Aug. 25, 2020
perfume
I couldn't stand the smell of the perfume that an old woman, sat down next to my seat at the train, put on.
I can't ignore such a smell because I'm involved in analysis of flavors and interested in what kind of flavor components it cotains.
The reason why that smell made me feel so bad is that a sweet smell of
vanilla was too strong.
Vanillin, which is extracted from an essential oil of vanilla, is hard to volatilize compared with other flavor components. Therefore, the smell hardly disappears from your nose and retain for a long time.
Vanilla-like smell won't remove from my fingers (under my fingernails) for a few days when I handled vanillin at my work.
I hope you should consider the amount of the perfume you put on and how the aroma would change with time carefully.
通勤の電車で隣に乗ったおばさんの香水がきつかった。私は香りの分析を仕事にしているので、こういうとき何の香りか考えてしまうため無視できなくなる。
この臭いがキツかった原因は間違いなくバニラの甘い香りだ。バニリンはバニラの精油から抽出される成分で、一般的な香気成分より沸点が高く揮発しにくい。ゆえに、臭いが抜けず残り続ける。
仕事でバニリンを素手で触ってしまった時などは、爪の間から臭いが2,3日抜けない。
香水をつけるときは、つける量や臭いが時間によってどう変化するかも考えてもらいたいものだ。
I couldn't stand the smell of the perfume that an old woman, who sat down next to my seat at the train, put onwas wearing.
"put on" is an action that it sounds like she did there, while "was wearing" describes her current state.
I can't ignore such a smell because I'm involved in the analysis of flavors and interested in what kind of flavor components it contains.
Therefore, the smell hardly disappears fromgets stuck in your nose and retmains there for a long time.
Just an alternative to consider.
Aug. 26, 2020
Thank you for your correction!
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We capitalize most words in titles. There are exceptions for some that we do not.
I couldn't stand the smell of the perfume that an old woman, who sat down next to my seat aton the train, put on.
We use on instead of at for all vehicles, boats, planes, trains...
I can't ignore such a smell because I'm involved in analysis of flavors and interested in what kind of flavor components it cotains.
Correct, but I question if flavour is really the word you're looking for. Perhaps smell instead. Flavour is generally used in reference to taste.
The reason why that smell made me feel so bad is that a sweet smell of
vanilla was too strong.
Vanillin, which is extracted from an essential oil of vanilla, is hard to volatilize compared with other flavor components.
Volatilize could be a term you are familiar with in industry. I am not, but it does appear to be valid.
Therefore, the smell hardly disappears from your nose and retmains for a long time.
retain more means to hold/to keep as opposed to stay/remain.
Vanilla-like smell won't remove fromleave my fingers (under my fingernails) for a few days when I handled vanillin at my work.
won't and handle need to pair together. An alternate way to write this would be:
Vanilla-like smell wouldn't leave my fingers (under my fingernails) for a few days when I handled vanillin at my work.
(wouldn't and handled are matched here)
I hope you shouldwill consider the amount of the perfume you put on and how the aroma wouldill change with time carefully.
Using conditional would/should here doesn't work correctly. You are giving advice for something that someone should do in the future and thus a future tense should be used.
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Nice job!
Aug. 26, 2020
I agree with these comments - it's interesting to read about the science of different scents! Perhaps the words "aroma" and "odor" could be useful here? "Aroma" refers to a pleasant smell. "Odor" refers to a very strong and unpleasant smell.
Aug. 26, 2020
I can't ignore such a smell because I'm involved in analysis of flavors and interested in what kind of flavor components it cotains.
Thank you for your correction in detail. Yes, I'm involved in analysis of "flavor" for improving tastes of drinks and OTC drugs.
Aug. 26, 2020
I agree with these comments - it's interesting to read about the science of different scents! Perhaps the words "aroma" and "odor" could be useful here? "Aroma" refers to a pleasant smell. "Odor" refers to a very strong and unpleasant smell.
You are right! "Aroma" and "Odor" must be more appropriate terms here. Thank you.
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I can't ignore such a smell because I'm involved in analysis of flavors and interested in what kind of flavor components it cotains. I can't ignore such a smell because I'm involved in analysis of flavors and interested in what kind of flavor components it cotains. Correct, but I question if flavour is really the word you're looking for. Perhaps smell instead. Flavour is generally used in reference to taste. I can't ignore such a smell because I'm involved in the analysis of flavors and interested in what kind of flavor components it contains. |
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Vanillin, which is extracted from an essential oil of vanilla, is hard to volatilize compared with other flavor components. Vanillin, which is extracted from an essential oil of vanilla, is hard to volatilize compared with other flavor components. Volatilize could be a term you are familiar with in industry. I am not, but it does appear to be valid. |
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Therefore, the smell hardly disappears from your nose and retain for a long time. Therefore, the smell hardly disappears from your nose and re retain more means to hold/to keep as opposed to stay/remain. Therefore, the smell Just an alternative to consider. |
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Vanilla-like smell won't remove from my fingers (under my fingernails) for a few days when I handled vanillin at my work. Vanilla-like smell won't won't and handle need to pair together. An alternate way to write this would be: Vanilla-like smell wouldn't leave my fingers (under my fingernails) for a few days when I handled vanillin at my work. (wouldn't and handled are matched here) |
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I hope you should consider the amount of the perfume you put on and how the aroma would change with time carefully. I hope you Using conditional would/should here doesn't work correctly. You are giving advice for something that someone should do in the future and thus a future tense should be used. |
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