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Scarlett_Father

June 22, 2023

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Reasons to the Dragon Boat festival

I am not sure how many people will write the story of the Dragon Boat festival these days, since from today to the next two days, people in China will have a national holiday for it.

During these days, people would eat sticky rice dumplings and have boat racing to celebrate it. About 2500 years ago, a poet and stateman in ancient China, named Qu Yuan. He worked for Chu Kindom when he heard that his country was occupied by another kingdom, in order to show his loyalty, he himself jumped into a river to show his disgruntle and patriotism. Therefore, local people threw sticky rice dumpling into the river to prevent fish from devouring his body, and arose the noise of boat racing to keep the evil spirit away aiming to ensure the safety of Qu Yuan's spirit.

Throughout history, plenty of famous figures have come and gone, why we people in China only celebrate this stateman or poet? As to my understanding and give a personal opinion on this; Qu Yuan would like to suicide when his country was conquered, this is what our government wants to imply to us. They'd like to see this idea be inherited from generation to generation.

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Reasons tofor the Dragon Boat fFestival

英語の助詞がとても大変ですね。

I am not sure how many people will write about the story of the Dragon Boat fFestival these days, since, from today tor the next two days, people in China will have a national holiday for it.

"will write about ..."

During these daysis time, people wouldill eat sticky rice dumplings and havrace boat racings to celebrate it.

美味しそう!

About 2500 years ago, there was a poet and statesman in ancient China, named Qu Yuan.

He worked for the Chu Kingdom and, when he heard that his country was occupied by another kingdom, in order to show his loyalty, he himself jumped into a river to show his disgruntlement and patriotism.

複雑な分ですね。よく出来ました!

Therefore, local people threw sticky rice dumplings into the river to prevent the fish from devouring his body, and arose the noise of boat racing toraced boats so that the resulting noise would keep the evil spirits away aiming to ensure the safety of Qu Yuan's spirit.

他の複雑な分です。とても上手に書けていますよ。

Throughout history, plenty of famous figures have come and gone, so why do we people in China only celebrate this statesman or poet?

As to my understanding and to give a personal opinion on this;, Qu Yuan would like toanted to commit suicide when his country was conquered, and this is what our government wants to imply to us.

怖い。みんなが自殺をするなら、誰も国を守れませんね。

They'd like to see this idea be inheritedpassed on from generation to generation.

この添削の方が自然だと思います。

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とても面白い話です。教えてくれてありがとうございました。そして、よく出来ました!

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Scarlett_Father

June 25, 2023

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As to my understanding and to give a personal opinion on this;, Qu Yuan would like toanted to commit suicide when his country was conquered, and this is what our government wants to imply to us.

I do not encourage suicide for any purpose.

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Scarlett_Father

June 25, 2023

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添削てくれてどうもありがとうございます!:ー)

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mari

June 25, 2023

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I do not encourage suicide for any purpose.

私も!

Reasons tofor the Dragon Bboat festival

I am not sure how many people will write the story of the Dragon Bboat festival these days, since f. From today tofor the next two days, people in China will havecelebrate it and get a national holiday for it.

During these days, people wouldis period people will celebrate it by eating sticky rice dumplings and have boat racing to celebrate itcompetitions.

About 2500 years ago, there was a poet and statesman in ancient China, named Qu Yuan.

He worked for the Chu Kingdom and when he heard that his country was occupied by another kingdom, in order to show his loyalty, he himself jumped into a river to show his disgruntle andfrustration and also his patriotism.

Therefore, local people threw sticky rice dumplings into the river to prevent fish from devouring his body, and aroincreased the noise of the boat racing to keep the evil spirit away aiming. Their objective was to ensure the safety of Qu Yuan's spirit.

Throughout history, plenty of famous figures have come and gone, so why we people indo the Chinaese only celebrate this statesman or poet?

As to myfar as I understanding and to give ayou my personal opinion on this; Qu Yuan would like toanted to commit suicide when his country was conquered, t. This is what our government wants to imply toteach us.

They'd like to see this idea be inheritedpassed down from generation to generation.

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Scarlett_Father

June 23, 2023

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Thank you so much for your corrections!:-)

Reasons to go to the Dragon Boat festival

I am not sure how many people will writeremember the story of the Dragon Boat festival these days, since from today to. For the next two days, people in China will have a national holiday for it.

During these days, people would eat sticky rice dumplings and have boat racing to celebrate it.

About 2500 years ago, there was a poet and stateman in ancient China, named Qu Yuan.

He worked for the Chu Kingdom when he heard that his country was occupied by another kingdom, in order to show his loyalty, he himself jumped into a river to show his disgruntle and patriotism.

Therefore, local people threw sticky rice dumplings into the river to prevent fish from devouring his body, and aroused the noise of boat racing to keep the evil spirit away, aiming to ensure the safety of Qu Yuan's spirit.

Throughout history, plenty of famous figures have come and gone, why wedo people in China only celebrate this stateman orand poet?

