Oct. 3, 2022
please review my essay
Topic:
Some people think that employers should ensure a supportive and pleasant work environment where each employee should be respected and valued equally while others think employers should focus instead on providing better facilities and equipment.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
My essay:
People have different views about what the best method is to run a successful business. Some people advocate that it is having a positive work environment in which workers respect and recognize each other’s worth, whereas others believe investing in improving facilities and equipment is more advantageous. I tend to agree with the former approach.
On the one hand, upgrading facilities and equipment is beneficial in many ways. One is that it allows organizations to run smoothly and safely. In particular, properly functioning machinery, such as industrial turbines or computers, helps employees complete their tasks with greater ease and efficiency, while low-quality ones may malfunction and impede workflow, causing loss of production and profit, or even accidents. Another is that a workplace with good ventilation and suitable temperature, lighting, space and seating makes its workers comfortable. Consequently, they can perform at their optimal level.
On the other hand, creating a supportive and respectful workplace also has its own benefits. First, as workers feel supported by their colleagues and supervisors, they are more likely to help others. This promotes harmonious relationships between employees, thus improving productivity. Second, being respected and valued makes employees feel a sense of worth; they are happier and more motivated to work hard. This can result in a good performance. Finally, the alternative option, providing better facilities and equipment, can be quite costly, whereas no money is required in forming a supportive work environment.
In conclusion, investing in good equipment and facilities can optimize business processes and safety. However, promoting mutual respect and support can enhance teamwork, incentivize employees to put in their best performance, and entails no capital expenditures, so it is the better choice.
please review my essay
Topic:
Some people think that employers should ensure a supportive and pleasant work environment where each employee should be respected and valued equally while others think employers should focus instead on providing better facilities and equipment.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
My essay:
People have different views about what the best method is to run a successful business is.
Some people advocate that it is having a positive work environment in which workers respect and recognize each other’s worth, whereas others believe that investing into improvinge facilities and equipment is more advantageous.
I tend to agree with the former approach.
On the one hand, upgrading facilities and equipment is beneficial in many ways.
One is that it allows organizations to run smoothly and safely.
In particular, properly functioning machinery, such as industrial turbines or computers, helps employees complete their tasks with greater ease and efficiency, while low-quality ones may malfunction and impede workflow, causing loss of production and profit, or even accidents.
Another is that a workplace with good ventilation and suitable temperature, lighting, space and seating can makes its workers more comfortable.
A nicer approach.
Consequently, they can perform at their optimal level.
On the other hand, creating a supportive and respectful workplace also has its own benefits.
First, as workers feel supported by their colleagues and supervisors, they are more likely to help others.
This promotes harmonious relationships between employees, thus improving productivity.
Second, being respected and valued makes employees feel a sense of worth; they are happier and more motivated to work hard.
This can result in a goodbetter performance.
"A good performance" sounds like there would be only one action, while "better performance" suggests that there would be continous, ongoing actions.
Finally, the alternative option, providing better facilities and equipment, can be quite costly, whereas no money is required in forming a supportive work environment.
In conclusion, investing in good equipment and facilities can optimize business processes and safety.
However, promoting mutual respect and support can enhance teamwork, incentivize employees to put in their best performance, and entails no capital expenditures, so it is the better choice.
Oct. 4, 2022
Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
pPlease review my essay
Topic:
Some people think that employers should ensure a supportive and pleasant work environment where each employee should be respected and valued equally, while others think that employers should focus instead on providing better facilities and equipment.
'others think employers' would work in an informal setting, but with a formal text, such as an essay, it's best to add 'that.'
People have different views about what the best method is to run a successful business.
Some people advocatrgue that it is having a positive work environment in which workers respect and recognize each other’s worth, whereas others believe that investing in the improvingement facilities and equipment is more advantageous.
'advocate' isn't the best word for this situation.
I tend to agree with the former approach.
On the one hand, upgrading facilities and equipment is beneficial in many ways; one is that it allows organizations to run smoothly and safely.
I combined this sentence with the following one in an attempt to achieve a better flow.
One is that it allows organizations to run smoothly and safely.
In particular, properly functioning machinery, such as industrial turbines or computers, helps employees complete their tasks with greater ease and efficiency, while low-quality ones may malfunction and impede workflow, causing loss of production and profit, or even accidents.
Another is that a workplace with good ventilation and suitable temperature, lighting, space, and seating makes its workers comfortable.
Check whichever formatting guidelines you're using to see if you need the oxford comma. If not, what you have is correct.
Consequently, they can perform at their optimal level.
On the other hand, creating a supportive and respectful workplace also has its own benefits.
First, as workers feel supported by their colleagues and supervisors, they are more likely to help others.
This promotes harmonious relationships between employees, thus improving productivity.
Second, being respected and valued makes employees feel a sense of worth; they are happier and more motivated to work hard.
This can result in a good performance.
Finally, the alternative option, providing better facilities and equipment, can be quite costly, whereas no money is required in forming a supportive work environment.
In conclusion, investing in good equipment and facilities can optimize business processes and safety.
However, promoting mutual respect and support can enhance teamwork, incentivize employees to put in their best performance, and entails no capital expenditures, so. So, it is the better choice.
Just a stylistic suggestion.
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Only some minor errors. Well done!
Oct. 3, 2022
Some people advocatrgue that it is having a positive work environment in which workers respect and recognize each other’s worth, whereas others believe that investing in the improvingement facilities and equipment is more advantageous.
Should it be "the improvement of facilities and equipment"?
I am very grateful for your review. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
Oct. 3, 2022
Should it be "the improvement of facilities and equipment"? I am very grateful for your review. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
Yes, you're right. My bad. And no problem!
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Another is that a workplace with good ventilation and suitable temperature, lighting, space and seating makes its workers comfortable. Another is that a workplace with good ventilation and suitable temperature, lighting, space, and seating makes its workers comfortable. Check whichever formatting guidelines you're using to see if you need the oxford comma. If not, what you have is correct. Another is that a workplace with good ventilation and suitable temperature, lighting, space and seating can make A nicer approach. |
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In conclusion, investing in good equipment and facilities can optimize business processes and safety. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, promoting mutual respect and support can enhance teamwork, incentivize employees to put in their best performance, and entails no capital expenditures, so it is the better choice. However, promoting mutual respect and support can enhance teamwork, incentivize employees to put in their best performance, and entails no capital expenditures Just a stylistic suggestion. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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