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Preperation for next season

My first season of high school was finished in 2024.I learned and felt lot of things through this year. There are many problems more than I think. And there are many people who are good at soccer.when I was playing in middle school level,I was one of the best player in my age. because of my good physical.But in high school level, I must not rely on my good physical.I could grow up by doing hard training. I met new partner. And it was difficult to get close with new partner. As time goes on we get close very much.And we fight a lot.I should prepare for next season with better mentality. supplement my weakness and tried to make better result


2024년을 끝으로 나의 고등학교 첫번째 시즌이 끝이 났다.많은 것을 느끼고 많은 것을 배웠다.내 생각보다 많은 것들이 부족하였고 세상에는 축구를 잘하는 사람이 너무 많이 있다.중학교때에는 좋은 피지컬 덕분에 다른 친구들 보다 눈에 띄었지만 고등학교에 오면서 피지컬로만 축구하면 안될거 같다고 생각했다.매일매일 힘든 훈련을 했고 그것을 통해 많이 성장 할 수 있었다.1년 동안 새로운 친구들과 지내면서 처음엔 어색했지만 시간이 지나면서 많이 친해졌다.하지만 서로 좋은 일만 있을 수 없었다.다툼도 많고 많이 싸웠다.내년시즌에는 좀더 좋은 마인드를 가지고 시즌에 임해야겠다.이번시즌에는 성적이 좋지 않았지만 다음시즌엔 이번시즌에서 부족했던점을 보안해서 더 좋은 성적을 낼수 있도록 노력해야겠다.

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Prepearation for the next season

My first season of soccer in high school was finished in 2024. I learned and felt a lot of things through this year.

There awere many problems, more than I thinkought there would be.

And there awere many people who awere good at soccer.w When I was playing inat the middle school level, I was one of the best player ins my age.

because of my good physical.But in condition. But at the high school level, I must not rely on my good physical.I could grow upity. I need to improve by doing hard training.

I met my new partner.

And iIt was difficult to get close with my new partner at first.

As time goeswent on, we geot close very much.Andvery close, but we fight a lot. I should prepare for next season with a better mentality.

supplement my weakness and tried to makeI'll try to make up for my weakness by getting better results.

I'm not sure if this is what you meant by "supplement"

My first season of high school was finished in 2024.I learned and felt lot of things throughout this year.

There are much many problems than more thant I think of.

And there are unexpectedly many people who are good at soccer.w When I was playing in middle school level, I was one of the best player in my age.

because of my good physical. strength. But in the high school level, I must not rely on my good physical.I c body. I should grow up by keep doing hard training.

Prepearation for nthe Next sSeason

My first season of high school was finished in 2024. I learned and felt lot of things through thisout last year.

By “season” maybe you mean year? Or semester? In English we don’t use the word “season” to refer to the school calendar.

THowever, there awere many more problems more than I thinkexpected.

Use “However…” to show contrast.
Everything should be in past tense if you are talking about 2024 (last year)

AndFor example, there awere many people who awere good at soccer.w When I was playing in the middle school level, I was one of the best players in my age group.

You can use “For example…” to smoothly transition from your previous sentence into this first one.
Again, the first sentence should be changed to past tense since you are referring to last year.

This was because of my good physical. strength. But in the high school level, I must not rely on my good physical.I c strength. I should grow upmy skills by doing hard training.

It’s incorrect to start sentences with the word “because”
“Physical” is usually used as an adjective, not a noun
“Grow up” is mostly used when talking about age. You can say “grow my skills” instead.

I met a new partner.

And iIt was difficult to get close with my new partner at first.

It’s incorrect to start sentences with “and”
Adding “…at first.” at the end sounds more natural.

As time goeswent on we get close very much.Andot very close. But we fight a lot. I should prepare for next syeason withr by adopting a better mentality.

To show contrast between your first and second sentence, you can use “But…”
Again, using “season” sounds strange.

supplementI’ll identify my weaknesses and triedy to makeget better results.

