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This immigrant storystory about immigration is from my granduncle. This story about immigration is from my granduncle.

In the last century, Hongk Kong was benefited from a unique coastal geography, and British government control. In the last century, Hong Kong benefited from a unique coastal geography and British government control.

In the last century, Hongk Kong was benefited from a unique coastal geography, and British government control. In the last century, Hong Kong benefited from a unique coastal geography, and British government control.

Hong Kong’s development was earlyier than China'sthat of mainland China. Hong Kong’s development was earlier than that of mainland China.

大陸 is translated as “mainland China.”

Hong Kong’s development was earlyier than China's mainland. Hong Kong’s development was earlier than China's mainland.

During that time, many foreign capitals had invested in the Hongkong loclocal real estates and set up firms in Hongk Kong to avoid destination tax. During that time, many foreign capitals had invested in the local real estate and set up firms in Hong Kong to avoid destination tax.

"Hong Kong" is understood in "local," so I removed it to avoid repetition.

During that time, many foreign capitals had invested in the Hongk Kong local estates and set up firms in Hongk Kong to avoid destination tax. During that time, many foreign capitals had invested in the Hong Kong local estates and set up firms in Hong Kong to avoid destination tax.

Billions of cashdollars poured in Hongk Kong, ledading to an economic boom. Billions of dollars poured in Hong Kong, leading to an economic boom.

"Cash" is uncountable, so you should either replace it with a currency, as I've done, or rephrase.

Billions of cash poured into Hongk Kong led to an economic boom. Billions of cash poured into Hong Kong led to an economic boom.

The risinge of Hongk Kong is startling, as one of the Four Asian Tigers. The rise of Hong Kong is startling, as one of the Four Asian Tigers.

The rising of Hongk Kong is startling, as one of the Four Asian Tigers. The rising of Hong Kong is startling, as one of the Four Asian Tigers.

(Meanwhile,) a flourishingn economical boom whichis, in athe short term, is a signal of huge demand in the labor market. (Meanwhile,) an economic boom is, in the short term, a signal of huge demand in the labor market.

I tried to fix the sentence, but there are still problems with it. It's hard to know how best to phrase it without knowing what you originally meant to say. - The original sentence is incomplete. "Which" introduces a relative clause, which requires a verb, and "is a signal of huge demand" is still part of it. The main clause in the original sentence is lacking a verb. - "Meanwhile" suggests a shift in focus, but there isn't really such a shift here. - "Economic" refers to economics, "economical" refers to thriftiness. - "Signal" implies that something points to a certain trend that is more generalized. "Huge demand in the labor market" is a signal of an economic boom, rather than the reverse. - We say "economic boom" or "flourishing economy." The two aren't combined.

An immigrant trend thad happened thatt occurred was the immigration of millions of Chinese stowaways immigrated to Hongk Kong in the last century. A trend that occurred was the immigration of millions of Chinese stowaways to Hong Kong in the last century.

Events happen, while trends occur. I wrote "trend" rather than "trend in immigration" to avoid repetition. You could also write "trend in immigration" and change the second immigration to "migration."

An immigrant trend had happened that millions of Chinese stowaways immigrated to Hongk Kong in the last century. An immigrant trend had happened that millions of Chinese stowaways immigrated to Hong Kong in the last century.

He is the youngest son of my grandeat-grandmother. He is the youngest son of my great-grandmother.

In 1963, when he was 16 years old, he decided to smuggle himself to Hong Kong. In 1963, when he was 16 years old, he decided to smuggle himself to Hong Kong.

"Smuggle" is transitive and requires an object.

In 1963, when he was 16 years old, he decided to smuggle to Hong Kong. In 1963, when he was 16 years old, he decided to smuggle to Hong Kong.

Compared to staying at Canton, he thought Hong Kong had more job opportunities and the average salary (there) was respectable. Compared to Canton, he thought Hong Kong had more job opportunities and the average salary (there) was respectable.

We are comparing places, so we should write "Canton" rather than "staying in Canton."

Compared to staying at Canton, he thought Hong Kong had more job opportunities and the average salary was respectable. Compared to staying at Canton, he thought Hong Kong had more job opportunities and the average salary was respectable.

For example, in 1980, the exchange rate between Hong Kong dDollars and RMB was 100:2700, which was a huge distafference. For example, in 1980, the exchange rate between Hong Kong Dollars and RMB was 100:2700, which was a huge difference.

"Distance" can be used metaphorically, but here it doesn't really work.

For example, in 1980, the exchange rate between Hong Kong dollars and RMB was 100:2700, which was a huge distance. For example, in 1980, the exchange rate between Hong Kong dollars and RMB was 100:2700, which was a huge distance.

As a result, many Chinese, from the mainland, will like to take risks to smugglemainland Chinese would take risks to smuggle themselves out of mainland China. As a result, many mainland Chinese would take risks to smuggle themselves out of mainland China.

- "Will" suggests that this is an ongoing phenomenon. I'm not sure if that's what you meant to say: while there is still mainland Chinese immigration to Hong Kong, the circumstances before the 1990s were very different from those now. - We need a destination here for "smuggle."