July 31, 2020
Pros and Cons for Children of Watching Television
Nowadays, children spend a fair amount of time watching television. Variety of programs and shows make television a tremendous source of entertainment. However, what advantages and difficulties television can bring to children’s lives? In this essay I will look at both sides of this question.
The main advantage of television is the fact that it can act as an educational platform. From spectacular documentary films on wildlife to fascinating programmes about space, they give rich, emotional impressions to children’s outlook to the world. In many cases, this knowledge can help them to learn better at school and what’s more, can lay the foundation to the interests in children’s future lives.
Now let’s move to possible negative effects. One of the major drawbacks occurs in the situation when parents let their children to watch television too much time. Entertaining programs and shows, colorful cartoons can be highly addictive for children attention, often distracting them from doing their homework, reading books, do sport and other activities. Another serious problem of modern television is its never-ending commercials. Being mentally and emotionally vulnerable, children often start wishing the products enforced to them by the market specialists. As a result, this add compulsiveness to the child’s behaviour, moreover directing him or her to terrorize his parents to buy the products shown in the commercials.
To summarize those points, I will state that modern television can add benefits to children’s lives when it is being used properly, and disadvantages when it is used the wrong way. Watching educational programmes cause children to be more curious and helps to understand the world better, whereas an excessive watching of television can lead to an addictive and uncontrollable behaviour. I believe that parents should pay more attention to their children and protect them from the bad influence of television.
Pros and Cons ofor Children of Watching Television
Yours makes sense. Mine sounds more natural.
Nowadays, children spend a fair amount of time watching television.
VA variety of programs and shows make television a tremendous source of entertainment.
I would consider "tremendously ___ source of entertainment" instead. (e.g. tremendously valuable/sensible/etc.)
However, what advantages and difficulties can television can bring to children’s lives?
In this essay I will look at both sides of this question.
The main advantage of television is the fact that it can act as an educational platform.
From spectacular documentary films on wildlife to fascinating programmes about space, ithey gives rich, emotional impressions to children’s outlook tos on the world.
In many cases, this knowledge can help them to learn better at school, and what’s more, can lay the foundation to thefor interests in children’sthe future lives.
A little simpler.
Now let’s move to possible negative effects.
One of the major drawbacks occurs in the situations when parents let their children to watch television for too much time.
Entertaining programs and shows, and colorful cartoons can be highly addictive for children attention, often distracting them from doing their homework, reading books, doing sport, and other activities.
I added a final Oxford comma, but that's my preference.
Another serious problem of modern television is its never-ending commercials.
Being mentally and emotionally vulnerable, children often start wishdesiring the products enforcpresented to them by the market specialists.
As a result, this adds compulsiveness to the child’s behaviour, moreoverthus directing him or herthem to terrorize histheir parents to buy the products shown in the commercials.
You can use the third person plural (they/them/their) when the gender of the subject is unclear. 'His or her' also works
Terrorize is often used in this context to humorous effect. 'Beg' might be more neutral.
To summarize those points, I will state that modern television can add benefits to children’s lives when it is being used properly, and disadvantages when it is used the wrong way.
Not really an error, but 'I will state' implies you'll make the statement in the future. But you're making it right now.
Lots of natives write like this, but it's considered a little inelegant. It's probably great for IELTS though.
Watching educational programmes causes children to be more curious and helps tohem understand the world better, whereas an excessive watching of televisionviewing can lead to an addictive and uncontrollable behaviour.
Uncontrollable? Why uncontrollable? Because of the commercials?
I might go for unhealthy behavior.
I believe that parents should pay more attention to their children and protect them from the bad influence of television.
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Great, as always. A simplification of your grammatical constructions might possibly lead to an increase of clarity in the future.
Aug. 1, 2020
Thanks! I've moved from not having enough words to describe something to making sentences too complex :D Need to find a balance.
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Pros and Cons for Children of Watching Television Pros and Cons of Yours makes sense. Mine sounds more natural. |
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Nowadays, children spend a fair amount of time watching television. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Variety of programs and shows make television a tremendous source of entertainment.
I would consider "tremendously ___ source of entertainment" instead. (e.g. tremendously valuable/sensible/etc.) |
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However, what advantages and difficulties television can bring to children’s lives? However, what advantages and difficulties can television |
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In this essay I will look at both sides of this question. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The main advantage of television is the fact that it can act as an educational platform. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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From spectacular documentary films on wildlife to fascinating programmes about space, they give rich, emotional impressions to children’s outlook to the world. From spectacular documentary films on wildlife to fascinating programmes about space, it |
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In many cases, this knowledge can help them to learn better at school and what’s more, can lay the foundation to the interests in children’s future lives. In many cases, this knowledge can help them to learn better at school, and what’s more, A little simpler. |
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Now let’s move to possible negative effects. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One of the major drawbacks occurs in the situation when parents let their children to watch television too much time. One of the major drawbacks occurs in |
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Entertaining programs and shows, colorful cartoons can be highly addictive for children attention, often distracting them from doing their homework, reading books, do sport and other activities. Entertaining programs and shows I added a final Oxford comma, but that's my preference. |
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Another serious problem of modern television is its never-ending commercials. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Being mentally and emotionally vulnerable, children often start wishing the products enforced to them by the market specialists. Being mentally and emotionally vulnerable, children often start |
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As a result, this add compulsiveness to the child’s behaviour, moreover directing him or her to terrorize his parents to buy the products shown in the commercials. As a result, this adds compulsiveness to the child’s behaviour, You can use the third person plural (they/them/their) when the gender of the subject is unclear. 'His or her' also works Terrorize is often used in this context to humorous effect. 'Beg' might be more neutral. |
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To summarize those points, I will state that modern television can add benefits to children’s lives when it is being used properly, and disadvantages when it is used the wrong way. To summarize those points, Not really an error, but 'I will state' implies you'll make the statement in the future. But you're making it right now. Lots of natives write like this, but it's considered a little inelegant. It's probably great for IELTS though. |
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Watching educational programmes cause children to be more curious and helps to understand the world better, whereas an excessive watching of television can lead to an addictive and uncontrollable behaviour. Watching educational programmes causes children to be more curious and helps t Uncontrollable? Why uncontrollable? Because of the commercials? I might go for unhealthy behavior. |
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I believe that parents should pay more attention to their children and protect them from the bad influence of television. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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