Not sure what you mean by “supplement,” this word doesn’t make sense in this context.

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Good job!

Prepearation for next seasonterm

Season isn't really used for educational periods. Term is usually used for schools for children, while semester is usually used for colleges and universities (but either term can be used for either type of school)

My first seasonterm of high school was finished in 2024. I learned and felt a lot of things throughout this year.

There are many more problems more than I thinkought.

And there are many people who are good at soccer.w When I was playing inat middle school level, I was one of the best players in my age group because of my good physical ability.

because of my good physical.But in high school level, I must not rely on my good physical. ability only. I could grow upimprove by doing hard training.

Starting a sentence with because doesn't work like. You could say "I had a a good physical ability. Because of that, I was one of the best players in my age group". But if you have the "because <reason>" it sounds much better as part of the previous sentence.

"grow up" is much more about aging than other types of development, so "improve" is better here.

I met a new partner.

And iIt was difficult to get close with that new partner.

As time goes on we're get close very much.Andting much closer. However, we fight a lot. I should prepare for next season with better mentality.

Because "we fight a lot" is sort of contrasting with "we're getting much closer", it's better to use a contrasting word like "However" here.

supplementI should improve on my weaknesses and triedy to make better result

I'm not fully sure what time period you intended to refer to here, but assuming it's a forward looking statement, this should also take should.

Prepearation for next season

My first season of high school soccer was finished in 2024. I learned and felt a lot of things through this year.

I met a new partner.

Prepearation for next season

MI finished my first seasonmester of high school was finished in 2024.I learned and felt lot of things during or throughout thise year.

Season is used for a time of year (summer, winter...), a sporting period (football season, hockey season....) or a TV show (set of episodes). At school, we would talk about semesters or terms.

There awere many more problems more than I thinkought.

And there are many people who are good at soccer.w When I was playing inat middle school level, I was one of the best players in my age-group.

When I was playing IN middle school, or when I was playing AT middle school level

because of my good physical.But in condition. But at the high school level, I must not rely on my good physical.I could grow up by doing hard training condition (or good level of fitness) . I could improve? by training hard.

I met new partner.

AndBut it was difficult to get close with my new partner.

As time goeswent on we geot close very much.And much closer. Butwe fight a lot. I should prepare for next seasonterm with a better mentalitystate of mind.

supplementwork on my weaknesses and tried to makey for better results.

Feedback

I understood everything you wrote and the mistakes were minor, mostly just words written in the wrong order or using the wrong context of a word. Keep it up!

And it was difficult to get close with new partner.


AndBut it was difficult to get close with my new partner.

And iIt was difficult to get close with that new partner.

And iIt was difficult to get close with my new partner at first.

It’s incorrect to start sentences with “and” Adding “…at first.” at the end sounds more natural.

And iIt was difficult to get close with my new partner at first.

As time goes on we get close very much.And we fight a lot.I should prepare for next season with better mentality.


As time goeswent on we geot close very much.And much closer. Butwe fight a lot. I should prepare for next seasonterm with a better mentalitystate of mind.

As time goes on we're get close very much.Andting much closer. However, we fight a lot. I should prepare for next season with better mentality.

Because "we fight a lot" is sort of contrasting with "we're getting much closer", it's better to use a contrasting word like "However" here.

As time goeswent on we get close very much.Andot very close. But we fight a lot. I should prepare for next syeason withr by adopting a better mentality.

To show contrast between your first and second sentence, you can use “But…” Again, using “season” sounds strange.

As time goeswent on, we geot close very much.Andvery close, but we fight a lot. I should prepare for next season with a better mentality.

supplement my weakness and tried to make better result


supplementwork on my weaknesses and tried to makey for better results.

supplementI should improve on my weaknesses and triedy to make better result

I'm not fully sure what time period you intended to refer to here, but assuming it's a forward looking statement, this should also take should.

supplementI’ll identify my weaknesses and triedy to makeget better results.

