Sherlock Holmes aAdventure 1

Since you used capital letters for the first letters for his name, it's better to use capital letter for each letter of each word. I added 1 since you said you'll share the remaining story tomorrow. You can also write Part 1.

Today, I'm gonna tell y'all about the adventure story that I read yesterday.

Sherlock Holmes is a detective novel because he is looking for the truth of the matter. Adventure is like going somewhere to find something. Just because, it had adventure in the name doesn't really mean it's an adventure story.

The history starts with Holmes atin your room, h. He was playing your violin when a desperate man passed by your door.

The history starts with Holmes at your room, he was playing your violin when a desperate man passes by your door.

The history starts with Holmes at yourin his room,; he was playing yourhis violin when a desperate man passed by yourhis door.

History or story? My room or his room?

That man was completely desperate because the police had been looking for him all day.

That man was completely desperate because the police had been looking for him all day.

That man was completelvery desperate because the police had been looking for him all day.

Cause is the short form of because Very is better here.

He claim toasked Holmes to help him with a problem he had this day.

He claim toasks Holmes to help him with a problem he had this day.

He claim tobegged Holmes to help him with a problem he had thisat day.

Begged is better here because he asked for help.

Thate man was pursued accused tof the murder of a constructoion worker man oin North England.

That man was pursued and accused tof murder of a constructor man oion worker in North England.

That man was pursued and accused tof the murder of a constructor man oin North England.

Holmes saw in his eyes that he was telling the truth.

Holmes saw in his eyes that he was telling the truth.

OnAt that point, the police appear and arrest the man.

OnAt that point, the police appear and arrest the man.

OnDuring that poimoment, the police appeared and arrested the man.

By that point, hoHolmes start yours an investigation looking for the trulye murderer.

By that point, hoHolmes start yours his investigation, looking for the trulyreal murderer.

By that point, hoImmediately after the arrest, Holmes start your investigationg and looking for the trulyreal murder.

Real is better here. Real — fake

I stop toped read oning at that point because iI was very tired

I stop toped read oning at that point because iI was very tired

I stop to read oning at that point because iI was very tired

hHaha

but tomorrow i will finish it and bring the finale of the history to y'all

It's best not to mix up "story" and "history". History is a word usually used for factual past matters.

but tomorrow i will finish it and bring the final of the history to y'all

bBut tomorrow iI will finish it and bwring the final of the historyte about what happened in the end to y'all

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