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It's getting harder and harder for older people to find a jobs in our country, especially in the IT industry. It's getting harder and harder for older people to find jobs in our country, especially in the IT industry.

It's getting harder and harder for older people to find a job in our country, especially in the IT industry. It's getting harder and harder for older people to find a job in our country, especially in the IT industry.

IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers, t. They make artificial barriers for them., IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers. They make artificial barriers for them,

IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers, they make artificial barriers for them. IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers.

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IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers,; they make artificial barriers for them. IT employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers; they make artificial barriers for them.

The two clauses are disconnected enough that a longer pause like a semicolon or full stop sounds more natural to me.

IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers, t. They makcreate artificial barriers for them. IT company employers are very unfriendly to older employees and older job seekers. They create artificial barriers for them.

Ssuch as excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contracts, etc. such as excessive demands, non-renewable labor contracts, etc.

SThey make artificial barriers for them, such as excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contract etc. They make artificial barriers for them, such as excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contract etc.

Starting a sentence with "such as" is grammatically incorrect, so I used the ending from the sentence above to fix this.

Such asFor example, excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contracts etc. For example, excessive demands, non-renewable labor contracts etc.

"Such as" is usually used for joining clauses, rather than starting entire new sentences.

Such as excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contracts etc. Such as excessive demands, the non-renewable labor contracts etc.

On the other handMeanwhile, most older people have to take care of their parents and their children. Meanwhile, most older people have to take care of their parents and their children.

"On the other hand" usually introduces the opposite side of an argument. For example, "On the other hand, companies need to make money." "Meanwhile" fits better here because you are describing the experiences of older people that keep them working for employers who mistreat them.

Sometimes, they feel really desperate for life. Sometimes, they feel really desperate.

Sometimes, they feel really desperate fobecause of their life. Sometimes, they feel really desperate because of their life.

Feeling desperate for something usually means that you want something very badly, but I think don't think that is what you're trying to say here.

Sometimes, they feel really desperate forin life. Sometimes, they feel really desperate in life.

Sometimes, they feel really desperate for life. Sometimes, they feel really desperate.

How lLife can be so hard! Life can be so hard!

How can life can be so hard! How can life be so hard!