Not sure what you mean by “supplement,” this word doesn’t make sense in this context.

supplement my weakness and tried to makeI'll try to make up for my weakness by getting better results.

I'm not sure if this is what you meant by "supplement"

Preperation for next season


Prepearation for next season

Prepearation for next season

Prepearation for next seasonterm

Season isn't really used for educational periods. Term is usually used for schools for children, while semester is usually used for colleges and universities (but either term can be used for either type of school)

Prepearation for nthe Next sSeason

Prepearation for the next season

My first season of high school was finished in 2024.I learned and felt lot of things through this year.


MI finished my first seasonmester of high school was finished in 2024.I learned and felt lot of things during or throughout thise year.

Season is used for a time of year (summer, winter...), a sporting period (football season, hockey season....) or a TV show (set of episodes). At school, we would talk about semesters or terms.

My first season of high school soccer was finished in 2024. I learned and felt a lot of things through this year.

My first seasonterm of high school was finished in 2024. I learned and felt a lot of things throughout this year.

My first season of high school was finished in 2024. I learned and felt lot of things through thisout last year.

By “season” maybe you mean year? Or semester? In English we don’t use the word “season” to refer to the school calendar.

My first season of high school was finished in 2024.I learned and felt lot of things throughout this year.

My first season of soccer in high school was finished in 2024. I learned and felt a lot of things through this year.

There are many problems more than I think.


There awere many more problems more than I thinkought.

There are many more problems more than I thinkought.

THowever, there awere many more problems more than I thinkexpected.

Use “However…” to show contrast. Everything should be in past tense if you are talking about 2024 (last year)

There are much many problems than more thant I think of.

There awere many problems, more than I thinkought there would be.

And there are many people who are good at soccer.when I was playing in middle school level,I was one of the best player in my age.


And there are many people who are good at soccer.w When I was playing inat middle school level, I was one of the best players in my age-group.

When I was playing IN middle school, or when I was playing AT middle school level

And there are many people who are good at soccer.w When I was playing inat middle school level, I was one of the best players in my age group because of my good physical ability.

AndFor example, there awere many people who awere good at soccer.w When I was playing in the middle school level, I was one of the best players in my age group.

You can use “For example…” to smoothly transition from your previous sentence into this first one. Again, the first sentence should be changed to past tense since you are referring to last year.

And there are unexpectedly many people who are good at soccer.w When I was playing in middle school level, I was one of the best player in my age.

And there awere many people who awere good at soccer.w When I was playing inat the middle school level, I was one of the best player ins my age.

because of my good physical.But in high school level, I must not rely on my good physical.I could grow up by doing hard training.


because of my good physical.But in condition. But at the high school level, I must not rely on my good physical.I could grow up by doing hard training condition (or good level of fitness) . I could improve? by training hard.

because of my good physical.But in high school level, I must not rely on my good physical. ability only. I could grow upimprove by doing hard training.

Starting a sentence with because doesn't work like. You could say "I had a a good physical ability. Because of that, I was one of the best players in my age group". But if you have the "because <reason>" it sounds much better as part of the previous sentence. "grow up" is much more about aging than other types of development, so "improve" is better here.

This was because of my good physical. strength. But in the high school level, I must not rely on my good physical.I c strength. I should grow upmy skills by doing hard training.

It’s incorrect to start sentences with the word “because” “Physical” is usually used as an adjective, not a noun “Grow up” is mostly used when talking about age. You can say “grow my skills” instead.

because of my good physical. strength. But in the high school level, I must not rely on my good physical.I c body. I should grow up by keep doing hard training.

because of my good physical.But in condition. But at the high school level, I must not rely on my good physical.I could grow upity. I need to improve by doing hard training.

I met new partner.


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I met a new partner.

I met a new partner.

I met a new partner.

I met my new partner.

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