March 2, 2024
Purry Kicked out Luna From The Warm Spot (55)
There's a heater in the living room and a blanket spread in front of the heater.
My cats like to lie down on the blanket there.
Today, while Luna was relaxing there, Purry showed up and lay down next to Luna.
They were snuggling up comfortably, first.
And, Purry started grooming to Luna, and Luna was appreciated it first, but gradually she looked like she was annoyed.
And then, Luna stared hissing to Purry, and Purry bit her neck.
They started fighting again as usual.
Luna got out of the room and Purry took over the warm spot.
This is their daily life.
私の家のリビングルームにヒーターが置いてあります、そしてその前にブランケットを広げてあります。
私の猫たちはその前で寝転ぶのが大好きです。
今日、ルナがそこでリラックスしている時、ペーリーがやってきて、ルナの隣に横になりました。
彼らは、最初、仲良く寄り添っていました。
そしてペーリーは、ルナの毛づくろいを始めました。ルナは最初、嬉しかったんですが、だんだんうっとうしくなったようです。
ルナはシャーっとうなり始めました、そしてペーリーはルナの首にかみつきました。
かれらは、またいつものように喧嘩を始めました。
ルナは部屋を出て行ってしまい、ペーリーは結局ヒーターの前を占領しました。
これが、彼らの日常です。
Purry Kicked out Luna From The Warm Spot (55)
There's a heater in the living room and a blanket spread in front of ithe heater.
MThere, my cats like to lie down on the blanket there.
Today, while Luna was relaxing thereon that warm spot*, Purry showed up and lay down next to Lunaher**.
*Just to avoid using "there" all the time.
**I'm guessing Luna is a female cat. :)
They were snuggling up comfortably, at first.
And,Then Purry started grooming to Luna, and Luna was. *Luna appreciated it at first, but gradually she looked like she wasbecame annoyed.
*While Luna appreciated it initially, she gradually became annoyed.
And then, Luna stared hissing ato Purry, and; Purry bit her neck.
They started fighting again as usual.
OR: The two started fighting again as usual.
Luna got out ofleft the room and Purry took over the warm spot.
OR: " ... took over the warm spot AT ONCE"
This is just to make it more descriptive.
This is their daily life.
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Great!!
March 3, 2024
Thank you so much for your correction!
Purry Kicked out Luna From The Warm Spot (55)
There's a heater in the living room and a blanket spread in front of the heater in the living room.
Original sentence was fine but this is more simple.
My cats like to lie down on the blanket there.
Today, while Luna was relaxing there, Purry showed up and layid down next to Lunaher.
Instead of repeating "Luna" you should use the cat's pronoun (him/her)
They were snuggling up comfortably, at first.
AndThen, Purry started grooming to Luna, and Luna was. She appreciated it at first, but gradually she looked like she was annoyed.
And then, Luna stared hissing to Purry, and Purry bit her neck.
They started fighting again as usual.
Luna got out ofleft the room and Purry took over the warm spot.
This is their daily life.
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Good writing! :)
March 2, 2024
Thank you so much for your correction!
Purry Kicked out Luna From The Warm Spot
There's a heater in the living room and a blanket spread in front of the heater.
My cats like to lie down on the blanket there.
Today, while Luna was relaxing there, Purry showed up and lay down next to Lunaher.
You can just use the pronoun "her" instead of using her name.
TFirst they were snuggling up comfortably, first.
Aand, then Purry started to grooming to Luna, and Luna. Luna was appreciated it first, but gradually she looked like she was annoyed.
You can also use "as though she was annoyed." for "she looked like she was annoyed.".
And then, Luna stared hissing ato Purry, and Purry bit her neck.
They started fighting again as usual.
Luna got out of the room and Purry took over the warm spot.
This is their daily life.
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Wow, everyday is like a movie for you !
March 2, 2024
Yes, watching them is really fun! Thank you so much for your correction!
Purry Kicked out Luna From The Warm Spot
There's a heater in the living room andwith a blanket spread in front of ithe heater.
My cats like to lie down on the blanket there.
Today, while Luna was relaxing there, Purry showed up and lay down next to Luna.
They were snuggling up comfortably, at first.
And, Purry started grooming to Luna, and Luna was appreciated it at first, but gradually she looked like she was annoyed.
And then, Luna stared hissing ato Purry, and Purry bit her neck.
They started fighting again as usual.
Luna got out of the room and Purry took over the warm spot.
This is their daily life.
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You said they were siblings right? Ah, maybe it's normal for siblings to bicker, haha.
March 2, 2024
Yes, they are siblings. Sometimes, they look happy together, but sometimes, they aren't. It's very interesting! Thank you so much for your correction!
Thank you for the new word "bicker"
Purry Kicked out Luna From TOut of the Warm Spot
There's a heater in the living room and a blanket spread out in front of the heater.
My cats like to lie down on the blanket there.
Today, while Luna was relaxing there, Purry showed up and lay down next to Luna.
Just an fyi: native speakers would probably write "laid down" even though it is grammatically incorrect. https://www.britannica.com/story/lay-lie-lied-lain-when-do-we-use-which
They were snuggling up comfortably, at first.
And, Purry started grooming to Luna, and Luna waswho appreciated it at first, but gradually she looked like she wasbecame annoyed.
And tThen, Luna stared hissing ato Purry, and Purry bit her neck.
They started fighting again as usual.
Luna got out ofleft the room and Purry took over the warm spot.
This is their daily life.
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So cute! It reminds me of when I had two cats. Their daily antics are so cute and funny.
March 2, 2024
I love watching their daily antics. They always make me happy and always make me forget about sad things.
Thank you so much for your correction!
Purry Kicked out Luna From TOut of the Warm Spot
change the order of verbs and nouns, don't capitalize the word "the", and replace "from" with "of"
There's a heater in the living room and a blanket spread out in front of the heater.
My cats like to lie down on the blanket there.
Today, while Luna was relaxing there, Purry showed up and layid down next to Luna.
tense agreement
They were snuggling up comfortably, at first.
And, Purry started grooming to Luna, and Luna waswho appreciated it at first, but gradeventually she looked like she wasgrew annoyed.
And then, Luna stared hissing ato Purry, and Purry bit her neck.
They started fighting again as usual.
Luna got out of the room and Purry took over the warm spot.
This is their daily life.
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clear and easy to understand, good job!
March 2, 2024
Thank you so much for your correction!
Purry Kicked out Luna From The Warm Spot
There's a heater in the living room and a blanket spread in front of the heater.
My cats like to lie down on the blanket there.
Today, while Luna was relaxing there, Purry showed up and layid down next to Luna.
They were snuggling up comfortably, at first.
And,Then Purry started grooming to Luna, andwhich Luna was appreciated iat first, but gradually she looked like she was annoyed.
And then, Luna stared hissing ato Purry, and Purry bit her neck.
They started fighting again as usual.
Luna got out of the room and Purry took over the warm spot.
This is their daily life.
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A very interesting and funny read. :) Good job!
March 2, 2024
Thank you so much for your correction!
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