As to my understanding and to give amy personal opinion on this; Qu Yuan would like tocommit suicide when his country was conquered, this is what our government wants to imply to us.

Last clause (the one about the government) could be rephrased as 'this is the inference that the government wants us to make'. But your version also makes sense.

They'd like to see this idea be inherited from generation to generation.

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A solid piece of writing that is perfectly understandable.
There were a few minor errors, but for the most part it is correct.

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Scarlett_Father

June 22, 2023

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Your kind words encourage me. Thank you for your corrections! :-)

Reasons to the Dragon Boat festival


Reasons to go to the Dragon Boat festival

Reasons tofor the Dragon Bboat festival

Reasons tofor the Dragon Boat fFestival

英語の助詞がとても大変ですね。

I am not sure how many people will write the story of the Dragon Boat festival these days, since from today to the next two days, people in China will have a national holiday for it.


I am not sure how many people will writeremember the story of the Dragon Boat festival these days, since from today to. For the next two days, people in China will have a national holiday for it.

I am not sure how many people will write the story of the Dragon Bboat festival these days, since f. From today tofor the next two days, people in China will havecelebrate it and get a national holiday for it.

I am not sure how many people will write about the story of the Dragon Boat fFestival these days, since, from today tor the next two days, people in China will have a national holiday for it.

"will write about ..."

During these days, people would eat sticky rice dumplings and have boat racing to celebrate it.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

During these days, people wouldis period people will celebrate it by eating sticky rice dumplings and have boat racing to celebrate itcompetitions.

During these daysis time, people wouldill eat sticky rice dumplings and havrace boat racings to celebrate it.

美味しそう!

About 2500 years ago, a poet and stateman in ancient China, named Qu Yuan.


About 2500 years ago, there was a poet and stateman in ancient China, named Qu Yuan.

About 2500 years ago, there was a poet and statesman in ancient China, named Qu Yuan.

About 2500 years ago, there was a poet and statesman in ancient China, named Qu Yuan.

He worked for Chu Kindom when he heard that his country was occupied by another kingdom, in order to show his loyalty, he himself jumped into a river to show his disgruntle and patriotism.


He worked for the Chu Kingdom when he heard that his country was occupied by another kingdom, in order to show his loyalty, he himself jumped into a river to show his disgruntle and patriotism.

He worked for the Chu Kingdom and when he heard that his country was occupied by another kingdom, in order to show his loyalty, he himself jumped into a river to show his disgruntle andfrustration and also his patriotism.

He worked for the Chu Kingdom and, when he heard that his country was occupied by another kingdom, in order to show his loyalty, he himself jumped into a river to show his disgruntlement and patriotism.

複雑な分ですね。よく出来ました!

Therefore, local people threw sticky rice dumpling into the river to prevent fish from devouring his body, and arose the noise of boat racing to keep the evil spirit away aiming to ensure the safety of Qu Yuan's spirit.


Therefore, local people threw sticky rice dumplings into the river to prevent fish from devouring his body, and aroused the noise of boat racing to keep the evil spirit away, aiming to ensure the safety of Qu Yuan's spirit.

Therefore, local people threw sticky rice dumplings into the river to prevent fish from devouring his body, and aroincreased the noise of the boat racing to keep the evil spirit away aiming. Their objective was to ensure the safety of Qu Yuan's spirit.

Therefore, local people threw sticky rice dumplings into the river to prevent the fish from devouring his body, and arose the noise of boat racing toraced boats so that the resulting noise would keep the evil spirits away aiming to ensure the safety of Qu Yuan's spirit.

他の複雑な分です。とても上手に書けていますよ。

Throughout history, plenty of famous figures have come and gone, why we people in China only celebrate this stateman or poet?


Throughout history, plenty of famous figures have come and gone, why wedo people in China only celebrate this stateman orand poet?

Throughout history, plenty of famous figures have come and gone, so why we people indo the Chinaese only celebrate this statesman or poet?

Throughout history, plenty of famous figures have come and gone, so why do we people in China only celebrate this statesman or poet?

As to my understanding and give a personal opinion on this; Qu Yuan would like to suicide when his country was conquered, this is what our government wants to imply to us.


As to my understanding and to give amy personal opinion on this; Qu Yuan would like tocommit suicide when his country was conquered, this is what our government wants to imply to us.

Last clause (the one about the government) could be rephrased as 'this is the inference that the government wants us to make'. But your version also makes sense.

As to myfar as I understanding and to give ayou my personal opinion on this; Qu Yuan would like toanted to commit suicide when his country was conquered, t. This is what our government wants to imply toteach us.

As to my understanding and to give a personal opinion on this;, Qu Yuan would like toanted to commit suicide when his country was conquered, and this is what our government wants to imply to us.

怖い。みんなが自殺をするなら、誰も国を守れませんね。

They'd like to see this idea be inherited from generation to generation.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

They'd like to see this idea be inheritedpassed down from generation to generation.

They'd like to see this idea be inheritedpassed on from generation to generation.

この添削の方が自然だと思います。

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