I think to bebeing a housewife is really hard. I think being a housewife is really hard.

Housewife is kind of an old-timey word, I think "stay-at-home mom" tends to be more common now at least where I live in the US. It's correctly used here tho so I'm leaving it as-is.

I think (to be)/ being a housewife is really hard. I think (to be)/ being a housewife is really hard.

Both work! Being is shorter.

Being inat home consistetantly and dealing with housework can affect them both physically and psychologically. Being at home constantly and dealing with housework can affect them both physically and psychologically.

Being in home consistently and dealing with housework affects them both physically and psychologically. Being in home consistently and dealing with housework affects them both physically and psychologically.

Seeing less peopleLoneliness is really more difficult than as we think. Loneliness is really more difficult than we think.

Seeing less people is really more difficult than as we think. Seeing less people is really more difficult than we think.

I would maybe phrase it like "not seeing many people" instead of saying "seeing less people". Unless you make a comparison, e.g. "seeing less people than most others who go out in the day or work outside thebhome"

Of course, I'm not criticizing working moms who are both working and dealing withalancing a job and housework. Of course, I'm not criticizing working moms who are balancing a job and housework.

I'm sure their situation is hard as well, but some moms doaren't choose to be housewifves by choice. I'm sure their situation is hard as well, but some moms aren't housewives by choice.

"don't choose to be..." and "not...by choice" convey the same meaning, so using both at the same time is unnecessary. An equally correct way to rewrite this sentence would be: I'm sure their situation is hard as well, but some moms don't choose to be housewives.

I'm sure their situation is hard as well but some moms don't choose to bbecome housewifes by choice. I'm sure their situation is hard as well but some moms don't become housewifes by choice.

Choose and choice both are double so no need to have both.

They are sometimes forcedhave to leave from their job andto take care of their child or, sometimes they willingly choose this optionbut sometimes because they have no other choice. They have to leave their job to take care of their child, sometimes willingly but sometimes because they have no other choice.

They are sometimes forced to leave from their jobs and take care of their children or sometimes they willingly choose this option. They are sometimes forced to leave their jobs and take care of their children or sometimes they willingly choose this option.

Bothut in twoboth situations, as time goes by, they generally struggle to return backto their old jobs, and sometimes they just can't achieve this goal. But in both situations, as time goes by, they generally struggle to return to their old jobs, and sometimes they just can't achieve this goal.

Both in two situation as time goes by they generally struggle to turn their back on their jobs and sometimes they can't achieve this goal. Both in two situation as time goes by they generally struggle to turn their back on their jobs and sometimes they can't achieve this goal.

In two situation, meaning like "dilemma"? Or just "in both situations"? Sounds like you mean the latter. So maybe "In both situations, as time goes by, they generally struggle to turn their back on their jobs and sometimes they can't achieve this goal"

So, I think they deserve a paymentrecognition. So, I think they deserve recognition.

Payment means giving money to someone in exchange for goods or services. Not sure if this is what you intended, but I replaced it with a word that more closely matches the feeling from the next 2 sentences.

I would like to thank all mothers -, especially my own, for their dedication. I would like to thank all mothers, especially my own, for their dedication.

While two em dashes could work, I think it's more common in writing now to use commas on both sides of the interrupting clause.