Sept. 9, 2021
Promise is Nothing
Although it is the seventh day of this term, I've found out four boys students in my class smoking. Three of them were smelled out by me, while the other was pointed by his calssmate. One of them named Bai were caught by me twice. I asked him to write a note to garantee that he would never do it again, otherwise he would go home for a week. But his roommate told me that he smoked a lot in their dormitory. I smelled the cigarette odour from him in the evening class. I aksed him whether he smoked, he said no. I didn't believe him, he told me the reason why he smelled like that was he had gone to the public toilet in school where many boys smoking there. I didn't believe a word and was so disappointed at him, so I just ignored him.
His promise is nothing.
Promise is Nothing
This title is ok. Other possibilities are: "Empty Promise" or "Hollow Promise" or "Promise Or Lie?". I'm sure you could make up other ones too!
Although it is the seventh day of this term, I've found out four boys students in my class smoking.
Other possibility: "Although it is now the seventh day of this term, I have found out that four boy students in my class have been smoking."
Note that I use the word "boy", not "boys". This is because the word "students" itself provides the plural, and the word "boy" is used like a describing word (adjective) rather than as a noun, and so you just need to say "four boy students", just as you would say "four male students", not "four males students".
Three of them were smelled out by me, while the other was pointed by his calssmate.
Other possibility: "I could smell cigarette smoke on three of them, while the fourth was identified by his classmate."
One of them named Bai were caught by me twice.
Other possibility: "One of them called Bai was caught by me twice."
I asked him to write a note to guarantee that he would never do it again, otherwise he would go home for a week.
guarantee
But his roommate told me that he smoked a lot in their dormitory.
I smelled the cigarette odour from him in the evening class.
Consider: "I could smell the cigarette odour from him in the evening class."
I aksked him whether he smoked,had been smoking, but he said no.
I didn't believe him, h. He told me the reason why he smelled like that was that he had gone to the public toilet in school where many boys had been smoking there.
Using the word "reason":
You don't need the "why" word in - "The reason why he smelled ..." Just say "The reason he smelled ..."
Also, it is common to see written, "The reason is because ..." The word "because" is not needed in such sentences. Just say, "The reason is ...".
I didn't believe a word and was so disappointed atin him, so I just ignored him.
His promise is nothing.
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I understood everything you wrote. I hope my suggestions help you. If you would like me to explain things further for you, just ask!
Sincerely,
mjm
Sept. 11, 2021
Promise is Nothing
I just want to imitate Nike's slogan~
Sept. 11, 2021
Although it is the seventh day of this term, I've found out four boys students in my class smoking.
What I've learned from my text book was that both words of double nouns need to use plural, so I am a little confused.
Sept. 11, 2021
Thank you very much!
Sept. 16, 2021
I just want to imitate Nike's slogan~
Understood. It's a personal choice.
Sept. 16, 2021
What I've learned from my text book was that both words of double nouns need to use plural, so I am a little confused.
The word "boy" is being used like an adjective here. Adjectives in English do not need to grammatically agree with their nouns. Therefore adjectives don't need an "s" plural even if the noun they are describing is in the plural. To help with understanding in this situation, some people would put a hyphen between "boy" and "students" - "boy-students" but this is not compulsory. Please would you consider copying out the advice given in your textbook so that I can look at this further for you.
Sept. 17, 2021
Other examples:
I saw many tiger cubs in the zoo today. [not "tigers cubs"]
All river banks must be cleaned properly. [not "rivers banks"]
Usually, people plant onions in vegetable gardens. [not "vegetables gardens"]
In the above, "tiger", "river" and "vegetable" are all basically nouns but you can see that they also can work like describing words (adjectives) when they come next to another noun.
Sincerely,
mjm
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Promise is Nothing Promise is Nothing This title is ok. Other possibilities are: "Empty Promise" or "Hollow Promise" or "Promise Or Lie?". I'm sure you could make up other ones too! |
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Although it is the seventh day of this term, I've found out four boys students in my class smoking. Although it is the seventh day of this term, I've found out four boys students in my class smoking. Other possibility: "Although it is now the seventh day of this term, I have found out that four boy students in my class have been smoking." Note that I use the word "boy", not "boys". This is because the word "students" itself provides the plural, and the word "boy" is used like a describing word (adjective) rather than as a noun, and so you just need to say "four boy students", just as you would say "four male students", not "four males students". |
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Three of them were smelled out by me, while the other was pointed by his calssmate. Three of them were smelled out by me, while the other was pointed by his calssmate. Other possibility: "I could smell cigarette smoke on three of them, while the fourth was identified by his classmate." |
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One of them named Bai were caught by me twice. One of them named Bai were caught by me twice. Other possibility: "One of them called Bai was caught by me twice." |
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I asked him to write a note to garantee that he would never do it again, otherwise he would go home for a week. I asked him to write a note to guarantee that he would never do it again, otherwise he would go home for a week. guarantee |
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But his roommate told me that he smoked a lot in their dormitory. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I smelled the cigarette odour from him in the evening class. I smelled the cigarette odour from him in the evening class. Consider: "I could smell the cigarette odour from him in the evening class." |
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I aksed him whether he smoked, he said no. I a |
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I didn't believe him, he told me the reason why he smelled like that was he had gone to the public toilet in school where many boys smoking there. I didn't believe him Using the word "reason": You don't need the "why" word in - "The reason why he smelled ..." Just say "The reason he smelled ..." Also, it is common to see written, "The reason is because ..." The word "because" is not needed in such sentences. Just say, "The reason is ...". |
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I didn't believe a word and was so disappointed at him, so I just ignored him. I didn't believe a word and was so disappointed |
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His promise is nothing. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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