Aug. 8, 2020
Poor Student Behaviour at School
Many schools these days have problems with poor student behaviour. Why do you think these problems occur? What could be done to tackle these problems?
Nowadays, student behaviour at school is becoming worse and worse with every year. School administrations and parents continue to argue about sources of this deteriorating process. In this essay I will discuss some of the reasons for students disobey their teachers and propose solutions for schools and parents to deal with this situation.
The first and foremost reason is the loss of respect in society. Generally speaking, people these days don’t have such sense of respect for elder generations like it was in the past. Growing ups tend to adopt easily this way of behaviour. In this situation, parents should pay more attention to their own behaviour and encourage their children by example.
The next problem is the influence of social networks. Today, social networks is integrated into children’s lives, making them vulnerable to example of poor behaviour translated on the net. For instance, looking at videos on YouTube, Instagram or TikTok, that might contain acts of violence or foul and hate speech. The solution can be for parents to restrict their children from inappropriate content.
Another issue related to technologies is that the Internet is replacing school as a source of knowledge. Search engines allows children to quickly get any answers they need. As a result, teachers lose their authority in front of their students. To address this problem, governments ought to make the education more technologically modern.
To sum up, poor student behaviour is an increasingly worrying issue affecting the quality of modern school education. Sometimes parents cannot cope alone with the bad influence coming from social networks and TV. The society must pay more attention to this problem, otherwise the fear of dealing with uncontrollable students will put off potential teachers from schools.
311 words, 63 minutes
Poor Student Behaviour at School
Many schools these days have problems with poor student behaviour.
Why do you think these problems occur?
What couldan be done to tackle these problems?
you weren't wrong, but when I read could, I thought "what could potentially be done to solve the problem..."
saying "can" makes it sound more powerful, like you want to actively give suggestions to solve the problem
Nowadays, student behaviour at school is becoming worse and worse with every year.
School administrations and parents continue to argue about sources of thiseir deteriorating processconduct.
i know what you were trying to say, but it sounds smoother like this
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The first and foremost reason is the loss of respect in society.
Generally speaking, people these days don’t have smuch of a sense of respect for elder generations like it was in the past.
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In this situation, parents should pay more attention to their own behaviourattitude and encourage their children by example.
I changed behaviour to "attitude" because you just said behaviour last sentence
The next problem is the influence of social networks.
Today, social networks isare integrated into children’s lives, making them vulnerable to examples of poor behaviour translated on the internet.
networks is plural, so you need "are"
For instance, looking at videos on YouTube, Instagram or TikTok, that might contain acts of violence or foul and /hate speech.
what you wrote wasn't a sentence because there was no subject (who was looking? it wasn't specified. the social media networks you mentioned aren't the subjects, but rather the objects in the sentence)
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Another issue related to technologiesy is that the Internet is replacing school as a source of knowledge.
Search engines allows children to quickly get any answers that they need.
As a result, teachers lose their authority in front of their students.
To address this problem, governments ought to make the education more technologically modern.
you don't need to say technologically here, because when you say modern, it's clear that's what you mean
To sum up, poor student behaviour is an increasingly worrying issue affecting the quality of mtodernay's school education.
I changed modern to today's school education because you just used modern last sentence
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society is a general term, you don't need to use the word "the"
311 words, 63 minutes
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Good job!
My one suggestion is to focus more on synonyms. An important part of English writing is to use a ton of synonyms and the people who correct your English tests will be looking out for this, since using a varying vocabulary makes writing look way better.
Also, if I may ask, where do you get the topics for your writing prompts? They're all really good, general topics and I would love to practice with some for my German writing test :D
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Many schools these days have problems with poor student behaviour. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Why do you think these problems occur? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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What could be done to tackle these problems? What c you weren't wrong, but when I read could, I thought "what could potentially be done to solve the problem..." saying "can" makes it sound more powerful, like you want to actively give suggestions to solve the problem |
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Nowadays, student behaviour at school is becoming worse and worse with every year. Nowadays, student behaviour at school is becoming worse and worse |
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School administrations and parents continue to argue about sources of this deteriorating process. School administrations and parents continue to argue about sources of th i know what you were trying to say, but it sounds smoother like this |
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In this essay I will discuss some of the reasons for students disobey their teachers and propose solutions for schools and parents to deal with this situation. In this essay, I will discuss some of the reasons |
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The first and foremost reason is the loss of respect in society. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Generally speaking, people these days don’t have such sense of respect for elder generations like it was in the past. Generally speaking, people these days don’t have |
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Growing ups tend to adopt easily this way of behaviour. Grow |
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In this situation, parents should pay more attention to their own behaviour and encourage their children by example. In this situation, parents should pay more attention to their own I changed behaviour to "attitude" because you just said behaviour last sentence |
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The next problem is the influence of social networks. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Today, social networks is integrated into children’s lives, making them vulnerable to example of poor behaviour translated on the net. Today, social networks networks is plural, so you need "are" |
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For instance, looking at videos on YouTube, Instagram or TikTok, that might contain acts of violence or foul and hate speech. For instance, what you wrote wasn't a sentence because there was no subject (who was looking? it wasn't specified. the social media networks you mentioned aren't the subjects, but rather the objects in the sentence) |
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The solution can be for parents to restrict their children from inappropriate content.
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Another issue related to technologies is that the Internet is replacing school as a source of knowledge. Another issue related to technolog |
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Search engines allows children to quickly get any answers they need. Search engines allows children to quickly get any answers that they need. |
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As a result, teachers lose their authority in front of their students. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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To address this problem, governments ought to make the education more technologically modern. To address this problem, governments ought to make the education more you don't need to say technologically here, because when you say modern, it's clear that's what you mean |
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To sum up, poor student behaviour is an increasingly worrying issue affecting the quality of modern school education. To sum up, poor student behaviour is an increasingly worry I changed modern to today's school education because you just used modern last sentence |
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Sometimes parents cannot cope alone with the bad influence coming from social networks and TV. Sometimes, parents alone cannot cope |
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The society must pay more attention to this problem, otherwise the fear of dealing with uncontrollable students will put off potential teachers from schools.
society is a general term, you don't need to use the word "the" |
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