Jan. 19, 2020
PAUCITY OF MEAT
Always put enough meat into your customers’ pizza!
The action took place in Spartburg, South Carolina in the early morning hours on March 8th in 2018. A man entered a Taco Bell restaurant wanting a Mexican pizza. But a problem arose. As the man said, the pizza “could have used more meat”. So the man got into an argument with the employee who eventually remade the pizza. The man, however, was equally displeased with the amount of meat in the new pizza. Now, ask yourself what is your MO when you are in such situation. Whatever your answer is, that’s not what the guy did.
The story went down as the guy demanded a refund but he didn’t get any since there was no manager on the premises. The man then became enraged, declaring that he “would show the employee how to make his pizza the appropriate way”… and he did! According to the police protocol, “the man then walked behind the counter into the kitchen area and began making his own pizza. The man was angry and upset and was using foul language in response to employee’s repeated demands to leave the Taco Bell”. The man subsequently left the Taco Bell with the pizza. The fact that the guy walked and made his pizza by himself is quite shocking and one would probably guess that’s the end of the story… But wait, it gets better. The only claim the Taco Bell had was that “the man didn’t follow official guidelines when being in the kitchen”. The story ends like that, with the police unleashed and the man on the loose with presumably excessive amount of meat in his Mexican pizza. The meat hog (please suggest any other phrases/words) hasn’t been found yet.
Always put enough meat ionto your customers’ pizza!
As the man said, the pizza “could have used more meat”. So the man got into an argument with the employee who eventually remade the pizza. The man, however, was equally displeased with the amount of meat ion the new pizza. Now, ask yourself what is your MO when you are in such situation. Whatever your answer is, that’s not what the guy did.
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The story went down aswith the guy demandeding a refund but he didn’t get anyone since there was no manager on the premises. The man then became enraged, declaring that he “would show the employee how to make his pizza the appropriate way”… and he did!
how you had it was probably also fine, it's just a bit awkward.
According to the police protocolreport, “the man then walked behind the counter into the kitchen area and began making his own pizza. The man was angry and upset and was using foul language in response to employee’s repeated demands to leave the Taco Bell”. The man subsequently left the Taco Bell with the pizza. The fact that the guy walked and made his pizza by himself is quite shocking and one would probably guess that’s the end of the story… But wait, it gets better. The only claim the Taco Bell had was that “the man didn’t follow official guidelines when befor working in the kitchen”.
"protocol" is like a set of rules, so "report" fits better in this context.
The story ends like that, with the police unleashed and the man on the loose with presumably an excessive amount of meat ion his Mexican pizza.
The meat hog (please suggest any other phrases/words) hasn’t been found yet.
you could say "meat bandit" or "meat thief", but meat hog is great too.
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Overall great job and very well written! I only corrected some small things, and some things that help it sound a bit more natural.
Jan. 20, 2020
Thanks for the response. Was very helpful
PAUCITY OF MEAT
Always put enough meat into your customers’ pizza!
The action took place in Spartburg, South Carolina in the early morning hours on March 8th in 2018.
A man entered a Taco Bell restaurant wanting a Mexican pizza.
But a problem arose.
As the man said, the pizza “could have used more meat”. So the man got into an argument with the employee who eventually remade the pizza. The man, however, was equally displeased with the amount of meat in the new pizza. Now, ask yourself what is your MO when you are in such a situation. Whatever your answer is, that’s not what the guy did.
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The story went down as the guy demanded a refund but he didn’t get any since there was no manager on the premises. The man then became enraged, declaring that he “would show the employee how to make his pizza the appropriate way”… aAnd he did!
According to the police protocol, “the man then walked behind the counter into the kitchen area and began making his own pizza. The man was angry and upset and was using foul language in response to employee’s repeated demands to leave the Taco Bell”. The man subsequently left the Taco Bell with the pizza. The fact that the guy walked and made his pizza by himself is quite shocking and one would probably guess that’s the end of the story… But wait, it gets better. The only claim the Taco Bell had was that “the man didn’t follow official guidelines when being in the kitchen”.
Not 100% sure.
The story ends like that, with the police unreleashed and the man on the loose with presumably excessive amount of meat in his Mexican pizza.
The meat hog (please suggest any other phrases/words) hasn’t been found yet.
I think "hog" is fine.
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Not a native.
Jan. 19, 2020
Thanks!
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The action took place in Spartburg, South Carolina in the early morning hours on March 8th in 2018. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But a problem arose. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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As the man said, the pizza “could have used more meat”. So the man got into an argument with the employee who eventually remade the pizza. The man, however, was equally displeased with the amount of meat in the new pizza. Now, ask yourself what is your MO when you are in such situation. Whatever your answer is, that’s not what the guy did. The story went down as the guy demanded a refund but he didn’t get any since there was no manager on the premises. The man then became enraged, declaring that he “would show the employee how to make his pizza the appropriate way”… and he did! As the man said, the pizza “could have used more meat”. So the man got into an argument with the employee who eventually remade the pizza. The man, however, was equally displeased with the amount of meat in the new pizza. Now, ask yourself what is your MO when you are in such a situation. Whatever your answer is, that’s not what the guy did. As the man said, the pizza “could have used more meat”. So the man got into an argument with the employee who eventually remade the pizza. The man, however, was equally displeased with the amount of meat how you had it was probably also fine, it's just a bit awkward. |
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According to the police protocol, “the man then walked behind the counter into the kitchen area and began making his own pizza. The man was angry and upset and was using foul language in response to employee’s repeated demands to leave the Taco Bell”. The man subsequently left the Taco Bell with the pizza. The fact that the guy walked and made his pizza by himself is quite shocking and one would probably guess that’s the end of the story… But wait, it gets better. The only claim the Taco Bell had was that “the man didn’t follow official guidelines when being in the kitchen”. According to the police protocol, “the man then walked behind the counter into the kitchen area and began making his own pizza. The man was angry and upset and was using foul language in response to employee’s repeated demands to leave Not 100% sure. According to the police "protocol" is like a set of rules, so "report" fits better in this context. |
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The story ends like that, with the police unleashed and the man on the loose with presumably excessive amount of meat in his Mexican pizza. The story ends like that, with the police The story ends like that, with the police unleashed and the man on the loose with presumably an excessive amount of meat |
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The meat hog (please suggest any other phrases/words) hasn’t been found yet. The meat hog (please suggest any other phrases/words) hasn’t been found yet. I think "hog" is fine. The meat hog (please suggest any other phrases/words) hasn’t been found yet. you could say "meat bandit" or "meat thief", but meat hog is great too. |
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