Sept. 24, 2021
Packing My Bag For Trip
Before I take trips, I usually pack my bags first.
First, I pack my clothes for the weather.
If it is possible to swim there, I also take my swimming suits.
Next, I pack many drugs for emergency.
Digestive medicine and vulnerably are the most important for me.
Sometimes, I take time difference medicine for time naps
Last, I pack rechargers for my camera, cell phone.
I really like taking pictures during trip, so my camera always needs a lot of power.
For my map and translation apps, my cell phone is the essential as well.
To keep my electronic devices, Rechargers are in my bag.
Once again, These are things when I pack for trips
Packing My Bag For Trip
Packing My Bag For A Trip
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Packing My Bag For Trips
Before I take trips, I usually pack my bags first.
The sentence is grammatically correct. However, I'm not sure how informative, or how necessary, such a sentence is to the reader.
First, I pack my clothes for the weather.
If it is possible to swim there, I also take my swimming suits.
Next, I pack many drugs for emergency.
Next, I pack many drugs for emergency situations.
OR
Next, I pack many drugs for emergencies.
Digestive medicine and vulnerably are the most important for me.
I don't understand what is meant by "vulnerability".
Sometimes, I take time difference medicine for time naps
The sentence is grammatically correct and understandable but it is not a common way to say what you possibly mean. Perhaps you mean:
"Sometimes, I take medication to help with sleeping difficulties during long journeys."
Last, I pack rechargers for my camera, cell phone.
Last, I pack chargers for my camera and cell phone.
I really like taking pictures during a trip, so my camera always needs a lot of power.
For my map and translation apps, my cell phone is the essential as well.
To keep my electronic devices, Rechargers are in my bag.
To keep my electronic devices charged up, I put the chargers in my bag.
I think you don't even need to make mention of this as you have already talked about the chargers above.
Once again, These are things when I pack for trips
It wouldn't matter what language you wrote this sentence in because it really isn't necessary!
Feedback
Some good writing points here, especially your appropriate use of paragraphs.
There are some basic areas of grammar and sentence building that you need to look out for. Hopefully, my comments will help you.
I see that you have now written many journals. Do you feel you are getting better in your writing in English? May i suggest that you make a list of things you are still making mistakes with, and then really concentrate on those areas so that your English writing ability improves even more!
Sincerely,
mjm
Oct. 2, 2021
Thank you so much. I also agree that I need to make a list of my mistakes as your advice. I will try to do that.
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Packing My Bag For Trip Packing My Bag For Trip Packing My Bag For A Trip OR Packing My Bag For Trips |
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Before I take trips, I usually pack my bags first. Before I take trips, I usually pack my bags first. The sentence is grammatically correct. However, I'm not sure how informative, or how necessary, such a sentence is to the reader. |
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First, I pack my clothes for the weather. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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If it is possible to swim there, I also take my swimming suits. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Next, I pack many drugs for emergency. Next, I pack many drugs for emergency. Next, I pack many drugs for emergency situations. OR Next, I pack many drugs for emergencies. |
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Digestive medicine and vulnerably are the most important for me. Digestive medicine and vulnerably are the most important for me. I don't understand what is meant by "vulnerability". |
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Sometimes, I take time difference medicine for time naps Sometimes, I take time difference medicine for time naps The sentence is grammatically correct and understandable but it is not a common way to say what you possibly mean. Perhaps you mean: "Sometimes, I take medication to help with sleeping difficulties during long journeys." |
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Last, I pack rechargers for my camera, cell phone. Last, I pack rechargers for my camera, cell phone. Last, I pack chargers for my camera and cell phone. |
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I really like taking pictures during trip, so my camera always needs a lot of power. I really like taking pictures during a trip, so my camera always needs a lot of power. |
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For my map and translation apps, my cell phone is the essential as well. For my map and translation apps, my cell phone is |
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To keep my electronic devices, Rechargers are in my bag. To keep my electronic devices, Rechargers are in my bag. To keep my electronic devices charged up, I put the chargers in my bag. I think you don't even need to make mention of this as you have already talked about the chargers above. |
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Once again, These are things when I pack for trips Once again, These are things when I pack for trips It wouldn't matter what language you wrote this sentence in because it really isn't necessary! |
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