Hey, you know what!? Hey, you know what?

When I was making stirrcrambled eggs with tomatoes, I smelled something burning! When I was making scrambled eggs with tomatoes, I smelled something burning!

When I was making stirrctrambled eggs with tomatoes, I smelledt something burning! When I was making sctrambled eggs with tomatoes, I smelt something burning!

When I was making stirr-fried eggs with tomatoes, I smelled something burning! When I was making stir-fried eggs with tomatoes, I smelled something burning!

l looked around doubtfullyconfused. l looked around confused.

doubtfully doesn't make a lot of sense here

l looked around doubtfullyconfused. l looked around confused.

"Everything i's normal, what's the matter?" "Everything's normal, what's the matter?"

Stillo, l kept cooking. So, l kept cooking.

All of a sudden, a red light flashed in my line of sight. All of a sudden, a red light flashed in my line of sight.

this sounds more natural

All of a sudden, a red light flashed in my sI saw a flash of red light. All of a sudden, I saw a flash of red light.

All of a sudden, a red light flashed in my sighteyes. All of a sudden, a red light flashed in my eyes.

The handlfire ofn the pressure cooker was being burned by the firstove was burning the handle onf the stovepressure cooker. The fire on the stove was burning the handle of the pressure cooker.

Active voice (fire burning handle) has a more urgent feeling than passive voice (handle was being burned)

I quickly moved it out of the way, but it didn't workwas of no use. I quickly moved it out of the way, but it was of no use.

This sounds more natural and is more specific, "it didn't work" is unclear and a bit awkward

I quickly moved it out of the way, but it didn't workwas too late. I quickly moved it out of the way, but it was too late.

I quickly moved it out of the way, but it didn't work. I quickly moved it out of the way, but it didn't work.

Meaning is a little confusing because I am not sure what 'it' is. Did moving the handle not work? Did the handle of the pressure cooker not work? Did the pressure cooker not work?