Nov. 16, 2022
Please review my essay
2. Describe a quiet place
You should say:
Where it is
When you like to go there
What you do there
And explain why you like to visit there
The place that I would like to about is the front porch of my house. Usually, when thinking of a quiet place, people living in cities may think about a park or a library. Although I’m also living in a city - in fact, I live in my city’s busiest street, Phan Chu Trinh street, most of the time in the day, my neighborhood is very peaceful and quiet. This is because my house is not located on the main road, but in a small dead-end alley. Apart from 7 to 8 am and around 5 pm, when people commute to and from work, there is almost no traffic in the alley. So my front porch is free from vehicle noises.
As I work from home, I can choose any places in my house to work, and when there is no task, I can take a break without being wary of my employer. So if I want some fresh air, I would go to sit in a chair on my front porch.
The chair is not very comfortable to sit in; it is made entirely of wood and has a straight back. But what I like about the spot is that the chair is seated next to the house’s fish pond. The pond was built by my dad, in which we raise a large number of tiny fishes that I have no idea what their species are, and three beautiful koi fishes – two juveniles and one adult. The three are a typical type of koi fish that has a white body with red-and-black-colored markings. My dad grows a variety of submerged, floating, and emergent plants in the pond. He built a concrete cover for the pond with a movable glass window to keep dirt out of the pond and prevent direct sunlight heating the water. On top of the cover, there are some pot plants with leaves hanging down to the water's surface. There is also a banyan tree to provide shade for the porch. The water is purified day and night by a powerful filter, so it is crystal clear. I can spend hours watching the vivid green mats on the surface of the water forming by Duckweed and Mosquito Fern foliage, the feather-like foliage of Parrot's Feather and Hornwort swaying with the flow of water created by the filter, and the colorful fishes swimming peacefully around the plants. Sitting there, all I can hear are the relaxing sound of water flowing and birds chirping. I can really immerse myself in nature in the middle of a major city at my doorstep.
Please review my essay
2. Describe a quiet place
You should say:
Where it is
When you like to go there
What you do there
And explain why you like to visit there
The place that I would like to talk about is the front porch of my house.
Usually, when thinking of a quiet place, people living in cities may think about a park or a library.
Although I’m also living in a city - in fact, I live in my city’s busiest street, Phan Chu Trinh street, most of the time in the day, my neighborhood is very peaceful and quiet most of the time.
Apart from 7 to 8 am and around 5 pm, when people commute to ande back from work, there is almost no traffic in the alley.
So my front porch is free from vehicle noises.
As I work fromat home, I can choose any places in my house to work, and when there is no task, I can take a break without being wary of my employer.
So if I want some fresh air, I would go to sit in a chair on my front porch.
The chair is not very comfortable to sit in; though, as it is made entirely of wood and has a straight back.
But what I like about the spot is that the chairtalk about the chair is that it is seated next to the house’s fish pond.
The pond was built by my dad, in which we raised a large number of tiny fishes that I have no idea what their species are, and three beautiful koi fishes – two juveniles and one adult.
The three are a typical type of koi fish that has a white body with red-and-black-colored markings.
My dad grows a variety of submerged, floating, and emergent plants in the pond.
He built a concrete cover for the pond with a movable glass window to keep dirt out of the pond and prevent direct sunlight heating the water.
On top of the cover, there are some pot plants with leaves hanging down to the water's surface.
There is also a banyan tree to provide shade for the porch.
The water is purified day and night by a powerful filter, so it is crystal clear.
I can spend hours watching the vivid green mats on the surface of the water forming by Duckweed and Mosquito Fern foliage, the feather-like foliage of Parrot's Feather and Hornwort swaying with the flow of water created by the filter, and the colorful fishes swimming peacefully around the plants.
Sitting there, all I can hear areis the relaxing sound of water flowing and birds chirping.
I can really immerse myself in nature in the middle of a major city at my doorstep.
Feedback
Good wide use of vocabulary!
Try to make sentences more natural
Try to use pronouns to avoid repition
Overall, great job!
Nov. 17, 2022
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Although I’m also living in a city - in fact, I live in my city’s busiest street, Phan Chu Trinh street, most of the time in the day, my neighborhood is very peaceful and quiet. Although |
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This is because my house is not located on the main road, but in a small dead-end alley. |
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Apart from 7 to 8 am and around 5 pm, when people commute to and from work, there is almost no traffic in the alley. Apart from 7 to 8 am and around 5 pm, when people com |
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So my front porch is free from vehicle noises. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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As I work from home, I can choose any places in my house to work, and when there is no task, I can take a break without being wary of my employer. As I work |
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So if I want some fresh air, I would go to sit in a chair on my front porch. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The chair is not very comfortable to sit in; it is made entirely of wood and has a straight back. The chair is not very comfortable to sit in |
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But what I like about the spot is that the chair is seated next to the house’s fish pond. But what I like about the |
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The pond was built by my dad, in which we raise a large number of tiny fishes that I have no idea what their species are, and three beautiful koi fishes – two juveniles and one adult. The pond was built by my dad, in which we raised a large number of tiny fishes that I have no idea what their species are, and three beautiful koi fishes – two juveniles and one adult. |
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The three are a typical type of koi fish that has a white body with red-and-black-colored markings. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My dad grows a variety of submerged, floating, and emergent plants in the pond. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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On top of the cover, there are some pot plants with leaves hanging down to the water's surface. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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There is also a banyan tree to provide shade for the porch. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The water is purified day and night by a powerful filter, so it is crystal clear. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I can spend hours watching the vivid green mats on the surface of the water forming by Duckweed and Mosquito Fern foliage, the feather-like foliage of Parrot's Feather and Hornwort swaying with the flow of water created by the filter, and the colorful fishes swimming peacefully around the plants. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Sitting there, all I can hear are the relaxing sound of water flowing and birds chirping. Sitting there, all I can hear |
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I can really immerse myself in nature in the middle of a major city at my doorstep. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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