performances, you will enjoy this parade, but if you want to learn about Sanrio's spirit, you may tilt your head in confusion.

If you like live dance performances, you will enjoy this parade, but if you want to learnexperience Sanrio's spirit, you may end up tilting your head in confusion.

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