July 9, 2024
Plow Farm Practical Lesson
When I was seventeen years old, I studied at a secondary specialized technical school. At that time, my classmates and I needed to undertake a plow farm practical lesson according to our learning plan. The practical lesson was held on a state-owned farm and would last for a month.
The farm was named Longkang Farm. It is located in Huaiyuan County and is about 150 kilometers away from my school.
We went there at the beginning of October. The farm resembled a small village. There were a few rows of bungalows for the farmers to live in and some offices for the farm managers. The farm had a vast expanse of farmland. On this farm, we couldn't even spot a single village in the vicinity.
My class had 28 students, and all of us stayed in a large house. Since the practical lesson focused on plowing the farmland, we plowed the farmland together with the skilled tractor drivers working on the farm day and night.
The tractors we drove were Dongfanghong chain track tractors, the most powerful ones with 75 horsepower at that time. The clutch of the tractors was extremely hard to press, so some short and slender female students couldn't even operate it.
It was a bit chilly at the beginning of October, so we needed to wear at least two layers of clothes. Every morning, we could behold many different crops in the fields and some vegetables in the farmers' vegetable gardens. All of these plants were shrouded in a thin mist, with their leaves carrying dew drops. I enjoyed seeing the mist on the farmland in the early morning, as well as the colorful morning glories on the farmers’ fences.
When we plowed the farmland at midnight, we had a thirty-minute break. During this period, we were served with mutton soup. I believe it was the best mutton soup I've ever had because, at that time, we were too impoverished to have a decent meal.
We returned to our school at the end of October. Since then, I haven't visited Longkang Farm again, but the experience of practicing plowing farmland there has left a profound impression on me.
Plow Farm Practical Lesson in Farmland Plowing
When I was seventeen years old, I studied at a secondary specialized technical secondary school.
At that time, (according to our learning plan,) my classmates and I needed to undertake a plow farm practical lesson in farmland plowing (according to our learning plan).
The practical lesson was held on a state-owned farm and [would last | lasted] for a month.
“Lasted” is more natural here.
The farm was named Longkang Farm.
It iwas located in Huaiyuan County , (and iswas) about 150 kilometers away from my school.
Past tense is more natural, since the sentences that precede and follow this one are in past tense.
We went there at the beginning of October.
The farm resembled a small village.
There were a few rows of bungalows for the farmers to live in and some offices for the farm managers.
The farm had a vast expanse of farmland.
On this farm, we couldn't even spot a single village in the vicinity.
My class had 28 students, and all of us stayed in a large house.
Since the practical lesson focused on plowing the farmland, we plowed the farmland together with the skilled tractor drivers, working on the farm day and night.
If “working on the farm day and night” only modifies “skilled tractor drivers,” omit the comma.
The tractors we drove were Dongfanghong [chain track | tracked | caterpillar] tractors, the most powerful ones with 75 horsepower at that time.
The clutch of the tractors was extremely hard to press, so some [short and slender | petite] female students couldn't even operate it.
It was a bit chilly at the beginning of October, so we needed to wear at least two layers of clothes.
Every morning, we could [behold | observe] many different crops in the fields and some vegetables in the farmers' vegetable gardens.
“Behold” is too old and formal for this.
All of these plants were shrouded in a thin mist, with their leaves carryingsprinkled with dew drops.
“Carrying” usually implies motion, like the leaves were walking somewhere. :-)
I enjoyed seeing the mist on the farmland in the early morning, as well as the colorful morning glories on the farmers’ fences.
When we plowed the farmland at midnight, we had a thirty-minute break.
You plowed at midnight (00:00 hrs)?
During this period, we were served with mutton soup.
I believe it was the best mutton soup I've ever had because, at that time, we were too impoverished to have a decent meal.
We returned to our school at the end of October.
Since then, I haven't visited Longkang Farm again, but the experience of practicing plowing farmland there has left a profound impression on me.
