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Rory Gilmore is a fictional character of the tv series Gilmore Girls. This series about the story of sweet mom-daughter lorelai and rory. to be honest I havent seen all the episodes yet but ı watched roughly 6 season and ı think ı have enough information about rory's life. the series started with rory's beginning of her new highschooll chilton and I think the first season of rory was the best because she is so young in the first episodes and her well intention behaviours, her intelligence and her naviety reflect the period of childhood. but as she getting older things start to get complicated and she start to make real mistakes. her childhood related perfectionism makes the things worst and therefore she is overwhelmed by the weight of making mistakes.
Rory Gilmore is a fictional character ofrom the tvTV series Gilmore Girls.
Rory Gilmore is a fictional character from the TV series Gilmore Girls.
This series is about the story of a sweet mom- and daughter l, Lorelai and rRory.
This series is about the story of a sweet mom and daughter, Lorelai and Rory.
Who does "sweet" describe in this sentence: the mother or the daughter? It's not clear and could be phrased better. Something like "a sweet mom and her daughter" or "a mom and her sweet daughter". Also, I'm assuming that Lorelai is the mother and Rory is the daughter, but you could make that clearer.
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To be honest, I haven't seen all the episodes yet, but I've watched roughly 6 seasons, so I think I have enough information about Rory's life.
tThe series started with rRory's beginning ofto attend her new high schooll c, Chilton and. I think the first season of rRory was the best, because she is so young in the first episodes, and her well -intentioned behaviours, her intelligence, and her navivety reflect the period of childhood.
The series started with Rory beginning to attend her new high school, Chilton. I think the first season of Rory was the best, because she is so young in the first episodes, and her well-intentioned behaviours, her intelligence, and her naivety reflect the period of childhood.
I'm not sure what you mean by "I think the first season of Rory was the best". Do you mean that the first season was the best, or that Rory was the best character in the first season?
butHowever, as she gettings older, things start to get complicated, and she starts to make real mistakes.
However, as she gets older, things start to get complicated, and she starts to make real mistakes.
hHer childhood -related perfectionism makes the things worste, and therefore, she is overwhelmed by the weight of making mistakes.
Her childhood-related perfectionism makes things worse, and therefore, she is overwhelmed by the weight of making mistakes.
What does "childhood-related" mean? Did the perfectionism start in her childhood? Was it caused by something that happened in her childhood?
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This is great for your level, and I'm glad you're watching the Gilmore Girls - I've heard it's a great show! I corrected some mistakes related to capitalization, verb tense, and punctuation, as well as some clauses that were a bit ambiguous. Hope this feedback is helpful!
Rory Gilmore is a fictional character ofrom the tvTV series Gilmore Girls.
Rory Gilmore is a fictional character from the TV series Gilmore Girls.
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This series is about the story of sweet mom- and daughter lLorelai and rRory.
This series is about the story of sweet mom and daughter Lorelai and Rory.
tTo be honest, I havent seen all the episodes yet, but ıI watched roughly 6 seasons and ıI think ıI have enough information about rRory's life.
To be honest, I havent seen all the episodes yet, but I watched roughly 6 seasons and I think I have enough information about Rory's life.
tThe series started with rRory's beginn starting ofat her new highschooll c, Chilton and. I think the first season of rRory was the best because she is so young in the first episodes and her well -intentioned behaviours, her intelligence, and her navivety reflect the period of childhood.
The series started with Rory starting at her new highschool, Chilton. I think the first season of Rory was the best because she is so young in the first episodes and her well-intentioned behaviours, her intelligence, and her naivety reflect the period of childhood.
but aAs she gettings older, things start to get complicated, and she starts to make real mistakes.
As she gets older, things start to get complicated, and she starts to make real mistakes.
hHer childhood -related perfectionism makes the things worste, and therefore, she is overwhelmed by the weight of making mistakes.
Her childhood-related perfectionism makes things worse, and therefore, she is overwhelmed by the weight of making mistakes.
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Very well written, just remember to capitalize the first letter in names and when beginning a new sentence :)
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Rory Gilmore is a fictional character of the tvTV series Gilmore Girls.
Rory Gilmore is a fictional character of the TV series Gilmore Girls.
This series is about the story of a sweet mom- and daughter lnamed Lorelai and rRory.
This series is about the story of a sweet mom and daughter named Lorelai and Rory.
tTo be honest I havent seen all the episodes yet but ı watched roughly 6 season and ıI think ıI have enough information about rRory's life.
tTobe honest I havent seen all the episodes yet but ı watched roughly 6 season and I think I have enough information about Rory's life.
tThe series started with rRory's beginning of her new hHighs Schooll c, Chilton, and I think the first season of rRory was the best because she is so young in the first episodes and her well intentioned behavioursr, her intelligence and her navivety reflect the period of childhood.
The series started with Rory beginning her new High School, Chilton, and I think the first season of Rory was the best because she is so young in the first episodes and her well intentioned behavior, her intelligence and her naivety reflect the period of childhood.
bBut as she gettings older things start to get complicated and she start to make real mistakes.
Butas she gets older things start to get complicated and she start to make real mistakes.
hHer childhood related perfectionism makes the things worste and therefore she is overwhelmed by the weight of making mistakes.
Her childhood related perfectionism makes things worse and therefore she is overwhelmed by the weight of making mistakes.
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This series about the story of sweet mom-daughter lorelai and rory.
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This series is about the story of a sweet mom Who does "sweet" describe in this sentence: the mother or the daughter? It's not clear and could be phrased better. Something like "a sweet mom and her daughter" or "a mom and her sweet daughter". Also, I'm assuming that Lorelai is the mother and Rory is the daughter, but you could make that clearer. |
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to be honest I havent seen all the episodes yet but ı watched roughly 6 season and ı think ı have enough information about rory's life.
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the series started with rory's beginning of her new highschooll chilton and I think the first season of rory was the best because she is so young in the first episodes and her well intention behaviours, her intelligence and her naviety reflect the period of childhood.
I'm not sure what you mean by "I think the first season of Rory was the best". Do you mean that the first season was the best, or that Rory was the best character in the first season? |
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but as she getting older things start to get complicated and she start to make real mistakes.
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her childhood related perfectionism makes the things worst and therefore she is overwhelmed by the weight of making mistakes.
What does "childhood-related" mean? Did the perfectionism start in her childhood? Was it caused by something that happened in her childhood? |
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