Nov. 6, 2020
Packing
I'm planning to go up to the top of a mountain with an elevation of 2200 meters by ropeway. Evertime I go on a trip, it takes a long time to choose an outerwear that I would bring. I don't want to get cold, while I don't want to pack too much stuff.
標高2200メートルの山の頂上にロープウェイで登る予定があります。旅行をする時はいつも、どんな上着を持ってくかなかなか決められません。寒いのは嫌だけど、荷物をたくさん持ってきたくないです。
Packing
I'm planning to go up by ropeway to the top of a mountain with an elevation of 2200 meters by ropeway.
Evertime I go on a trip, it takes a long time to choose anthe outerwear that I would bringI need.
I don't want to get cold, while Ibut I also don't want to pack too much stuff.
Nov. 6, 2020
Thank you for the corrections ^^
I'm planning to go up to the top of a mountain with an elevation of 2200 meters by ropeway.
Every time I go on a trip, it takes a long time to choose anthe outerwear that I would bring.
For the second half of this sentence, it would be more natural to say something like "it takes me a long time to choose what outerwear I should bring."
I don't want to get cold, whilebut I don't want to pack too much stuff.
Not grammatically incorrect, but it feels more natural to use a word like "but" here in my opinion.
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Good job!
Nov. 6, 2020
Thank you for the corrections. It helps me a lot.
ありがとうございます！勉強になりました^^
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I'm planning to go up to the top of a mountain with an elevation of 2200 meters by ropeway. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I'm planning to go up by ropeway to the top of a mountain with an elevation of 2200 meters |
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Evertime I go on a trip, it takes a long time to choose an outerwear that I would bring. Every time I go on a trip, it takes a long time to choose For the second half of this sentence, it would be more natural to say something like "it takes me a long time to choose what outerwear I should bring." Evertime I go on a trip, it takes a long time to choose |
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I don't want to get cold, while I don't want to pack too much stuff. I don't want to get cold, Not grammatically incorrect, but it feels more natural to use a word like "but" here in my opinion. I don't want to get cold, |
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