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Well done.
July 9, 2024
"Past tense is more natural, since the sentences that precede and follow this one are in past tense."
When I was writing this sentence, I thought that the location of the farm and the distance between the farm and the school had never changed, so I wrote it in the present simple tense.
"Lasted" is more natural here."
Yes, I am aware of it now.
If "working on the farm day and night" only modifies "skilled tractor drivers," omit the comma.
I think I should have written "working for the farm" since I wanted to use the content in the brackets to modify the skilled tractor drivers. The skilled drivers were the staff of the farm.
Petite. Sprinkle. Two nice new words for me.
"You plowed at midnight (00:00 hrs)?"
Yes. The night shift may be from 7 pm to 7 am the next morning.
Thank you very much JoTofu.
July 9, 2024
If "working on the farm day and night" only modifies "skilled tractor drivers," omit the comma.
What I mean is, without the comma, only the skilled drivers worked day and night; with the comma, both the students and the skilled drivers worked day and night.
July 9, 2024
Yes. I see. Thank you very much.
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There were a few rows of bungalows for the farmers to live in and some offices for the farm managers. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The farm had a vast expanse of farmland. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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On this farm, we couldn't even spot a single village in the vicinity. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My class had 28 students, and all of us stayed in a large house. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Since the practical lesson focused on plowing the farmland, we plowed the farmland together with the skilled tractor drivers working on the farm day and night. Since the practical lesson focused on plowing the farmland, we plowed the farmland together with the skilled tractor drivers, working on the farm day and night. If “working on the farm day and night” only modifies “skilled tractor drivers,” omit the comma. |
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The tractors we drove were Dongfanghong chain track tractors, the most powerful ones with 75 horsepower at that time. The tractors we drove were Dongfanghong [chain track | tracked | caterpillar] tractors, the most powerful ones with 75 horsepower at that time. |
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The clutch of the tractors was extremely hard to press, so some short and slender female students couldn't even operate it. The clutch of the tractors was extremely hard to press, so some [short and slender | petite] female students couldn't even operate it. |
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It was a bit chilly at the beginning of October, so we needed to wear at least two layers of clothes. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Every morning, we could behold many different crops in the fields and some vegetables in the farmers' vegetable gardens. Every morning, we could [behold | observe] many different crops in the fields and some vegetables in the farmers' vegetable gardens. “Behold” is too old and formal for this. |
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Plow Farm Practical Lesson
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When I was seventeen years old, I studied at a secondary specialized technical school. When I was seventeen years old, I studied at a |
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At that time, my classmates and I needed to undertake a plow farm practical lesson according to our learning plan. At that time, (according to our learning plan,) my classmates and I needed to undertake a |
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The practical lesson was held on a state-owned farm and would last for a month. The practical lesson was held on a state-owned farm and [would last | lasted] for a month. “Lasted” is more natural here. |
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The farm was named Longkang Farm. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It is located in Huaiyuan County and is about 150 kilometers away from my school. It Past tense is more natural, since the sentences that precede and follow this one are in past tense. |
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We went there at the beginning of October. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The farm resembled a small village. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I enjoyed seeing the mist on the farmland in the early morning, as well as the colorful morning glories on the farmers’ fences. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When we plowed the farmland at midnight, we had a thirty-minute break. When we plowed the farmland at midnight, we had a thirty-minute break. You plowed at midnight (00:00 hrs)? |
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During this period, we were served with mutton soup. During this period, we were served |
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I believe it was the best mutton soup I've ever had because, at that time, we were too impoverished to have a decent meal. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We returned to our school at the end of October. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Since then, I haven't visited Longkang Farm again, but the experience of practicing plowing farmland there has left a profound impression on me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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All of these plants were shrouded in a thin mist, with their leaves carrying dew drops. All of these plants were shrouded in a thin mist, with their leaves “Carrying” usually implies motion, like the leaves were walking somewhere. :-) |
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