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Scarlett_Father

March 30, 2024

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Power of Family Love

A woman, was trafficked and sold to a forced marriage in a far rural area, just a few days after she birthed a daughter. She had been tortured by her husband, the buyer, and then had some mental problems and just did a hard job on the land.

Many years later, volunteers found the tragic mother and brought her daughter and the woman's brother to have this surprising meeting. Initially, the woman couldn't recognize her relatives and kept her distance intentionally from them. However, when she confirmed a birthmark on her daughter's left wrist. The three rushed tears while embracing each other.

The love of family bonds is magic that comes from nature and birth, that can somewhat cure and at least towards healing mental problems. I hope they will be returning to a normal and lovely life.

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Power of Family Love

A woman, was trafficked and sold to a forced marriage in a far rural area, just a few days after she birthed a daughter.

She had been tortured by her husband, the buyer, and then had some mental problems and just did a hard job on the land.

Many years later, volunteers found the tragic mother and brought her daughter and the woman's brother to have this surprising meeting.

Initially, the woman couldn't recognize her relatives and kept her distance intentionally from them.

However, when she confirmedhecked for a birthmark on her daughter's left wrist.

The three rushed tears while embracing each other.

The love of family bonds is magic that comes from nature and birth, that can somewhat cure and at least towards healing mental problems.

I hope they will be returning to a normal and lovely life.

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Scarlett_Father

April 16, 2024

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Thank you!

A woman, was trafficked and sold into a forced marriage in a fardistant rural area, just a few days after she birthed aher daughter.

She had been tortured by her husband, the buyer, and then had some mental problems and overall, just dihad a hard job on the land.time

I don't get what you mean by "hard job on the land." Like, is that what she did for work?

Many years later, volunteers found the tragic mother and brought her daughter and the woman's brother to have this surprisinge meeting.

Initially, the woman couldn't recognize her relatives and kept her distance intentionally from them.

However, when she confirmed a birthmark on her daughter's left wrist.(,)

You can't have a period if you didn't complete the thought, you know!

The three rushed tears while embracing each other.o embrace each other with tears streaming down their faces

The lovebonds of family bonds isial love is like magic that comes from nature and birth,: that can somewhat cure and at least towards healing mental problems.

I hope they will becan returning to a normal and lovely life.

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Whoaaaa. I'm genuinely surprised that such a thing could happen in the first place. The fact that people can do something so inhumane just disappoints me. I'm glad they were able to reunite, though

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Scarlett_Father

March 31, 2024

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Thank you for your correction. "hard job on the land" , here means she has been forced to plough the land, it was hard for her.

A woman, was trafficked and sold into a forced marriage in a far rural area, just a few days after she birthed a daughter.

Might be more natural to say: "Just a few days after she gave birth to a daughter, a woman was trafficked and sold into a forced marriage in a far away rural area."

She had been tortured by her husband, the buyer, and then had some mental problems and just did a hard job on the land.

The last part (did a hard job on the land) is a bit unnatural. You could say "painfully worked the land" which would sound better. If I'm being nitpicky, I would restructure the sentence like this: Her husband, the buyer, would torture his already mentally unwell "wife" by forcing her to gruelingly work the land.

Many years later, volunteers found the tragic mother and brought her daughter and the woman's brother to have this surprisinge meeting.

Initially, the woman couldn't recognize her relatives and intentionally kept her distance intentionally from them.

The three rushed tearears streamed down their faces while embracing each other.

You could also say "tears rushed down their faces"

The love of family bonds is magic that comes from nature and birth, that can somewhat cure and at least go towards healing mental problems.

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これはたったの物語のか知りたいです。 とにかくとても悲しいのに、家族とまた会ってうれしいです。

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Triscuit1113

March 30, 2024

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I just saw the picture, so I guess it was real? That's a wild story.

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Scarlett_Father

March 30, 2024

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どうもありがとうございます.それは物語ではないが、結果は良いです.

