Jan. 17, 2021
Paraphrasing activity
Original
The young of ground-nesting warblers produce begging cheeps of higher frequencies than do their tree-nesting relatives. These higher-frequency sounds do not travel as far, and so may better conceal the individuals producing them, who are especially vulnerable to predators in their ground nests.
Paraphrase-1
Even though the offsprings of ground-nesting warblers produce high-frequency begging cheeps, they are less likely to be encountered by a predator as the sound do not travel much.
Paraphrase-2
Although ground nestling young warblers generate a higher frequency of begging cheeps than tree nesting birds, they stay safe since the sounds travel little. Therefore, predators unable to recognize the sounds of ground-nesting warblers.
Original
Do you enjoy watching movies? Have you felt that the characters or situations in a movie presented a lesson about how you should act, talk and look; or that movies taught you about the relationships you should cultivate or the values you should have?
• Paraphrasing
Movies enable people to learn important lessons, cultivate values, and know the importance of relations in the real world.
• Movies connect the audience through the characters that emulate public behavior. Also, it helps people to understand the principles, relations, and values. Thus, movies are shaping our lives.
• Movies aids people to know about the latest fashion trends, cultivate morals, and connect with the people. People will gain these aspects from a movie.
Original
Video games are also very distractive and it causes ADD “Attention deficient Disorder” which weakens your attention. What happens when you play for a lot of hours. Because if you play for hours, how are you supposed to concentrate on your stuff? How are you supposed to concentrate on your quizzes? How are you gonna have a good future/college? How are you going to end up working to earn money?
Paraphrasing
• One of the detrimental effects of video games is ADHD which means spending more hours on computer games and less time on academics. As a result, children are losing their focus on their education and their long-term goals.
• Video games distract children from paying attention to their education since they spent hours on it and less likely to study. Consequently, losing their interest in a career or a college degree.
Hi, need some help with phrasing. I would like to know whether the paraphrasing makes any meaning. Thanks in advance.
Paraphrasing activity
Original
The young of ground-nesting warblers produce begging cheeps of higher frequencies than do their tree-nesting relatives.
These higher-frequency sounds do not travel as far, and so may better conceal the individuals producing them, who are especially vulnerable to predators in their ground nests.
Paraphrase-1
Even though tThe offsprings of ground-nesting warblers produce high-frequency begging cheeps, they are less likely to be encountered by a predator as the sounds because they produce high-frequency begging cheeps, which do not travel as much.
I would not use "even though" here because it makes it seem like they are able to conceal themselves despite the higher frequency cheeps, when in reality it is the higher frequency that is concealing them.
Paraphrase-2
Although gGround nestling young warblers generate a higher frequency of begging cheeps than tree nesting birds, so they stay safe since the sounds travel little.
Again, I would not use "although" because it makes it sound like the birds are overcoming an obstacle (higher frequency) when the higher frequency is what is helping them. You might say "although" or "even though" about the fact that they nest on the ground.
Therefore, predators are unable to recognize the sounds of ground-nesting warblers.
Do you enjoy watching movies?
Have you felt that the characters or situations in a movie presented a lesson about how you should act, talk and look; or that movies taught you about the relationships you should cultivate or the values you should have?
• Paraphrasing
Movies enable people to learn important lessons, cultivate values, and knowunderstand the importance of relationships in the real world.
• Movies connect the audience through the characters that emulate public behavior.
Also, it helps people to understand the principles, relations, and values.
Thus, movies are shaping our lives.
• Movies aids people to know about the latest fashion trends, cultivate morals, and connect with other people.
People will gafind these aspects ofrom a movie helpful.
A better way to use aspects in this sentence
Original
Video games are also very distractiveng and it causes ADD “Attention deficient Disorder” which weakens your attention.
WhatThis happens when you play for a lot of hours.,
Combine with next sentence (you shouldn't begin a sentence with because)
Because if you play for hours, how are you supposed to concentrate on your stuff?
How are you supposed to concentrate on your quizzes?
How are you gonnaing to have a good future/get into college?
Gonna is not generally used in written English
How are you going to end up working to earn money?
Paraphrasing
• One of the detrimental effects of video games is ADHD which means spending more hours on computer games and less time on academics.
As a result, children are losing their focus on their education and their long-term goals.
• Video games distract children from paying attention to their education since they spentd hours on it andplaying and are therefore less likely to study.
Matching tense
Consequently, losing theirthey lose interest in a career or a college degree.
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The young of ground-nesting warblers produce begging cheeps of higher frequencies than do their tree-nesting relatives. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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These higher-frequency sounds do not travel as far, and so may better conceal the individuals producing them, who are especially vulnerable to predators in their ground nests. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Even though the offsprings of ground-nesting warblers produce high-frequency begging cheeps, they are less likely to be encountered by a predator as the sound do not travel much.
I would not use "even though" here because it makes it seem like they are able to conceal themselves despite the higher frequency cheeps, when in reality it is the higher frequency that is concealing them. |
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Although ground nestling young warblers generate a higher frequency of begging cheeps than tree nesting birds, they stay safe since the sounds travel little.
Again, I would not use "although" because it makes it sound like the birds are overcoming an obstacle (higher frequency) when the higher frequency is what is helping them. You might say "although" or "even though" about the fact that they nest on the ground. |
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Therefore, predators unable to recognize the sounds of ground-nesting warblers. Therefore, predators are unable to recognize the sounds of ground-nesting warblers. |
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Do you enjoy watching movies? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Have you felt that the characters or situations in a movie presented a lesson about how you should act, talk and look; or that movies taught you about the relationships you should cultivate or the values you should have? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Movies enable people to learn important lessons, cultivate values, and know the importance of relations in the real world. Movies enable people to learn important lessons, cultivate values, and |
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• Movies connect the audience through the characters that emulate public behavior. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Also, it helps people to understand the principles, relations, and values. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Thus, movies are shaping our lives. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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• Movies aids people to know about the latest fashion trends, cultivate morals, and connect with the people. • Movies aid |
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People will gain these aspects from a movie. People will A better way to use aspects in this sentence |
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Video games are also very distractive and it causes ADD “Attention deficient Disorder” which weakens your attention. Video games are also very distracti |
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What happens when you play for a lot of hours.
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Because if you play for hours, how are you supposed to concentrate on your stuff? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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How are you supposed to concentrate on your quizzes? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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How are you gonna have a good future/college? How are you go Gonna is not generally used in written English |
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How are you going to end up working to earn money? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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• One of the detrimental effects of video games is ADHD which means spending more hours on computer games and less time on academics. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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As a result, children are losing their focus on their education and their long-term goals. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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• Video games distract children from paying attention to their education since they spent hours on it and less likely to study. • Video games distract children from paying attention to their education since they spen Matching tense |
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Consequently, losing their interest in a career or a college degree. Consequently, |
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