June 19, 2020
Crowdfunding.
My teacher gave me the task: you need to find negative aspects in the crowdfunding project(QuenchSea: Turn Seawater into Freshwater). I don't know why he choosen this model. And, what I think - there is a big problem. This system uses the technology of the osmosis membrane and relates to the specification you can use this device to get the only 3l of pure water. I think the membrane will be saturated by salts after 3l. For one person it can be for one day. For this reason, one liter of this water will be expensive. The second reason is the concentration of salt. Using this device you can get pure water without impurities. It's not so healthy for the people. I think this device will not be so popular.
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Crowdfunding.
Crowdfunding
Usually you don't put a period after a title
My teacher gave me the task: you need to find negative aspects in the crowdfunding project (QuenchSea: Turn Seawater into Freshwater). My teacher gave me the task: you need to find negative aspects in the crowdfunding project (QuenchSea: Turn Seawater into Freshwater).
I don't know why he choosen this model.
I don't know why he chose this model.
choosen is not a word
And,s for what I think -: there is a big problem.
As for what I think: there is a big problem.
Generally dont start a sentence with and
This system uses the technology of the osmosis membrane and relates toosmosis membrane technology. Based on the specifications, you can use this device to get the only 3l of pure water.
This system uses osmosis membrane technology. Based on the specifications, you can use this device to get the only 3l of pure water.
I think the membrane will be saturated by salts after 3lL.
I think the membrane will be saturated by salts after 3L.
capital L is used for litres
For one person it can be forthis will last one day.
For one person this will last one day.
It's not so healthy for the people.
It's not so healthy for people.
I think this deviceOverall, I think it will not be so popular.
Overall, I think it will not be popular.
What you have written is perfectly acceptable. I have just provided a suggestion for this sentence.
The transition word at the beginning overall/thus/therefore... helps to provide a sense of continuity
In this case I think most people would probably use the pronoun it instead for repeating the device
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I think the membrane will be saturated by salts after 3l.
I think the membrane will be saturated by salts after 3 capital L is used for litres |
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Crowdfunding.
Crowdfunding Usually you don't put a period after a title |
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My teacher gave me the task: you need to find negative aspects in the crowdfunding project(QuenchSea: Turn Seawater into Freshwater). My teacher gave me the task: you need to find negative aspects in the crowdfunding project (QuenchSea: Turn Seawater into Freshwater). My teacher gave me the task: you need to find negative aspects in the crowdfunding project (QuenchSea: Turn Seawater into Freshwater). |
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I don't know why he choosen this model.
I don't know why he cho choosen is not a word |
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And, what I think - there is a big problem.
A Generally dont start a sentence with and |
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This system uses the technology of the osmosis membrane and relates to the specification you can use this device to get the only 3l of pure water.
This system uses |
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For one person it can be for one day.
For one person |
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For this reason, one liter of this water will be expensive. |
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The second reason is the concentration of salt. |
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Using this device you can get pure water without impurities. |
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It's not so healthy for the people.
It's not so healthy for |
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I think this device will not be so popular.
What you have written is perfectly acceptable. I have just provided a suggestion for this sentence. The transition word at the beginning overall/thus/therefore... helps to provide a sense of continuity In this case I think most people would probably use the pronoun it instead for repeating the device |
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