ronpei's avatar
ronpei

July 31, 2024

0
“Pets Rock”

Last Saturday, while I was hanging around in a department store in Tokyo, I came across a unique shop, where many pieces of artwork from British brand “Pets Rock” were on sale. I was really impressed by its amazing characters with the images of animals (cats, dogs and mice) resembling to superstars across the world. For example, the American short hair cat wearing the costume of Audrey Hepburn from “Breakfast at Tiffany’s”, the Chihuahua dog representing Michael Jackson from “Thriller”, and so on. I impulsively bought a blanket on which fifty lovely characters were printed. Among them, the hamster like Mr. Trump and the Shiba dog like Dalai Lama are especially easy to distinguish. Of course, I cannot guess all the original celebrities, because I am not so familiar with movie stars and singers abroad. I think it would be better if the names of the characters would have been written beneath of them.


先週の土曜日、東京のデパートをぶらぶらしていたら、ユニークなショップに出会いました。そこでは、イギリスのブランド「ペッツ・ロック」のアート作品がたくさん売られていました。世界中のスーパースターに似た動物(猫、犬、ネズミ)を描いた素晴らしいキャラクターに感動しました。例えば、「ティファニーで朝食を」のオードリー・ヘップバーンの衣装を着たアメリカンショートヘアの猫や、「スリラー」のマイケル・ジャクソンを模したチワワなどです。私は衝動買いして、50匹の愛らしいキャラクターがプリントされたブランケットを買いました。中でも、ハムスターのトランプ氏や柴犬のようなダライ・ラマは特に見分けやすいです。もちろん、私は海外の映画スターや歌手にあまり詳しくないので、原作の有名人を全部推測することはできません。キャラクターの下に名前が書いてあったらもっとよかったと思います

Corrections
0

I was really impressed by its amazing characters with the images of animals (cats, dogs and mice) resembling tohe superstars across the world.

Among them, the hamster likethat resembles Mr. Trump and the Shiba dog likethat resembles Dalai Lama are especially easy to distinguish.

I think it would behave been better if the names of the characters would have beenere written beneath of them.

ronpei's avatar
ronpei

July 31, 2024

0

添削いただきありがとうございました。

“Pets Rock”

Last Saturday, while I was hanging around in a department store in Tokyo, I came across a unique shop, where many pieces of artwork from the British brand “Pets Rock” were on sale.

I was really impressed by its amazing characters with the images of animals (cats, dogs, and mice) resembling to superstars acrossund the world.

"AROUND the world" is more commonly used.

For example, there was an American short hair cat wearing the costume of Audrey Hepburn from “Breakfast at Tiffany’s”, the Ca chihuahua dog representing Michael Jackson from “Thriller”, and so on.

I would say "Audrey Hepburn's costume" to shorten the sentence.

Dog breeds typically stand alone, so it isn't necessary to add the word "dog".

I impulsively bought a blanket, on which fifty lovely characters were printed.

I might use "on a whim", which has a positive, lighthearted connotation.

Among them, the hamster like Mr.resembling Donald/former president Trump and the Shiba dog likInu resembling the Dalai Lama awere especially easy to distinguish.

When referring to appearance, "like" does not fit. Use "ressemble" or "look like" instead.

Of course, I cannot guess all the original celebrities, becaus since I am not so familiar with movie stars and singers abroad.

I think it would behave been better if the names of the characters would havehad been written beneath of them.

Conditional perfect + past perfect

Feedback

Nice job, this was very well written!

ronpei's avatar
ronpei

July 31, 2024

0

Thank you for your corrections and comments.

Last Saturday, while I was hanging around in a department store in Tokyo, I came across a unique shop, where many pieces of artwork from British brand “Pets Rock” were on sale.


Last Saturday, while I was hanging around in a department store in Tokyo, I came across a unique shop, where many pieces of artwork from the British brand “Pets Rock” were on sale.

I was really impressed by its amazing characters with the images of animals (cats, dogs and mice) resembling to superstars across the world.


I was really impressed by its amazing characters with the images of animals (cats, dogs, and mice) resembling to superstars acrossund the world.

"AROUND the world" is more commonly used.

I was really impressed by its amazing characters with the images of animals (cats, dogs and mice) resembling tohe superstars across the world.

For example, the American short hair cat wearing the costume of Audrey Hepburn from “Breakfast at Tiffany’s”, the Chihuahua dog representing Michael Jackson from “Thriller”, and so on.


For example, there was an American short hair cat wearing the costume of Audrey Hepburn from “Breakfast at Tiffany’s”, the Ca chihuahua dog representing Michael Jackson from “Thriller”, and so on.

I would say "Audrey Hepburn's costume" to shorten the sentence. Dog breeds typically stand alone, so it isn't necessary to add the word "dog".

I impulsively bought a blanket on which fifty lovely characters were printed.


I impulsively bought a blanket, on which fifty lovely characters were printed.

I might use "on a whim", which has a positive, lighthearted connotation.

Among them, the hamster like Mr. Trump and the Shiba dog like Dalai Lama are especially easy to distinguish.


Among them, the hamster like Mr.resembling Donald/former president Trump and the Shiba dog likInu resembling the Dalai Lama awere especially easy to distinguish.

When referring to appearance, "like" does not fit. Use "ressemble" or "look like" instead.

Among them, the hamster likethat resembles Mr. Trump and the Shiba dog likethat resembles Dalai Lama are especially easy to distinguish.

Of course, I cannot guess all the original celebrities, because I am not so familiar with movie stars and singers abroad.


Of course, I cannot guess all the original celebrities, becaus since I am not so familiar with movie stars and singers abroad.

I think it would be better if the names of the characters would have been written beneath of them.


I think it would behave been better if the names of the characters would havehad been written beneath of them.

Conditional perfect + past perfect

I think it would behave been better if the names of the characters would have beenere written beneath of them.

“Pets Rock”


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

You need LangCorrect Premium to access this feature.

Go Premium