Not only students infrom my school but also students infrom other school ands, as well as parents and children came to school. Not only students from my school but also students from other schools, as well as parents and children came.

Not only students in my school but also students in other school ands, parents, and children came to the school. Not only students in my school but also students in other schools, parents, and children came to the school.

Not only students in my school but also students in other school and parent and children came to schooSMOOTHER: Students from other schools, parents, current and prospective students came to our school to experience this festival. SMOOTHER: Students from other schools, parents, current and prospective students came to our school to experience this festival.

However I did some of the same things as yesterday. However I did some of the same things as yesterday.

However, I did sothe same things as yesterday. However, I did the same things as yesterday.

However I did some things as yesterday.SUGGESTION: Revise this sentence to make it more specific . . . it is too vague. (Readers have no idea what you did.) SUGGESTION: Revise this sentence to make it more specific . . . it is too vague. (Readers have no idea what you did.)

It is fun for me to loste my coins to gambleing. It is fun for me to lose my coins to gambling.

It is fun for me to loste my coins to gambleing. It is fun for me to lose my coins to gambling.

It is fun for me to lost my enjoyed tossing coins toand gambleing. I enjoyed tossing coins and gambling.

TWhen the school festival iwas over and, the principal said my class is best inwas the best among the second studentyear classes. When the school festival was over, the principal said my class was the best among the second year classes.

Then the school festival iwas over and the principal said my class is the best inamong the second year student class. Then the school festival was over and the principal said my class is the best among the second year students.

ThenFinally, our school festival is overhas finished and my principal said mythe our class iwas best in second studentyear class. Finally, our school festival has finished and my principal said the our class was best second year class.

It iwas hard to tidy up after the school festival (By the way this daily iwas made ion July 14) It was hard to tidy up after the school festival (By the way this daily was made on July 14)

It is hard to tidy up after the school festival (Bby the way this daily entry is made ion July 14). It is hard to tidy up after the school festival (by the way this daily entry is made on July 14).

It iwas hard to tidy up the school festival (By the way this daily is made in July 14). It was hard to tidy up the school festival.

It isToday is the last day of the Culture festival in this day. Today is the last day of the Culture festival.

It is the last day of the Culture fFestival in this today. It is the last day of the Culture Festival today.

MY GUESS: It is last day of Ca culture festival in this dayat my school. MY GUESS: It is last day of a culture festival at my school.