Oct. 12, 2022
Q&A (Hometown)
Q:After you graduate do you want to live in your hometown? Why or why not?
A:I don't want to live in my hometown.
The reason are twofold. One is that I want to keep a distance from my parents. I don't want my parents meddle in what I do. If I lived in my hometown, my parents come to my house frequently and comments on what I do.
The other is for job. In my hometown, there were few jobs and most of them were low salary. To pay off my student loans, I needed to get a job with a slightly higer income. I wanted to leave my hometown because the salaries are higher in the city center.
Q:卒業後は地元に住みたいですか？なぜですか？
A:地元には住みたくありません。
理由は2つあります。ひとつは、親と距離を置きたいからです。自分のやることに親が口出ししてくるのが嫌なんです。もし、地元に住んでいたら、親がしょっちゅう家に来て、私のやることに口を出してくるでしょう。
もうひとつは、仕事のことです。地元では仕事が少なく、給料も安いところがほとんどでした。学生ローンを返済するためには、少しでも収入の高い仕事に就く必要がありました。都心の方が給料が高いので、地元を離れたいと思いました。
Q&A (Hometown) Q&A
Q: After you graduate, do you want to live in your hometown?
Why or why not?
A: I don't want to live in my hometown.
The reasons are twofold.
One is that I want to keep a distance frombetween my parents and me.
I don't want my parents to meddle in what I do.
If I lived in my hometown, my parents would come to my house frequently and comments on what I do.
The other is for a job.
In my hometown, there weare few jobs and most of them werepay a low salary.
To pay off my student loans, I needed to get a job with a slightly higher income.
The answers so far have been in present tense so I corrected this sentence from past to present tense.
I wanted to leave my hometown because the salaries are higher in the city center.
I also corrected this sentence from past to present tense.
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The reason are twofold.
You (generally) have to list ALL of your statements very shortly after having used the expression "[are, is] twofold".
Example:
The reasons are twofold, one is that I want to keep a distance from my parents and the other is a lack of employment opportunities.
Example:
The reasons are twofold. The first reason is that I want to keep a distance from my parents and the other is a lack of employment opportunity.
This isn't a rule but the way you are using it in your journal, a structure like this fits better.
One is that I want to keep a distance from my parents.,
I don't want my parentsthem to meddle in what I do.
If I lived in my hometown, my parents would come to my house frequently and comments on what I do.
The other is forAnother reason to leave my hometown is job.s,
In my hometown, there wethey are few jobs and most of them weare low salary.
I wanted to leave my hometown because the salaries are higher in the city centerbigger cities.
A "city center" is a portion of a city, you have to specify which city the "city center" is in.
A "city" is big and a "town" is small, so if you are moving from a small municipality to a larger one you can say it like this: I want to go to the city and leave my town because the salaries there are higher.
Q&A (Hometown)
Q:After you graduate d Do you want to live in your hometown after you graduate?
This wording is a little better since it’s about a feeling that you already have, not that you will have after you graduate. This is less ambiguous.
Why or why not?
A: I don't want to live in my hometown.
Formatting
The reasons are twofold.
One is thatFirst, I want to keep a distance from my parents.
The original is fine spoken, but this seems better in writing.
I don't want my parents to meddle in what I do.
If I lived in my hometown, my parents would come to my house frequently and comments on what I do.
“Would” is needed in this construction.
The other is for job opportunities.
Or “for work.”
In my hometown, there were[are?] few jobs and most of them were low salary[are?] low-paying.
Or “have a low salary.”
You seem to be discussing a current situation so you need to use the present tense here.
To pay off my student loans, I [needed] to get a job with a slightly higher income.
I [wanted] to leave my hometown because the salaries are higher in the city center.
Feedback
The usage of tense in confusing. In the beginning, it sounds like you are thinking about a current situation. However, later, it sounds like you are reflecting on a choice that you made in the past. If you were actually trying to talk about something in the past, you should make that clear at the beginning.
Oct. 13, 2022
Thank you for your feedback.
I want to say this sentences in the past because I graduated university over ten years ago. Anyway, thank you for advice.
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Q:After you graduate do you want to live in your hometown? Q: This wording is a little better since it’s about a feeling that you already have, not that you will have after you graduate. This is less ambiguous. Q: After you graduate, do you want to live in your hometown? |
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A:I don't want to live in my hometown. A: I don't want to live in my hometown. Formatting A: I don't want to live in my hometown. |
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The reason are twofold. The reasons are twofold.
You (generally) have to list ALL of your statements very shortly after having used the expression "[are, is] twofold". Example: The reasons are twofold, one is that I want to keep a distance from my parents and the other is a lack of employment opportunities. Example: The reasons are twofold. The first reason is that I want to keep a distance from my parents and the other is a lack of employment opportunity. This isn't a rule but the way you are using it in your journal, a structure like this fits better. The reasons are twofold. |
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One is that I want to keep a distance from my parents.
The original is fine spoken, but this seems better in writing.
One is that I want to keep |
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I don't want my parents meddle in what I do. I don't want my parents to meddle in what I do. I don't want I don't want my parents to meddle in what I do. |
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If I lived in my hometown, my parents come to my house frequently and comments on what I do. If I lived in my hometown, my parents would come to my house frequently and comment “Would” is needed in this construction. If I lived in my hometown, my parents would come to my house frequently and comment If I lived in my hometown, my parents would come to my house frequently and comment |
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The other is for job. The other is for job opportunities. Or “for work.”
The other is for a job. |
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In my hometown, there were few jobs and most of them were low salary. In my hometown, there Or “have a low salary.” You seem to be discussing a current situation so you need to use the present tense here.
In my hometown, there |
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To pay off my student loans, I needed to get a job with a slightly higer income. To pay off my student loans, I [needed] to get a job with a slightly higher income. To pay off my student loans, I need The answers so far have been in present tense so I corrected this sentence from past to present tense. |
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I wanted to leave my hometown because the salaries are higher in the city center. I [wanted] to leave my hometown because the salaries are higher in the city center. I want A "city center" is a portion of a city, you have to specify which city the "city center" is in. A "city" is big and a "town" is small, so if you are moving from a small municipality to a larger one you can say it like this: I want to go to the city and leave my town because the salaries there are higher. I want I also corrected this sentence from past to present tense. |
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