kiwy's avatar
kiwy

Dec. 10, 2021

0
Smoke

In the afternoon, the dormitory keeper told me that she had found a box of cigarettes from a girl student of mine. Then I questioned the girl about it, and I known several students including three girls involved in it. I reported it to the director and their parents. I was very disappointed with them.

Corrections (1)
Correction Settings
Choose how corrections are organized

Only show inserted text
Word-level diffs are planned for a future update.

Smoke

I was very disappointed with them.

kiwy's avatar
kiwy

Dec. 11, 2021

0

Smoke


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In the afternoon, the dormitory keeper told me that she had found a box of cigarettes from a girl student of mine.


In the afternoon, the dormitory keeper told me that she had found a box of cigarettes from a girlfemale student of mine. In the afternoon, the dormitory keeper told me that she had found a box of cigarettes from a female student of mine.

Generally, "boy" and "girl" should not be used as adjectives outside of situations where you want to indicate that something is intended for boys/girls (or men/women).

Then I questioned the girl about it, and I known several students including three girls involved in it.


Then I questioned the girl about it, and I knownit turned out that there were several students, including three girls, involved in it. Then I questioned the girl about it, and it turned out that there were several students, including three girls, involved in it.

If you want to say that you knew the students concerned, you could add "whom I knew" after "several students."

I reported it to the director and their parents.


I reported it to the director and their parentsir parents and the director. I reported it to their parents and the director.

"Principal" or "headmaster/headmistress" may be better than "director." Since the antecedent to "their" is "several students" or "three girls," it seems more appropriate to put it first.

I was very disappointed with them.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

You need LangCorrect Premium to access this feature.

Go Premium