June 1, 2021
The explorer of the world
When i were a child, i want to become a scientist . Because i was fascinated of the idea of becoming an explorer of the world. An explorer can expand the scope of the human knowledge. Why i love that? As knowledge is the powerful tool that improve people life. But when i was in high school, i realized that my country academic infrastructure could not support good career( in other word, i am not rich enough to support myself to pursuit science career). So i decided, if i could not become the explorer of the world, at least i could become the builder of it. So i am an engineer now.
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When iI wereas a child, iI wanted to become a scientist .
When I was a child, I wanted to become a scientist
"I" always has to be capitalized!
Bbecause iI was fascinated ofwith the idea of becoming an explorer of the world.
because I was fascinated with the idea of becoming an explorer of the world.
This really isn't a complete sentence, so you have to combine it with the first sentence to create a complete sentence :D
The complete sentence would look like this:
"When I was a child, I wanted to become a scientist because I was fascinated with the idea of becoming an explorer of the world."
An explorer can expand the scope of the human knowledge.
Why iwould I love that?
Why would I love that?
AsBecause knowledge is thea powerful tool that can help improve people's lifeves.
Because knowledge is a powerful tool that can help improve people's lives.
When you answer a "why" question, you would use the word "because" instead of "as".
Also, the word "people" is plural, so "life" has to be plural too. The plural of "life" is "lives".
However, the question and the answer sound kind of awkward. I would combine these two ideas into a full sentence like this:
"I would love being an explorer because knowledge is a powerful tool that can help improve people's lives."
But when iI was in high school, iI realized that my country's academic infrastructure could not support a good career( (in other words, iI am not rich enough to support myself toin pursuitng a career in science career).
But when I was in high school, I realized that my country's academic infrastructure could not support a good career (in other words, I am not rich enough to support myself in pursuing a career in science).
So i, I decided, that if iI could not become thean explorer of the world, then at least iI could become thea builder of it.
So, I decided that if I could not become an explorer of the world, then at least I could become a builder of it.
Here you have to write "an explorer"/"a builder" because you wouldn't be the only explorer/you aren't the only builder in the world.
So i, I am an engineer now.
So, I am an engineer now.
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Nice journal :)
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The explorer of the world |
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When i were a child, i want to become a scientist .
When "I" always has to be capitalized! |
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Because i was fascinated of the idea of becoming an explorer of the world.
This really isn't a complete sentence, so you have to combine it with the first sentence to create a complete sentence :D The complete sentence would look like this: "When I was a child, I wanted to become a scientist because I was fascinated with the idea of becoming an explorer of the world." |
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An explorer can expand the scope of the human knowledge. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Why i love that?
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As knowledge is the powerful tool that improve people life.
When you answer a "why" question, you would use the word "because" instead of "as". Also, the word "people" is plural, so "life" has to be plural too. The plural of "life" is "lives". However, the question and the answer sound kind of awkward. I would combine these two ideas into a full sentence like this: "I would love being an explorer because knowledge is a powerful tool that can help improve people's lives." |
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But when i was in high school, i realized that my country academic infrastructure could not support good career( in other word, i am not rich enough to support myself to pursuit science career).
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So i decided, if i could not become the explorer of the world, at least i could become the builder of it.
So Here you have to write "an explorer"/"a builder" because you wouldn't be the only explorer/you aren't the only builder in the world. |
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So i am an engineer now.
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