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adichira

June 29, 2025

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Part 1: The Worst Best Friend

I am going to share with you a real situation that happened in my life. This story happened in Bogotá, Colombia. It was in 2014, when it was fashionable to be "flogger", "emo" or "fara". I was not a fashionable person hahaha. I had my best friend, Daniela. I considered her as my soul mate, but in a friendship version.

I learned good things from her, for example, don't be a "ñera" (it's a Colombian word that describes a bad person that likes drugs, stays in the street, or robs). She was such a guide to me in many aspects. But also, she gave me "good advice" that controlled what I thought, felt, and my decisions.

Parte 1: La peor mejor amiga

Voy a compartirles una historia real que sucedió en mi vida. Esta historia ocurrió en Bogotá, Colombia. Fue en 2014, cuando estaba de moda ser "flogger", "emo" o "fara". Yo no era una persona a la moda, jajajaja. Tenía una mejor amiga, Daniela. La consideraba como mi alma gemela, pero en versión de mejor amiga.

Aprendí cosas buenas de ella. Por ejemplo, no ser una 'ñera' (esta es una palabra colombiana que describe a una persona a la que le gustan las drogas, estar en la calle, o robar). Ella fue una guía para mí en muchos aspectos. Pero también me daba "buenos consejos" que controlaban lo que yo pensaba, sentía y decidía.

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PacificOcean's avatar
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I considered her as my soul mate, but in a friendship versionplatonic way.

What you wrote works just fine, but the word “platonic” works a lot better, as its definition is literally for non-sexual/romantic relationships :)

I learned good things from her, for example, don't be a "ñera" (it's a Colombian word that describes a bad person that likes drugs, stays ion the street, or robs).

She was such a guide to me in many aspects.

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This one had very minimal mistakes! I can read this clearly and get exactly what you’re trying to say. Good job! :)

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Part 1: The Worst Best Friend

I am going to share with you a real situation that happened in my life.

This story happened in Bogotá, Colombia.

It was in 2014, when it was fashionable to be a "flogger", "emo" or "fara".

I was not a fashionable person hahaha.

I had mya best friend, Daniela.

I considered her as my soul mate, but in a friendship version.

I learned good things from her, for example, don't be a "ñera" (it's a Colombian word that describes a bad person that likes drugs, stays in the street, or robs).

She was such a guide to me in many aspects.

But also, she gave me "good advice" that controllaffected what I thought, felt, and my decisions.

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adichira

June 30, 2025

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Hello! Thank your for your corrections, they are helpful to me :D

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Part 1: The Worst Best Friend

I am going to share with you a real situation from my life that happened in my life.Bogotá, Colombia.

Combined with the next sentence and slightly modified to accommodate it.

This story happened in Bogotá, Colombia.

It was in 2014, when it was fashionable to be "flogger", "emo" or "fara".

I was not a fashionable person hahaha.

I had my best friend, Daniela, who I considered as my soul mate, but in a friendship version.

Combined with the next sentence for smoothness.

I considered her as my soul mate, but in a friendship version.

I learned good things from her, for example, don'tnot to be a "ñera" (it's a Colombian word that describes a bad person that likes drugs, stays in the street, or robs).

Before the correction, if we take out the extra parts, the basic construction was "I learned do not be a ñera." For that reason, I think "not to be" works better: "I learned not to be a ñera."

But also, she gave me "good advice" that controlled what I thought, what I felt, and mythe decisions I made.

"however" would sound more natural here, or something like "But she also gave..." without the comma.

To use "but" how it is most commonly seen in writing, you could have a final sentence like this:

She was such a guide to me in many aspects, but she also gave me "good advice" that controlled what I thought, what I felt, and my decisions.

Typically, in a series or list of items or phrases, each item will have a similar format. The suggested correction here uses the same format for each item in the list.

Another option:

But also, she gave me "good advice" that controlled what I thought and felt and my decisions.

OR

But also, she gave me "good advice" that controlled my decisions and what I thought and felt.


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Since you seem to write clearly, spell adequately, and handle conventions appropriately, maybe consider trying to add more sentence variety/complexity to improve the smoothness of what is being said or written.

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adichira

June 30, 2025

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Hello! Thank you for your feedback. I going to practice your advice in the next part if my story.

I was not a fashionable person hahaha.

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Part 1: The Worst Best Friend

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I going to share with you a real situation that happened in my life.

This story happened in Bogotá, Colombia.

This story happened in Bogotá, Colombia.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It was in 2014, when there was fashionable to be "flogger", "emo" or "fara".

I was not at fashionable hahaha.

I had my best friend, Daniela.

I had my best friend, Daniela, who I considered as my soul mate, but in a friendship version.

Combined with the next sentence for smoothness.

I had mya best friend, Daniela.

I considered her as my soul mate, but in a friendship version.

I considered her as my soul mate, but in a friendship version.

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I considered her as my soul mate, but in a friendship versionplatonic way.

What you wrote works just fine, but the word “platonic” works a lot better, as its definition is literally for non-sexual/romantic relationships :)

I learned good things from her, for example, don't be a "ñera" (it's a Colombian word that describes a bad person that likes drugs, stay in the street, or robbing).

She was such a guide to me in many aspects.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

She was such a guide to me in many aspects.

But also, she gave me "good advices", so she controlled what I thought, felt, and until what I decided.

I learned good things from her, for example, don't be a "ñera" (it's a Colombian word that describes a bad person that likes drugs, stays in the street, or robs).

I learned good things from her, for example, don'tnot to be a "ñera" (it's a Colombian word that describes a bad person that likes drugs, stays in the street, or robs).

Before the correction, if we take out the extra parts, the basic construction was "I learned do not be a ñera." For that reason, I think "not to be" works better: "I learned not to be a ñera."

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I learned good things from her, for example, don't be a "ñera" (it's a Colombian word that describes a bad person that likes drugs, stays ion the street, or robs).

But also, she gave me "good advice", so she controlled what I thought, felt, and my decisions.

I am going to share with you a real situation that happened in my life.

I am going to share with you a real situation from my life that happened in my life.Bogotá, Colombia.

Combined with the next sentence and slightly modified to accommodate it.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It was in 2014, when it was fashionable to be "flogger", "emo" or "fara".

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It was in 2014, when it was fashionable to be a "flogger", "emo" or "fara".

But also, she gave me "good advice" that controlled what I thought, felt, and my decisions.

But also, she gave me "good advice" that controlled what I thought, what I felt, and mythe decisions I made.

"however" would sound more natural here, or something like "But she also gave..." without the comma. To use "but" how it is most commonly seen in writing, you could have a final sentence like this: She was such a guide to me in many aspects, but she also gave me "good advice" that controlled what I thought, what I felt, and my decisions. Typically, in a series or list of items or phrases, each item will have a similar format. The suggested correction here uses the same format for each item in the list. Another option: But also, she gave me "good advice" that controlled what I thought and felt and my decisions. OR But also, she gave me "good advice" that controlled my decisions and what I thought and felt.

But also, she gave me "good advice" that controllaffected what I thought, felt, and my decisions.

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