The Power of Family Love

A woman, was trafficked and sold to a forced marriage in a far rural area, just a few days after she gave birthed to a daughter.

no comma between the subject "a woman" and its verb "was trafficked"

She had been tortured by her husband, the buyer, and then had some mental problems and just did aworked very hard job on the land.

Many years later, volunteers found the tragic mother and brought her daughter and the woman's brother to have thisa surprisinge meeting.

Initially, the woman couldn't recognize her relatives and kept her distance intentionally from them.

However, when she confirmed a birthmark on her daughter's left wrist.,

Tthe three rushed tears while embracing each other.

The love of family bonds is magic that comes from nature and birth, that can somewhat cure and at leastd towards healing mental problems.

I hope they will be returning to a normal and lovely life.

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Scarlett_Father

March 30, 2024

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Thank you very much for having corrected my entries many times. :-)

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kapnCrunch

March 30, 2024

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You are welcome.

Power of Family Love


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Initially, the woman couldn't recognize her relatives and kept her distance intentionally from them.


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Initially, the woman couldn't recognize her relatives and intentionally kept her distance intentionally from them.

Initially, the woman couldn't recognize her relatives and kept her distance intentionally from them.

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However, when she confirmed a birthmark on her daughter's left wrist.


However, when she confirmed a birthmark on her daughter's left wrist.,

However, when she confirmed a birthmark on her daughter's left wrist.(,)

You can't have a period if you didn't complete the thought, you know!

However, when she confirmedhecked for a birthmark on her daughter's left wrist.

The three rushed tears while embracing each other.


Tthe three rushed tears while embracing each other.

The three rushed tearears streamed down their faces while embracing each other.

You could also say "tears rushed down their faces"

The three rushed tears while embracing each other.o embrace each other with tears streaming down their faces

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The love of family bonds is magic that comes from nature and birth, that can somewhat cure and at least towards healing mental problems.


The love of family bonds is magic that comes from nature and birth, that can somewhat cure and at leastd towards healing mental problems.

The love of family bonds is magic that comes from nature and birth, that can somewhat cure and at least go towards healing mental problems.

The lovebonds of family bonds isial love is like magic that comes from nature and birth,: that can somewhat cure and at least towards healing mental problems.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I hope they will be returning to a normal and lovely life.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I hope they will becan returning to a normal and lovely life.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

She had been tortured by her husband, the buyer, and then had some mental problems and just did a hard job on the land.


She had been tortured by her husband, the buyer, and then had some mental problems and just did aworked very hard job on the land.

She had been tortured by her husband, the buyer, and then had some mental problems and just did a hard job on the land.

The last part (did a hard job on the land) is a bit unnatural. You could say "painfully worked the land" which would sound better. If I'm being nitpicky, I would restructure the sentence like this: Her husband, the buyer, would torture his already mentally unwell "wife" by forcing her to gruelingly work the land.

She had been tortured by her husband, the buyer, and then had some mental problems and overall, just dihad a hard job on the land.time

I don't get what you mean by "hard job on the land." Like, is that what she did for work?

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Many years later, volunteers found the tragic mother and brought her daughter and the woman's brother to have this surprising meeting.


Many years later, volunteers found the tragic mother and brought her daughter and the woman's brother to have thisa surprisinge meeting.

Many years later, volunteers found the tragic mother and brought her daughter and the woman's brother to have this surprisinge meeting.

Many years later, volunteers found the tragic mother and brought her daughter and the woman's brother to have this surprisinge meeting.

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A woman, was trafficked and sold to a forced marriage in a far rural area, just a few days after she birthed a daughter.


A woman, was trafficked and sold to a forced marriage in a far rural area, just a few days after she gave birthed to a daughter.

no comma between the subject "a woman" and its verb "was trafficked"

A woman, was trafficked and sold into a forced marriage in a far rural area, just a few days after she birthed a daughter.

Might be more natural to say: "Just a few days after she gave birth to a daughter, a woman was trafficked and sold into a forced marriage in a far away rural area."

A woman, was trafficked and sold into a forced marriage in a fardistant rural area, just a few days after she birthed aher daughter.

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