Oct. 7, 2022
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Paying all workers the same salary in a company promotes harmony and respect amongst colleagues.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that if companies remunerate their staff the same wage, respectful and harmonious relationships will be created between coworkers. I completely disagree.
First, paying all employees equally can actually cause several drawbacks. First, it would demotivate workers from working hard. In particular, workers would see no reason to work at their optimal level if they receive the same amount of money regardless of their performance. This results in low productivity, therefore loss of profit. Second, it would be difficult to retain certain employees and recruit new ones. To illustrate, in 2020, the CEO of a psychotherapy company called Spill decided to pay every staff a salary of GBP 36,000 a year. After a year, they had to cancel the scheme because they really struggled to attract employees for certain roles that had a higher average pay than GBP 36,000.
Second, it can cause conflicts between staff provided that they all have the same salary. This is because certain career positions have higher responsibilities and duties, and require more difficult knowledge and skills than others. In particular, doctors earn a high salary because they have to be trained for several years in university and face the stress from their great responsibility of saving patients and from the exhaustion of long working hours. Meanwhile, cashiers in the same hospital earn much lower because they only have to know basic math and computer skills and are free from such stress.
In conclusion, paying all workers equally is unfair treatment to those with special expertise and heavy responsibility, and it can lead to lower production and difficulties in attracting and retaining accomplished workers.
Some people think that if companies remunerate their staff the same wageequally, respectful and harmonious relationships will be created between coworkers.
I would say either "remunerate equally" or "pay the same wage" -- "remunerate" already contains the idea of "wage" within it.
First, paying all employees equally can actually causehas several drawbacks.
Causing a drawback is not possible.
First, it would demotivate workers from working hard.
In particular, workers would see no reason to work at their optimal levelhard if they receive the same amount of money regardless of their performance.
"at their optimal level" is ambiguous because it could mean "at the level they would like to work at"
This results in low productivity, therefore loss of profit.
Second, it would be difficult to retain certain employees and recruit new ones.
To illustrate, in 2020, the CEO of a psychotherapy company called Spill decided to pay every staff a salary of GBP 36,000 a year.
After a year, they had to cancel the scheme because they really struggled to attract employees for certain roles that had a higher average pay than GBP 36,000.
Second, it can cause conflicts between staff provided that they all have the same salary.
This is because certain career positions have higher responsibilities and duties, and require more difficult knowledge and skills than others.
In particular, doctors earn a high salary because they have to be trained for several years in university and face the stress from their great responsibility of saving patients and from the exhaustion of long working hours.
Meanwhile, cashiers in the same hospital earn much loweress because they only have to know basic math and computer skills and are free from such stress.
In conclusion, paying all workers equally is unfair treatment to those with special expertise and heavy responsibility, and it can lead to lower production and difficulties in attracting and retaining accomplished workers.
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Please review my essay |
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Paying all workers the same salary in a company promotes harmony and respect amongst colleagues. |
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To what extent do you agree or disagree? |
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Some people think that if companies remunerate their staff the same wage, respectful and harmonious relationships will be created between coworkers. Some people think that if companies remunerate their staff I would say either "remunerate equally" or "pay the same wage" -- "remunerate" already contains the idea of "wage" within it. |
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I completely disagree. |
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First, paying all employees equally can actually cause several drawbacks. First, paying all employees equally Causing a drawback is not possible. |
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First, it would demotivate workers from working hard. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In particular, workers would see no reason to work at their optimal level if they receive the same amount of money regardless of their performance. In particular, workers would see no reason to work "at their optimal level" is ambiguous because it could mean "at the level they would like to work at" |
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This results in low productivity, therefore loss of profit. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Second, it would be difficult to retain certain employees and recruit new ones. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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To illustrate, in 2020, the CEO of a psychotherapy company called Spill decided to pay every staff a salary of GBP 36,000 a year. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After a year, they had to cancel the scheme because they really struggled to attract employees for certain roles that had a higher average pay than GBP 36,000. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Second, it can cause conflicts between staff provided that they all have the same salary. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This is because certain career positions have higher responsibilities and duties, and require more difficult knowledge and skills than others. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In particular, doctors earn a high salary because they have to be trained for several years in university and face the stress from their great responsibility of saving patients and from the exhaustion of long working hours. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Meanwhile, cashiers in the same hospital earn much lower because they only have to know basic math and computer skills and are free from such stress. Meanwhile, cashiers in the same hospital earn much l |
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In conclusion, paying all workers equally is unfair treatment to those with special expertise and heavy responsibility, and it can lead to lower production and difficulties in attracting and retaining accomplished workers. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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