Sept. 19, 2020
The admirable beauty of religion is not a cultural deposit, old and intricate historical book, and venerable stories, for atheisms and politicians. It has powerful magic to lead the people, reshape societies, vacuums court systems, rewrite histories that can bolt on government, and be used as a splurge on astute hand. The existence of religion could empower leaders to use a whip to pressure people in a righteous way and a cause to wage a war. Look back at the histories, the politics invisible tie to religion tightly. Gradually, it became one of the tools to extend the realm and enforce power. The best explanation to show reality about religious power is that President Trump visited the Vatican city’s pope for rebuilding a benign diplomacy relationship, even if the pope disagrees with President Trump’s policy about immigrants in public. But after that hoping President Trump took a lesson when religious powers are stronger enough to couple with society and control the wind, no president would jeopardize with reckless posturing to handle religious issues.
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Because the list starts with "is", all of the things after need to be singular. That is why I switched "venerable stories" to "a collection of venerable stories" - so that it is singular and makes sense with "is".
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Fun English writing tip: we love lists of three. Longer lists are of course fine, but lists of three sound have a really nice flow, especially when all three items in the list are similar. "It has the almost magical power to lead people, reshape society, and even rewrite history."
Less fun English writing tip: we like being factual. This means that if you want to use exciting metaphors - like calling religion's power "magic" - it sounds odd if you don't downplay it a little bit. That's what I did when I said "an almost magical ability" instead of "powerful magic".
I don't know what you mean by "vacuums court systems", "bolt on government" or "be used a splurge on". I made my best guess, but if you can rephrase them (in English or Chinese), I'll be better able to help you find a good way to communicate those ideas in English.
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What you wrote means "Because religion exists, leaders feel inspired/able to violently - but righteously - force people to do their will and go to war whenever they say." It sounds very very bad. Is that the connotation you wanted?
Looking back at the histories, the politics invisibley, politics have long been tightly tied to religion tightly.
"the histories" or "a history" usually refers to a specific written record of history. Just calling it "history" is usually more natural.
GraduallyOver time, it became one of the tools used to extend the realm and enforce power.
"over time" means "gradually" for longer time scales, like years or decades.
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Your word choice is so vivid and exciting! Please feel free to ask any questions or for better corrections if I misunderstood anything you wrote and my corrections changed the meaning.
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policies could couple with religious. |
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The admirable beauty of religion is not a cultural deposit, old and intricate historical book, and venerable stories, for atheisms and politicians. The admirable beauty of religion is not a cultural Because the list starts with "is", all of the things after need to be singular. That is why I switched "venerable stories" to "a collection of venerable stories" - so that it is singular and makes sense with "is". |
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It has powerful magic to lead the people, reshape societies, vacuums court systems, rewrite histories that can bolt on government, and be used as a splurge on astute hand. It has Fun English writing tip: we love lists of three. Longer lists are of course fine, but lists of three sound have a really nice flow, especially when all three items in the list are similar. "It has the almost magical power to lead people, reshape society, and even rewrite history." Less fun English writing tip: we like being factual. This means that if you want to use exciting metaphors - like calling religion's power "magic" - it sounds odd if you don't downplay it a little bit. That's what I did when I said "an almost magical ability" instead of "powerful magic". I don't know what you mean by "vacuums court systems", "bolt on government" or "be used a splurge on". I made my best guess, but if you can rephrase them (in English or Chinese), I'll be better able to help you find a good way to communicate those ideas in English. |
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The existence of religion could empower leaders to use a whip to pressure people in a righteous way and a cause to wage a war. The existence of religion could empower leaders to use What you wrote means "Because religion exists, leaders feel inspired/able to violently - but righteously - force people to do their will and go to war whenever they say." It sounds very very bad. Is that the connotation you wanted? |
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Look back at the histories, the politics invisible tie to religion tightly. Looking back at "the histories" or "a history" usually refers to a specific written record of history. Just calling it "history" is usually more natural. |
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Gradually, it became one of the tools to extend the realm and enforce power.
"over time" means "gradually" for longer time scales, like years or decades. |
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The best explanation to show reality about religious power is that President Trump visited the Vatican city’s pope for rebuilding a benign diplomacy relationship, even if the pope disagrees with President Trump’s policy about immigrants in public. The best benign = not threatening, harmless - doesn't make sense to call a diplomatic relationship benign |
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But after that hoping President Trump took a lesson when religious powers are stronger enough to couple with society and control the wind, no president would jeopardize with reckless posturing to handle religious issues. But after that |
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