Aug. 12, 2020
Make a decision - Part 1
"What you wanna be one day, son?" they ask you when you are little. "A tractor driver," you answer. Your grandpa has a field which he plows with his tractor. Of course you wanna be like him. You don't really know anything about possible jobs when you are five; how could you?
But as you grow up a little, you are starting to realize that you soon have to choose a direction of your future career. At that time, you certainly forgot that you once wanted to be a tractor driver.
You are unknowingly pushed to think about what you are good at and what you like to do. Once you choose your direction, it's hard to get off the track. The decision changes your life completely and for good.
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Makeing a decision - Part 1
Making a decision - Part 1
"What you wannat to be one day, son?"
"What you want to be one day, son?"
they ask you when you are little.
"A tractor driver," you answer.
Your grandpa has a field which he plows with his tractor.
Of course you wannat to be like him.
Of course you want to be like him.
You don't really know anything about possible jobs when you are five; how could you?
But as you grow up a little, you are starting to realize that you soon have to choose athe direction of your future career.
But as you grow up a little, you are starting to realize that you soon have to choose the direction of your future career.
At that time, you certainly forgot that you once wanted to be a tractor driver.
You are unknowingly pushed to think about what you are good at and what you like to do.
Once you choose your direction, it's hard to get off the track.
The decision changes your life completely and for goodforever.
The decision changes your life forever.
"for good" still makes sense in this context however forever is the more suitable and natural word to use.
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Amazing job, very impressive. Well done!
Aug. 13, 2020
Thank you for the correction! I really appreciate it. :)
Make a decision - Part 1
"What you wanna be one day, son?"
they ask you when you are little.
"A tractor driver," you answer.
Your grandpa has a field whichthat he plows with his tractor.
Your grandpa has a field that he plows with his tractor.
The original is grammatically correct, but 'that' sounds more natural.
Of course you wanna* be like him. Of course you wanna* be like him.
'wanna' is very casual, it's mainly used in speaking and texting. I'd only recommend using it when you are writing with a strong character voice.
You don't really know anything about possible jobs when you are five; how could you?
But as you grow up a little, you are starting to realize that you soon have to choose a direction of your future career.
At that time, you certainly forgot that you once wanted to be a tractor driver.
You are unknowingly* pushed to think about what you are good at and what you like to do. You are unknowingly* pushed to think about what you are good at and what you like to do.
unwittingly - more precise synonym
Once you choose your direction, it's hard to get off the track.
The decision changes your life completely and for good.
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Your English is really strong! You have a really strong understanding of grammar and you use vocabulary precisely. The only suggestion that I have is to think about how to keep tone, style and vocabulary consistent.
"What youcha wanna be one day, son?"
"Whatcha wanna be one day, son?"
This kind of casual writing is perfectly fine, but it's more natural if you're using casual spoken English to more directly recreate it in writing it like this. Reading "What you wanna" is more awkward than reading "Whatcha wanna".
they ask you when you are little.
"A tractor driver," you answer.
Your grandpa has a field which he plows with his tractor.
Of course you wanna be like him.
You don't really know anything about possible jobs when you are five; how could you?
But as you grow up a little, you are starting to realize that you soon have to choose athe direction of your future career.
But as you grow up a little, you start to realize that you soon have to choose the direction of your future career.
AtWhen that time, you certain comes, you totally forgoet that you once wanted to be a tractor driver.
When that time comes, you totally forget that you once wanted to be a tractor driver.
At that time -> When that time comes (more natural)
Certainly -> "totally" or "completely" is more natural
You are unknowingly pushed to think about what you are good at and what you like to do.
Once you choose your direction, it's hard to get off theat track.
Once you choose your direction, it's hard to get off that track.
Theat decision changes your life completely and for good.
That decision changes your life for good.
"Completely" and "for good" are considered to be expressions with the same meaning, so it's redundant to say both here. It's better to just pick one.
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Your writing has an excellent feeling to it. It's clear you've read a lot of English and have practiced for a long time.
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"What you wanna be one day, son?"
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Of course you wanna be like him. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Of course you wanna* be like him. Of course you wanna* be like him. 'wanna' is very casual, it's mainly used in speaking and texting. I'd only recommend using it when you are writing with a strong character voice.
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At that time, you certainly forgot that you once wanted to be a tractor driver.
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You are unknowingly pushed to think about what you are good at and what you like to do. This sentence has been marked as perfect! You are unknowingly* pushed to think about what you are good at and what you like to do. You are unknowingly* pushed to think about what you are good at and what you like to do. unwittingly - more precise synonym This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The decision changes your life completely and for good.
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