Dec. 11, 2022
Hi Ha-yoon,
How is everything going? In the last mail you told me you were thinking about becoming vegetarian. I looked for some information about it.
The first you have to keep in mind is that it can be a hard transition, especially if your current diet is highly based on animal products or if you usually go out to eat.
A way to make change smoother, could be think about the very good you're doing to the animals and the environment with your new lifestyle.
Although, the way I see it, the most important over the change is your health. Eating more vegetables and fruits would really improve it, you'll get more nutrients improving your immune system.
But, on the other hand, you'll have to check your B12 vitamin levels regularly. Due to the fact, that this vitamin isn't present in vegetarian food.
Let me know if this information helps to make up your mind.
Best regards.
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Hi Ha-yoon, |
How is everything going? |
In the last mail you told me you were thinking about becoming vegetarian. In If handwritten, maybe "mail" --> "letter". In the last mailing you told me you were thinking about becoming vegetarian. OR¶ 'last mail' is too general a term, be more specific with either 'last mailing' OR 'your last letter' |
I looked for some information about it. |
The first you have to keep in mind is that it can be a hard transition, especially if your current diet is highly based on animal products or if you usually go out to eat.
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A way to make change smoother, could be think about the very good you're doing to the animals and the environment with your new lifestyle. A way to make the change smoother A way to make the change smoother, could be to think about the very good you're doing there are a few filler words missing. |
Although, the way I see it, the most important over the change is your health. Although, the way I see it, the most important
Although is not necessay here, the word order needs to be adjusted. |
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But, on the other hand, you'll have to check your B12 vitamin levels regularly. But, on the other hand, you'll have to check your |
Due to the fact, that this vitamin isn't present in vegetarian food.
Moved this clause to the sentence before; it is incomplete
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Let me know if this information helps to make up your mind. Let me know if this information helps Let me know if this information help Sounds awkward |
Best regards. Best This seems like a casual letter, right? They are your friend. "Best regards" sounds like a business email. You could also say "From, [yourname]" |
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